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@VhagarYou don't always need a completely unique bio for people, not everyone left on a snowy peak to die as a child and raised by wolves and trained in ancient magic by a Bloodmoon Shaman o' Gork. Mercenaries are often times just normal people or military vets who have enough skill/training to be a soldier but don't want to commit to a national army.


Very, very good point.
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@VhagarThanks, I like reading unique characters, but people who try to make them too unique get on my never since from a realistic view most people will have a pretty average life, not one that involves stuff of mythos and fairytales.
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Come onto the Pirate/Titanpad if you need someone to bounce ideas off of, I'm on it right now.
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Thanks, I'm feeling inspired at the moment so I'm going to crack on, but if I get stuck I'll jump on and rack your brains :)
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@Gcold Done. I've expanded Felix' personality by couple short paragraphs.




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Something about his background doesn't seem right and I can't quite put my finger on it... please, have a read, rip it to pieces, and let me know what needs changing.

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Something about his background doesn't seem right and I can't quite put my finger on it... please, have a read, rip it to pieces, and let me know what needs changing.



I only have two gripes. One is with the armor and the other is with the weapon. Also, just a quick fyi, I'd class a glaive as a spear(-type weapon, or a polearm, as it were). My other point about the weapon is that glaives were used in 15-16th century Europe specifically to counter better armored knights, which were so outfitted at the time that they were basically invincible to anyone other than another knight. This being the case, its difficulty with armor as you describe isn't a thing. One would stab for weak-points like gaps in the armor around the joints and the eye-slits, as well as that spike on the back and a good thrust from the tip of the head able to pierce plate.

My gripe about the armor is that is almost very clearly a sci-fi portrait of a cyber-monk or something. Try to find something else.

Also, I'm making last-minute additions to Jorwen's affiliations and relations to other players section. I've also played around with skills and inventory, figured its fair game since we haven't started DON'T JUDGE ME. All in all, he now has a shield emblazoned with his insignia, as well as people in the camp knowing him either by his past service as a Stormcloak and his exploits therein and/or by him mending their clothing or fabric belongings. I have it that Sevine probably knows his name from her days in the Stormcloaks, and vice-versa, as well as him having a professional acquaintance with Sadann, both of them filling support roles while at camp.
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DON'T JUDGE ME.




@Vhagar It would depend on how he was trained with the weapon. If he preferred a slashing style, and the glaive is more blade than tip, 2H blade would be appropriate. If not, I would go with what Leiden said, spear. A spear-focused glaive would not have too much trouble defeating armor of its own strength, however, against anything tougher it's gonna be an uphill battle. Blade-focused glaive does have more trouble against equal armor, but, you gain a wider arc of attack. I'll let you decide which one to take, if you want both, you can always split it into 2 adepts.

Also something Leiden said, that picture is not very relevant in a fantasy setting.

3 different blends of poison is too much for an apprentice, you can change to 3 of the same type.

While 5'11 is slightly below average for an Redguard, it is about average in the context of all races.

He's not exactly sensitive to all elements, and definitely resistant against sand. I would change it to weakness to frost.

Look, there's nothing wrong with your background and personality, and they're certainly well written. But, both are very average and cliche at parts. We can't reject you because your character is not unique enough, but I would certainly take my time and try to spice it up a little.


Everyone else, I'll be making a list of NPCs in the camp. Some of your characters might be affiliated with a couple of them.

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@gcoldOoo... fun.

*Goes to check the Chars one more time*

Oi, screw you. Lucex doesn't have crossdressing as his offical job, he's a hunter not an ale wench :T

Still tho, not going to say it isn't funny xP
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Quick question for @gcold: I was thinking of replacing Tennant's Novice Mercantile skill with Novice Provisioning, so he knows how to make non-carbonated Lemonade and Fruit Juice, und literally nuzhing else. More of a novelty than anything else, unlike his Woodworking ability. Is that acceptable?
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Oi, screw you. Lucex doesn't have crossdressing as his offical job, he's a hunter not an ale wench :T


Could've fooled me....
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Quick question for @gcold: I was thinking of replacing Tennant's Novice Mercantile skill with Novice Provisioning, so he knows how to make non-carbonated Lemonade and Fruit Juice, und literally nuzhing else. More of a novelty than anything else, unlike his Woodworking ability. Is that acceptable?


Go for it.
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Could've fooled me....


I'm actually now tempted to make him a full on bishonen trap now XD
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I'm actually now tempted to make him a full on bishonen trap now XD


One of my favorite characters from the Broken Empire trilogy was an assassin who was a master of disguise. Jorg, the main character, remarks that he once took out a contract that involved him crossdressing.
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I only have two gripes. One is with the armor and the other is with the weapon. Also, just a quick fyi, I'd class a glaive as a spear(-type weapon, or a polearm, as it were). My other point about the weapon is that glaives were used in 15-16th century Europe specifically to counter better armored knights, which were so outfitted at the time that they were basically invincible to anyone other than another knight. This being the case, its difficulty with armor as you describe isn't a thing. One would stab for weak-points like gaps in the armor around the joints and the eye-slits, as well as that spike on the back and a good thrust from the tip of the head able to pierce plate.

My gripe about the armor is that is almost very clearly a sci-fi portrait of a cyber-monk or something. Try to find something else.

Also, I'm making last-minute additions to Jorwen's affiliations and relations to other players section. I've also played around with skills and inventory, figured its fair game since we haven't started DON'T JUDGE ME. All in all, he now has a shield emblazoned with his insignia, as well as people in the camp knowing him either by his past service as a Stormcloak and his exploits therein and/or by him mending their clothing or fabric belongings. I have it that Sevine probably knows his name from her days in the Stormcloaks, and vice-versa, as well as him having a professional acquaintance with Sadann, both of them filling support roles while at camp.


I would expect Sevine to know Jorwen, perhaps she knows him from him mending a torn hem for her? I would be fine if you listed her as Jorwen knowing her. Nonetheless, since they've served in the civil war, there's a possibility they could have been in the same encampment together, and a man with that big of a beard, would definitely stick in her mind, so she would recognize him if she saw him again.
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One of my favorite characters from the Broken Empire trilogy was an assassin who was a master of disguise. Jorg, the main character, remarks that he once took out a contract that involved him crossdressing.


I'm going to take that as an approval of go femenize him in the name of Talos for the lols. @Gcold any objections?
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Once the NPC list is made, anyone just want to do a big collab of meeting each other?
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Once the NPC list is made, anyone just want to do a big collab of meeting each other?


Where? In the pad?
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Yea, the pad @ClocktowerEchos
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Well now hold on a minute... what pad?
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