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Okay, so that's three responses of meh quality done, but I'm also going to try and give Frengo and Killbox things to do so I'm not done.
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@Frengo I may need help with the Rangers :p as they were your creation especially.
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@KillBox

Okay so I did not respond to you because I think there is a misconception. Now this is my fault for not putting out lore on all the places involved in all this time. That's on me and my sloth, but for the record the capitol city is not Oakorth, but Clandstein, currently only represented as the castle on the map. So my question to you is whether you want to start in Oakoarth or Clandstein?
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and now we've got white walkers on our tail?! Lol not complaining, super excited, and now sure how Liara is going to survive :p
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@IcePezz

Well I probably should have made it less enemies, but you lot did handle it in a less than ideal manner. I think running away is probably a good idea.
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Lol I think so too
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To anyone who wants to go there, or who needs to interact with my Rangers, I present to you this:


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@Cultural Titan

Wherever the king is, and I assume that would be Cladstein :p
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Well, minus Zombies that went well. Fire throwing guy is going to splat probably.
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@Frengo I may need help with the Rangers :p as they were your creation especially.


Uh huh, I need to read all the recent posts and see what's what.

In the meantime, in an act of great coincidence, I just posted a whole lore section of Galuntrung Keep for you to read. It provides some details on the keep itself, and the Rangers.

Will get back to you as soon as I'm up to speed with the situation.
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@Frengo

I'll need to read all of that at some point... Got some things to take care of though.

@KillBox

Just edit it so that he's in Clandstein and I will give you something to do, hopefully soon.

@Absolis

As Kaird is player controlled I don't think he'll be going down that easily, besides, he has backup even if the bandits are pansies.
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@Cultural Titan Shouldn't be much for you to quarrel about, it's only designed to add some flesh to the bone. However, you do have an eager eye for lore conflicts, so I can at least be confident that any mistakes on my part will be quickly detected and corrected. :)

I'll be contacting you over Oglaff soon, so that I don't end up breaking stuff.

Also, well done for that entry, from experience I know it's a bastard when you have to be in fifty places at once in one post.

@IcePezz Gorgeous post by the way, superb! Liara's flare really came through in that entry, I look forward to seeing what that gal can do.

@Absolis I love your writing style, it's very unique, but sometimes I get a bit confused. You use the word "would" alot, and whilst there's nothing wrong with that, it brings my brain to a halt sometimes lol. You know, I starting thinking "wait, so she hasn't done that yet? Oh, no she has, I think?"

But don't change a thing, it works well once I get my head around the style :)

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@Frengo

So problem in the first sentence. It has only been Galuntrung keep for twentyish years. Before that it was a full castle. However the way its written, it makes it seem like its just the one structure for the whole time. I know you refer to it as a castle later, but I'm just going to mention everything. This also causes a problem with the third paragraph as there would be little time between the castle's fall and Kalar taking it over. However if we want to create more of a time gap there then I think we can work something out.

The King did come to help. Just not until after the Stein family was down to just Raven and the castle was destroyed. The way it is there though it reads as if he never came at all.

That's about it.
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@Frengo

So problem in the first sentence. It has only been Galuntrung keep for twentyish years. Before that it was a full castle. However the way its written, it makes it seem like its just the one structure for the whole time. I know you refer to it as a castle later, but I'm just going to mention everything. This also causes a problem with the third paragraph as there would be little time between the castle's fall and Kalar taking it over. However if we want to create more of a time gap there then I think we can work something out.

The King did come to help. Just not until after the Stein family was down to just Raven and the castle was destroyed. The way it is there though it reads as if he never came at all.

That's about it.


So I didn't do too bad then.

The first error is a more related to how I wrote and can be fixed easily, the second problem is due to me thinking Raven was really old as his age was "?", and third problem was me misunderstanding what you meant by the King marching for his own glory - I thought you meant he took his time getting there, because he didn't like the Steins and wanted them to die so they didn't end up taking the spotlight in any victorious outcome, as opposed to racing out to save them.

So how old is Raven? How long ago since Galuntrung Castle got wrecked? It matters very little to me, I just thought it happened a long time ago. The more information you can provide, the more accurately I can colour in your world for you :)

Unless the information is already there, and I am just a moronic tool that can't read properly... which is perfectly possible. I have been known to be stupid, on many occasions.

Alternatively, you're more than welcome to do the lore on the keep, if you would be more comfortable with that. I was just trying to lighten your load a little.
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@frengo thank you! That's a great thing for me to hear. I do use would alot, but that's because I tend to take a bit more initiative, and plan things out. So the would there to leave it open for people to stop me.

@cultural titan it was a bit of a joke. He killed Kalar and now has a wolf bard sending sounds to him and Liara ready to rip his throat out.
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@Frengo

You are right about the your impression of the king, but he still came and the way it was written it sounds like he never came, which is different. Raven has been dead 20 yearsish because I wanted to tie it in with the previous king, but if peole think he should be more ancient then I can work with that.
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@Frengo

You are right about the your impression of the king, but he still came and the way it was written it sounds like he never came, which is different. Raven has been dead 20 yearsish because I wanted to tie it in with the previous king, but if peole think he should be more ancient then I can work with that.


That's okay dude, I'll have another crack at writing it. My apologies, I admit that I am not the best writer... I sorta just start typing and run with it, which can lead to inconsistencies and what not, and even proof-reading still leaves glaring errors. But hey, that's why I joined this forum, so that I could just f**k up relentlessly until I start improving :D ... just means you guys have to bare the brunt of my shenanigans.

As for Raven, it's entirely up to you. Personally I think old undead = best undead, but maybe this RP needs a sexier, younger model.

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@Frengo thank you thank you thank you. I feel a bit intimidated by the talent here, I'm just trying to keep up with ya'll.

@Cultural Titan sorry if I messed up any plans or went about something in a different direction than what you were looking for. Running will definitely be a course of action she will push for, I just want to give @Makrinagon a chance to post before she issues that retreat.
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@Frengo

You are not allowed to knock your own writing until it slips bellow my abilities. I only said raven was dead for 20 years though, not how old he was when he died. which was still not old, but whatever.

@IcePezz

No need to apologize. It wasn't supposed to turn out this way. I would personally blame Adria as the source of how everything went wrong.

For the record did everyone forget about the ten zombies? Because I've been holding onto them flanking in behind you for a long time now.
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Adria was just trying to be nice. Its not her fault bandits and cultists are ugly.

On another note, my characters do that alot. Whether I want them to or not. I make a splash where ever I go. Suffice to say, I would much rather be using Adria as she was meant, rather then a fighter.
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