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@The SurvivorLooking good, I would have preferred that you used an anime/art picture instead of something real but since I failed to mention that, you can keep it
You do have a bit of derp in the equipment section tho.

@SukuSo you are saying you're finding hard to put her into the over lore of Deaus? Just PM me and hopefully we can work something out/explain somethings.

@Evil SnowmanI will admit I didn't expect someone Egyptian descent on a not-Asia planet. xD
If you want, you can either change her entire name or just her last name, or keep it, all up to you.
As for the sheet itself, I like it; laughed a bit at the traits section

@Dead CruiserI like it. Although Imperia is not a vassal city-state of anyone; its the capital of the Empire.
The only other minor issue I have with your sheet is that I thought your guy was dripping blood everywhere he walked which was a very interesting aesthetic I will admit xD
Don't worry about actually having to change it though, I was just doing a double-take.

@Damiann47Accepted, have a gift:

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Also @All, slight modification to the scifi CS. "Race" has been removed since I will admit I was trying to be a smartass and test people with that one, one of the first things in the OP said that the Primarch had removed the concept of religion and ethnicity/race. My bad >.>
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Bit of a misunderstanding; I meant that Aquilonia is a vassal of Imperia.
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@ClocktowerEchos ah found it. Fixed.
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@The Survivor just going to say, I love your avi/signature. :D

I'll get my CS up later today, after Physics and a Calculus exam.
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@ClocktowerEchos Wow my space Russian PRN guy was already accepted even though I'm not done with him yet.

So... I have to insult you now. Um, your cat sucks, if you don't have a cat then its your dog. If you don't have pets then just any animal of your choice.
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@Damiann47I was talking about what you have but then again I wrote that before I had coffee.

Also, the insults will only be once you move the character into the Char tab of the OOC that's coming soon™

PS: Your insult sucks. Like yo mama.
#GetRektM8
*makes stupid hand signs and dances around the room*
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@ClocktowerEchos Ah okay, I was honestly thinking "Yay, somehow my character was awesome enough to be accepted even though he's like... maybe 60%ish complete."

Anyway I'll let you know when I finish writing, which would be weird if I didn't actually.

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@ClocktowerEchos Thanks. As for her name I'll keep her name as it is since that's okay. It was hard enough to come up with that one.
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@Evil Snowmanlol, okay :)



Anyways, I finally have a character of my own and seeing that I end up judging all of your stuff, I thought it'd only be fair if you judged mine.
And also because I'm a narcissistic bastard



In other news, a proper OOC should be coming later today or tomorrow depending on how much of a lazy ass I am and how much work I have once I get home. ;-;
So more hype time! :D
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Wonderful, kind of reminding me of what I tend to build my Fantasy Noble into though similar things could be acknowledged the lives of both vary incredibly much.
Good job GM. :)
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@ClocktowerEchos So. I have a question. Can we be a bit creative with the lore? I'm not super into GATE or Warhammer, do we have to have our characters be from places that exist within those universes?
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@ClocktowerEchos So. I have a question. Can we be a bit creative with the lore? I'm not super into GATE or Warhammer, do we have to have our characters be from places that exist within those universes?


I'm not quite sure what you mean by that but this isn't supposed to be a warhammer x GATE crossover; characters are not supposed to directly come from either of those universes.
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@ClocktowerEchos So. I have a question. Can we be a bit creative with the lore? I'm not super into GATE or Warhammer, do we have to have our characters be from places that exist within those universes?


... Isn't that kind of already said and told to us in the first post? :)
Please, check it out again and I am sertain you will find the answer there.

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On another note, my character finally got done (kind of) any feedback you guys n girls have please let me know. :D
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@ClocktowerEchos Right, I feel like he's ready now, although I might still continue changing things around especially when I'm a little less tired.

Here's the link for convenience. http://www.roleplayerguild.com/posts/3425758
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@Damiann47Preferably I would have people just repost it but oh well xD

Now for some comments after a quick look over of your CS:

Kind of amazed you didn't decide to take a Fisto but that was up to you

Can I ask for you to put in something about the Kohrneheim and the Ennedi relations? Judging from your history and what's implied from the background information, you don't really say anything about it. PRN schools would most likely not show "the Reichmen" in a too positive light and it seems like the only contact you've had with the Ennedi is when you first got on to their planet.

Beyond that, it looks pretty good ^^
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@ClocktowerEchos Hmm yeah, I did think about trying to squeeze that into the history, but I felt like I couldn't exactly find a place to add that. Suppose to help explain why it relates to his personality, he really isn't a hateful person and to share in the anti-Kohrneheim prejudice felt out of place for the guy. Rather he doesn't hate Ennedi, but he simply doesn't like the zealousness that is usually associated with them. Suppose the basic reason is I felt that by taking away that anti-Kohrneheim sentiment there still should be a group he doesn't quite look at favorably. Might just take the Ennedi part out at any rate.

Heh, also yeah I would've gone for the Fallout 4 power fist if Soko was more of an infantry character... but its also not too late to change my mind, eh?
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@ClocktowerEchos Hmm yeah, I did think about trying to squeeze that into the history, but I felt like I couldn't exactly find a place to add that. Suppose to help explain why it relates to his personality, he really isn't a hateful person and to share in the anti-Kohrneheim prejudice felt out of place for the guy. Rather he doesn't hate Ennedi, but he simply doesn't like the zealousness that is usually associated with them. Suppose the basic reason is I felt that by taking away that anti-Kohrneheim sentiment there still should be a group he doesn't quite look at favorably. Might just take the Ennedi part out at any rate.


An idea I had is that at one point in his schooling, he studied some bits of Kohrneheim engineering and grew a deep respect for it. Then later in the military, High Terra had his unit attached to a Kohrneheim unit for rebel hunting or something and while the rest of his squad dislike said Reichmen unit, Soko became friends with a/a few of the Kohrnheim engineers.

As for the Ennedi part, it could be that at one point he was assigned there as garrison or R&R and their devotion just rubbed him the wrong way a little. You could also say you took part in the original battle that started this whole mess.

Heh, also yeah I would've gone for the Fallout 4 power fist if Soko was more of an infantry character... but its also not too late to change my mind, eh?


You may use the holy Fisto so long as you swear to go and fist the shit out of everyone you see for the Fisto is a god in his own right; a god that requires sacrifice \[+]/
HAIL SATAN FISTO

This also reminds me, @Dead Cruiser, were you part of the original attack/will be part of the attack on the soon-to-be GHU firebase?
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@ClocktowerEchos Please tell me if this will do fine. I feel a little bad, since others are so lengthy in comparison. I hope this will be efficient, please let me know if I need to add more, and I will.


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I have made changes though I expect to finish the tough stuff tomorrow. :)
The history will include the Wayfinder Household short story too.

PS, looking for someone whom could think of having a character with a history in the Wayfinder household as a guard or staff. :)

Anyway good night good folks. :)
See ya tomorrow.
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@ClocktowerEchosSorry, I guess I didn't read the OP as well as I had thought. Thanks for the help.
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