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Room for one more?
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Room for one more?


Seeing as very few people joined, sure.

@FantasyChic Good character, but a few things stood out to me;

1). I'm curious about the strength of these "telekinetic bullets." Like, do they hit with the strength of usual bullets? Or are they more like throwing a rock? I'm a tad unsure since you were rather brief with that aspect.

2). The backstory - specifically the way it starts - is a tad confusing to me. Because... you started it with her power manisfesting... but worded like there should be something before it.

3). Also, you don't need to put relations to friends and family (Or NPCs) in the dynamics section - since it's supposed to refer to other characters, rather than just whoever. You can keep it if you make a separate section (I put it in a hider in another rp).

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@Mr Allen JMind if I hop into this, always enjoy doing stuff in this universe. Might bring in my character from the Academy RP, and one new one that's currently floating in my head.
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@Mr Allen JMind if I hop into this, always enjoy doing stuff in this universe. Might bring in my character from the Academy RP, and one new one that's currently floating in my head.


sure

I'll add my other characters tomorrow.
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Sounds good, I'll start work on a character.
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Can't wait to see what ya'll come up with.
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@Mr Allen J

1: The bullets themselves would damage someone/something based on how much force she pushed with it. It wouldn't, say, go through a building, but with enough force it could shoot someone in the foot or something.

2: I can reword that. That's kind of where I wanted to start her biography.

3: I kind of took Fern's character sheet as inspiration in that regard with Salvador. I can move that to a different section if need be, though.
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@Mr Allen JSince I'm bringing the character from the academy back, would it be cool if I just continued him off from their as far as his backstory? If so, could you send me a synopsis of what happened, sense it seems Academy got attacked or some such after reading through your characters.
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going to work on a character once I get more sleep
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Working on my character but leaving for work in twenty minutes so it won't be finished till tomorrow :/
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@FernStone There's a coding error in Max's sheet. You didn't add another indent in her power section.

Both characters are accepted.


Thanks for pointing that out, I'll fix is when I fix all the lines :) I'll move the characters over to the character section later on

@FantasyChic IN regard to taken my sheets as inspiration, Sal is one of the character's I'm working on thus why he's in the dynamics section :)
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@Archmage MC I'm on my phone, so I'll have to be brief;

1). You NEED to describe her whole power. The name of the power ain't gonna cut it.

2). Magic doesn't exist in the setting so I don't know where she got a vaguely defined "magic satchel."

3). You should also cut the satchel and the teleporter since neither make sense.

4). Is her appearance the result of her power, or....?

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@Archmage MC I'm on my phone, so I'll have to be brief;

1). You NEED to describe her whole power. The name of the power ain't gonna cut it.

2). Magic doesn't exist in the setting so I don't know where she got a vaguely defined "magic satchel."

3). You should also cut the satchel and the teleporter since neither make sense.

4). Is her appearance the result of her power, or....?


1. Ok. They're just generic things that are on the Superpower wiki. What level of super strength is good?

2. Magic Satchel I'll explain what it really is. Basically its the trope name for an animation technique where the character pulls things out of nowhere as if they were carrying them all along, because lets face it. Imagine Doomguy actually lugging around all those guns, he'd look really weird. You might alternatively know it as Hammer Space. They obv can't pull out items that they aren't carrying. If you don't want it, its not such a big deal for her since she doesn't use weapons anyway.

3. Deadpool powerset, he has a teleporter and abuses the Magic Satchel thing like crazy. :P

4. Yep. Could say shes sorta axolotl based. I'll put that in.
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Oh my god. I have put my CS in the character tab by mistake. ><. I'm sorry.
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<Snipped quote by Mr Allen J>

1. Ok. They're just generic things that are on the Superpower wiki. What level of super strength is good?


Given her regeneration... maybe one ton should be enough. Though, you can mix both abilities together a bit more by saying that every time she uses her strength, she gets injured has to regenerate. Should be cool.

3. Deadpool powerset, he has a teleporter and abuses the Magic Satchel thing like crazy. :P


The thing is, you don't have to make a total emulation of Deadpool's abilities (Especially since 90% of what he does is a joke). The teleporter (and the satchel for that matter) seems tacked on to her power set (especially since you said she found it).
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@RedDusk Good character... only thing I want to note is the power. You were a tad vague on the upper limits on the power. Can he like shoot streams of electricity, or bolts of lightning? Also, since electricity is a devastating element I'll have to ask for more weaknesses.
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@Mr Allen J*points to previous question higher up on the page*
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