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@Ace of flames01 -- And just like calculus, there is more! And yes, I will be having character appearance pictures up by tonight and hopefully Adeline's backstory at the very least. From there, I'll work on Valentine, and then run through the rest of the characters. After all, royalty first, right? So to answer the other half of your statement -- yes, I haven't found the time to post 'em up until now, because tonight I'm gonna work through my profiles. Was there anything specific about their appearances that you wish / need to know?
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@Dracogenius are they gonna be hotties? XD
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@Dracogenius Alright. Its fine, I'll try to do my best to edit what is disallowed. My original intention was to have Lucifer's power only be effective in his own kingdom and have them be essentially powerless otherwise. But I will most likely change his ability. Unfortunately it looks like I may have to edit a lot but I will still give it to go.
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All good points! Thanks! I'll be editing the CS for your review.

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I've edited the CS for your review.
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@Cubix -- I almost didn't see that due to lack of ping. Whoops! However, I have reviewed your profile again. Approved. Feel free to post your profile in the character tab!
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@Dracogenius(Here are my re-written characters. Will delete the previous. Let me know if they work now. I hope they do. lol.)



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@SleepingSilence Hello! Glad to see you've revised your profiles! We would have responded sooner, but we like to go over profiles together and try to cut down on waiting time for profile reviews.

Regarding Erebus, I have a few concerns regarding his ability.
  • His ability should not be limitless - it has strengths, weaknesses, and limits.
  • Mentokinesis - or mind control - can knock people unconscious, alter memories, make people more agreeable, alter perceptions, and be used to attack people mentally, not unlike some forms of telekinesis.
  • In reference to "strong/holy wills", they do make a difference. Not necessarily holy, but strong? That refers to a mental barrier, which he would have to focus on breaking down before he can do affect the person.
  • Unless you discuss it with the player and the GMs beforehand, you'll only be able to influence NPCs and your own character. This is to avoid godmodding.

I like that there are rumours surrounding his age and past - he certainly would not be as old as Lucifer, but that doesn't stop people from speculating. Very exciting! He sounds like a tyrant, which is even better for as to why Lucifer has remained sealed off as it has.

In regards to Eros, I like the limit you've put on his ability. Having to sacrifice something of equal value in order to use his ability is perfect.
The only things I want to mention is that if Eros was exorcised, he wouldn't have appeared in Lucifer - he would have returned to Hell first. The other thing is that if he's in the army, he's most likely a warrior, not a servant! Please consider what weapon he would use in battle and add that to his profile. If you think he would have been knighted, however, put him down as a knight. Knights typically use a sword, whereas warriors are more versatile when it comes to weapons.
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@Wisp Well one thing I was going to do, (as a secret) The reason he is so powerful, is because he is the king. So the powers made sense from a story standpoint. but one weakness he was going to have is, for actual fighting and strength wise, he is essentially crippled. I don't like outright saying character's weaknesses because, it makes people more likely to "PLAYER KNOWLEDGE" the RP. Things that players know, that characters shouldn't. But I DO always have weaknesses in mind when making my characters. I was just going to pm you my weaknesses if you needed them, forgot to mention it. >.> But I understand your concern. My main point, was its hard to resist the effects themselves. A stronger will, would probably be effected for less time, I can clarify this. I did have one sentence mentioning, when he is trying to effect people outside his kingdom, its a lot less effective. (which I can also re-add.)

As for Eros, well it's not that he didn't appear in hell. It's just that he 'awoke' in the kingdom. So I don't necessary think you can't assume that already happen. But I can add a throwaway sentence if you'd like. I didn't give him a single weapon because, he can create them with his power. But if I 'NEED' a weapon, I can add one. I will change him to a 'knight' since you're right that it would make more sense.
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>it makes people more likely to "PLAYER KNOWLEDGE" the RP. Things that players know, that characters shouldn't.

If I might jump in here for a bit; The term you're looking for here is "metagame" or in this case "metagaming", which is indeed a very serious issue for roleplays, especially on freeform sites, along with power gaming. I would encourage you to pm either Draco or Wisp in regards to further figuring the limitations of your character's powers so as to avoid someone suddenly having their character "conveniently" find a way around you character's abilities.

As for the mentokinesis bit, while it does fit well with your character concept it's a bit of an overkill to have it be effective outright even outside of the kingdom of Lucifer. One of the common beliefs of mind control and other telekinetic and telepathic abilities is that the powers themselves are completely dependent on the willpower and mental fortitude of the user and the object said powers are being used on. A telepath could easily sway some average schmuck on the street if said schmuck isn't prepared for a mental tug of war, but let's say that the telepath tried using their abilities on a hardened fighter: The fighter might not have quite the same level of mental fortitude as the telepath, but he's likely going to have good deal of willpower which can present a challenge, but isn't impossible. The fighter's lack of mental fortitude makes them a tad easier to wrest control of, but that high willpower means that they can still resist to some extent, and that even the slightest lapse in concentration might be all that they need to break free

Now, let's say we have a telepath try their abilities on a telekinetic with high mental fortitude but low willpower, again it'd be a challenge, maybe even more so than the fighter because the telekinetic understands the mind a bit better, but this too can be overcome with enough effort. The telekinetic's mental fortitude makes them a much more complex target and definitely draws out the time needed to ensnare them, but the lack of willpower means that the telepath can rest a bit easier than they could with the fighter.

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Willpower = Harder to control but easier to ensnare.
Mental Fortitude = Harder to ensnare but easier to control.

Not to say that you character shouldn't be nigh impossible to resist in his own home, just that it should be a little bit harder for him to work his magic outside of Lucifer.
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@MonsieurShade Yep, that's another word for it. And I read it and I agree, I edited it to severely reduce effectiveness outside his kingdom. But, I can assure you. My character will not overkill or act overpowered (at least against other's real players characters.) I made it more for story than rules. Because I prefer story over rules myself. But I did figure I'd have to clarify it, hopefully its better with the edits.
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@SleepingSilence -- I will approve Eros for now and will work through with you about Erebus privately.

With that now said, I'm still alive despite my lack of presence. I'm bound to get over this sickness eventually...
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@Dracogenius Alrightie then. XD Hope you get better soon.
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We await your orders captain! *salutes and stands at attention*
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Slow realization that we're lacking rulers for Kingdom of Gabriel.

I will keep the thread up for a little longer once my profiles are finished in case any more people join to fill in these roles. If someone wants to make characters for such, be my guest, for as long as you are able to handle the amount of characters in your hands. The other option is to promote Octavia ( @Ace of flames01 ) from princess to queen, but only if they are okay with this.

We don't have to make decisions about it right now, it's just a heads up. We could also attempt the roleplay with missing King and Queen of Gabriel... But then... who's running the kingdom?

Nevertheless, no stress or worries, just wanted to point that out. Carry on as you all see fit. If anyone has a question, I have an answer, so do not be afraid to ask!
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Worst case scenario, we can make (hopefully temporary) NPCs to take the roles, though that does leave something to be desired in the roleplay. (Draco and I would be rping the rulers by ourselves, which is no good.)

If you're up for even just taking up one - king or queen - and therefore the parent(s) of Octavia, don't be shy! We just really need some established rulers for Gabriel to help push the plot along.
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I cannot believe I have time to make a secondary post, but to add onto what Wisp has said: The role may also be fulfilled by an older sibling of Octavia, implying that the original King and / or Queen of Gabriel have passed away... Given the year and three month time-jump since the assassination.

I will return later in the day after attending to lessons.
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@SleepingSilence -- Thank you for revising Erebus's ability. This should do for approval. Both profiles are approved; feel free to post them in the character tab.
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Quick notes for all of you.

1) Should I be pinging everyone whenever the roleplay is updated with lore and other important details (such as the idea coming up right now)? Not everyone likes to be pinged, or so I have learned from other sites, so I wish to check with everyone.

2) A NPC list is being made. This list of NPCs will be managed by Wisp under the Kingdom & Roles list. These NPCs, whether dead or alive, will be used for in-game purposes, such as recalling past monarchs or making reference to a specific NPC. Honestly, you could be like me and simply have the NPC list present because you don't wish to forget the names of non-playable character relatives or to keep track of NPCs in important places (i.e.. a NPC personal servant who's name was used one is perfectly fine for throwing under the list if you wish to reuse the name again). Some may not need to use this list, but persons like myself enjoy keeping track of characters... And Wisp likes lists. Feel free to send any additions over to them, for they will keep track of the NPCs! Sorted by Kingdoms as well, whether dead or alive.

@SleepingSilence -- Ditto to you real quick that your hiders are showing in between Erebus and Eros profiles. Not sure if you missed putting in the hiders or forgot to remove them -- just pointing it out! Apologies if you already know this.
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I really do like lists. They just make everything so much more organized. :3c

I look forward to any NPCs you guys may have, though! I'll be updated the roles post as any come up.
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@Dracogenius Heh. That was weird, deleted the hiders. Thanks for heads up. And I do prefer pings to know what's going on in RP's I'm in, because I don't want to miss anything and I to would like a list of NPC's alive or dead. It would make following the story easier. As long as it doesn't require too much effort.
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