@Everyone else, don't get too comfy, character reviews are on their way.
>EvilLaugh.mp3
I am both hype and terrified. And just a bit aroused.
@Everyone else, don't get too comfy, character reviews are on their way.
>EvilLaugh.mp3
@Athinar I'll be completely honest with you: I'm not incredibly enthused about this character...Maybe its the whole celebrity thing, but something about this character just screams "I'm the main character!" which is very much not something I'm looking for. I'm looking for an average joe soldier, with character depth and room for development to make him/her unique and engaging, but not the constant center of attention.
His personality is a vague, sorta humble, sorta I-get-along-with-everyone kinda deal, and while there is nothing wrong with being humble or amicable, his personality just seems kinda... 2-dimensional. Half of the personality blurb is just exposition from the viewpoint of another character, and while I appreciate the cleverness of making the 'psychological analysis' look like an analysis made by a doctor, there's just not enough substance in it for me to get a good picture of Michael's personality other than sorta humble, sorta agreeable.
Same goes for his background information- again, the whole logged conversation thing is very clever and in character with the idea of a soldier's dossier, there's no meat in it. He was born, he did this, he joined the army, he was good at the army, now he's here. There's no substance to the tiny paragraph dedicated to his actual background. He was born on earth to a wealthy family? Cool, who is this wealthy family? what sort of power or pull do they have in the UEE? How did he become interested in acting? How did his career take off like it did? Why did he go enlisted instead of Officer Corps? How did he prove himself as a soldier? I have none of the answers to these questions, just the fact that "he did the thing" - as my longtime Falling Skies players like to say.
In short, this character has no real depth to him.
@R31GNI already gave you the whole talk about cybernetics I believe, so I'll skip that part. Conrad's personality is the sort of snarky, sarcastic sound that I like a lot- almost representative of a certain Japanese woman in another Falling Skies RP Cough@Reaper. I'm gonna assume the UEE gave Conrad a pardon for his 'crimes' when he enlisted with their military.
Urk, this is gonna take some fact checking of my own- because I'm terrible with dates, and I've probably retconned this like half a dozen times, but I'm pretty sure the date of the siege of Cerol is 2899, towards the very end of the 29th century. - and while I had originally written the war as starting at the start of the 29th century... 100 years of war with very little military development sounds a bit... far fetched... so I'll say the war's been going on for at least 20-30 years, long enough that an entire generation has been born into an era of war, and the UEE have had enough time to start developing and mass producing MAS of their own.
Thats a very long round-about way of me saying, Conrad has probably been born into the galaxy in a state of war. That might mess around with your first paragraph in your history.
Other then that, maybe give Conrad a PDW or sidearm besides the flaregun.
First round of character reviews!
@ReaperSo much overwatch. Overall, I see nothing glaringly wrong with this character. Personality is well developed, if not reminiscent heavily of the actual Mercy from Overwatch, (with last name directly ripped from Overwatch may I add). I assume the BASTION's shield is sort of like Reinhardt's energy shield, yes? I assume the shield will be relatively small- enough to cover her crouching body over a patient, but not a standing assault trooper. The only thing I'd really request is to change up the name a bit, because even though I know this character is inspired by Mercy, I want to pretend to myself that it is an original character. Perhaps give her a french surname/make her french, so the idea of her always saying "Merci" can be the reason why people call her Mercy
@vietmyke@reaper, This is something I've been meaning to show you guys but constantly procrastinated.
Geneva Convention on medical personnel
In other words, medical personnel, military or civilian, are protected by international law and it is illegal to cause harm to such figures even in the midst of combat. Would be interesting if that was a thing in this RP. Of course, the personnel in question is exempt from this law if they try to cause harm to the enemy.
EDIT: Or the Coalition can say screw that and go on a murder-rampage across the galaxy.