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@Lmpkio Alright then :) I'll have the post up later tonight :)
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@Leslie Hall

So I read through your CS, and for the most part, he looks good. I just have a few concerns about his backstory and abilities. One, he's too young. I understand that he was experimented on when he was a child, but the Sentinels Program wouldn't have accepted someone of his age and with unstable powers at that. This would prove to be a liability for the rest of the team if someone couldn't control their abilities. I feel as though he should be at least 23. Another thing that troubles me is his abilities. With his passive, Kinetic Surge, you need to limit his powers more because he can easily become too OP if he absorbs a lot of attacks. Maybe he can only absorb a small portion of the attack? And for Psi Blades, Kinetic energy isn't a tangible object so it would be near impossible to form it into a blade. Even scientifically in a lab, it would be impossible. Once you change these things, I think he would look great :) However, smarty is the official judge. :)


Apologies for the late reply! I'm fine with changing his age, that's no problem. I would like to clarify that his powers aren't incredibly unstable, the Psionic Limiter makes sure that he can control them. As for Psi Blades, I'll replace that with something else.
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ill get a post up later sorry for the delay.
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@smarty0114 @BlueAjah

Here's the updated CS for convenience sake. The changes I made are as followed;

Bryce is older now. Hopefully all the dates are still accurate, I did my best to change them.

Kinetic Surge no longer increases Bryce's power, but instead gives him a slight increase in speed when blocking damage.

Psionic Barrier can't be used on the same target twice in a row.

Psi Blades was removed and replaced with Limited Telekinesis. It's pretty much what it sounds like. Bryce can move very small objects with his mind, nothing too heavy thanks to his Psionic Limiter.

Also, I added another weapon. Resonance Blades are swords with in-built machinery which allows Bryce's psionic wavelengths to sync up with them so he can control them with telekinesis.

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@Leslie Hall Looks good :) Accepted :D
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Not going to lie, despite only being two posts in. I'm getting some major excitement for events/roleplaying to come!

Strongly debating making a second character. But i severely doubt i will, due to my time being a bit on the slim side these days.
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The IC is certainly moving.

@Leslie Hall Looks good :) Accepted :D


You managed to review Leslie's concept fairly quickly. Perhaps you could do the same for my Faust? I'd like to get in on the action before there's a chance of me getting left behind.
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@Lugubrious I think he missed yours yesterday after making a post shortly after yours. But regardless I think your character will be accepted.
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@Lugubrious Frick! My bad! He's accepted, I just totally forgot to let you know! Sorry again, I can be a tad scatterbrained at times :P
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My isn't little Scorn the center of attention. XD
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@Lugubrious Frick! My bad! He's accepted, I just totally forgot to let you know! Sorry again, I can be a tad scatterbrained at times :P


'Salright. I'll get started on a post.
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By some miracle of the great dark gods from the deep I was able to break free and find time to write up a post, sorry it was so short guys
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Great, the gang's all here. Now we can all die together.

A like for the one who get's the reference first. (rules: no searching on the web, everyone has 1 guess and Lugu is not allowed to participate because I know he knows it)
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By some miracle of the great dark gods from the deep I was able to break free and find time to write up a post, sorry it was so short guys


You can thank me later XD And its not short at all :)
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@Lmpkio You have all my thanks now dude, I'm glade I stuck around =)
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@Lmpkio You have all my thanks now dude, I'm glade I stuck around =)


Indeed. Also fun fact, I've made an enemy CS that is slighter taller than your character Megaton. He was in fact supposed to be a "rival" towards said character, or basically a character on equal if not a bit tougher than him. Would be pretty disappointing if he only had to fight babies heroes you know? XD
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@Lmpkio I saw that and I have to say, he looks like a pretty good foil for Megaton. Both are large power houses that have rather bone chilling drives to get what they want, but one gives completely into the power the other prefers to display it when he sees appropriate
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There we are--Faust has arrived. Whoever wants to interact with him may do so freely.
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Great, the gang's all here. Now we can all die together.

A like for the one who get's the reference first. (rules: no searching on the web, everyone has 1 guess and Lugu is not allowed to participate because I know he knows it)


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Great, the gang's all here. Now we can all die together.

A like for the one who get's the reference first. (rules: no searching on the web, everyone has 1 guess and Lugu is not allowed to participate because I know he knows it)


Hm? Do I know you from some place?

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