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Okay, so I've begun work on my beast tamer, but then I had a thought. That thought started with "one" and ended in "punch". Inbetween was a lot of guitar riffs and Japanese dudes screaming while I reminisced about my days in Skyrim playing an unarmed Khajit and delivering karmic justice by punching giants into the atmosphere. So who wants to see a bare-fisted, probably drunk monk character and who still wants the beast tamer?
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Bad cop. Worse cop.
That makes me the hot executioner.
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First point— I’ve fixed my CS for you. I’m rather finicky with it, as you can tell. Uniformity is really important to me unless you completely fancy-ify a CS.

Quote: There is no 'Need or Greed' system. More fantastical simulator with RPG elements than the other way around. :F

Avatar: Oh man, the edddddge.

Personality: Fixed one typo! Also, man do I love the duality and nuance of his personality here— it’s always good to see characters that have this rigid surface and see that the insecurities behind it beyond the usual edgelord for edgelord’s sake affair. As Chris Hardwick says, “Points!”.

Background: The depth behind his experiences behind his first MMO is interesting, but what opened the door for him to be interested in Pariah? What drove him to an incredibly niche, esoteric, and likely expensive module? Given his income status I am very interested why he invested a lot of money on essentially an obtuse virtual reality peripheral? These are questions to consider.

Profession: Not what I was initially looking for with profession but you validated it fairly well that I won’t refute it. A very challenging profession to take for sure. Interesting to see how other players react due to the reputation such a profession would entail.

Weapon: I’d rather not have weapons that are effectively unique or iconic items. If you look at my example sheet (and my character) you can see I kept it as simple as ‘spear’ without any mention of effects or abilities. Rule of thumb, keep 90% of things simple to maximize fun and depth of content through the RP. You can keep the name “Bloodletting Pike” if you prefer, but I’m going to ask the effects and description pretty much be reduced.

Benchmarks: Honestly, your mental benchmarks are perfectly fine (unless Narc has input to suggest they might not be)— it’s really the physical benchmarks that concern me. There are some key points to consider which I will accent with quotes from the discussion thread.

Here’s the thing— this whole misunderstanding of the benchmark system is not meant to be the equivalent of achievements in World of Warcraft. There are no leaderboards in Pariah, there are no atypical statistics in Pariah, and there is definitely nothing that is arbitrary. The benchmark system rewards accumulated experience; if you keep working to get stronger it will show. It is as described by McHaggis a “virtual reality with game influences” and not the other way around. Ultimately we are reflected on focusing on the characters and what makes them. Their personalities, experiences, tensions, griefs, anxieties, fantasies, and goals.

I’m looking for benchmarks that were attributed to characters as passive gains rather than special abilities. Perhaps I should’ve explained this more clearly in the ‘Progression’ section of this OOC’s first post, but I’m going to amend that issue going forward. This review shows me I made a mistake in glossing that over. The physical benchmarks that I don’t have issues with are Enhanced Strength, Executioner (but I need a reason how he achieved this benchmark, see Rael’s CS for examples of how I did it), Tough Skin (though I am not sure how having a lack of armor creates a hardy constitution) and Blood in the Water.

So I guess I am really only am iffy about Vampiric Warrior.

Perhaps rephrasing it and keeping all of the above in mind for a reapproval is all you need to do. Why does he have lifesteal (I feel like this would be more of a weapon effect)? How did he achieve this benchmark to the point the system allocated it to him?

Rough Virtual History: No leaderboards. No iconic weapons (yet). I think from my review you will know what to rephrase here. Also, hit the enter button more often man!
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This will be quick (not because you are my friend, but this is pretty simple and easy to work with), heh.

Background: A bit stylistic in choice, but explains how the Pariah connection reached her.

Profession: What do you mean out of woodswork? If you mean cutting and tending to wood then might I suggest fletcher? If not the only other options I could think of are hunting and foraging (which I suppose would equate to hunter, ranger, or something similar). Think of profession as a pseudo-class title!

Benchmarks: Some crossover in benchmarks, but otherwise fine.

Unless Narc has some points of contention, I'd say with a clarification on Profession and you are as good as gander.
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@Gowi

Thank you kindly.

I wasn't sure what I wanted to say as far as the profession. I wanted to show that she knew an artistic craft in that of wood- but wasn't sure how to really phrase that. Looking up "Fletcher" is something right up the alley of what I was looking for so I will switch that out and put that in it's place.

As concerning benchmarks, I admit I was having a hard time categorizing things as either mental or physical. I knew what I wanted them to be, but was noticing that she leaned more towards one side than the other. I hope because I didn't do anything to overpowered or game changing that it was alright.

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As concerning benchmarks, I admit I was having a hard time categorizing things as either mental or physical. I knew what I wanted them to be, but was noticing that she leaned more towards one side than the other. I hope because I didn't do anything to overpowered or game changing that it was alright.

I just noticed it— but no it seems perfectly fair as far as my eye goes and that isn’t nepotism speaking.


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@Gowi I'll start editing the character sheet with the necessary clarifications. I'll make his weapon a simple oversized anime Pike and remove the special effect. And yeah, I didn't totally understand what you meant with the benchmarks- I'll clarify some key things, mainly how he came by Tough Skin and Executioner. I do have one question: since I can't really think of how one would come by a lifesteal effect in a 'natural' way, what if the effect was applied by, say, drinking a special elixir? It would require that he have a fairly reliable source of potions, but it makes a little more sense in the context of Pariah as I understand it. And would also promote a little more dependence on other characters/NPCs.

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@Gowi I'll start editing the character sheet with the necessary clarifications. I'll make his weapon a simple oversized anime Pike and remove the special effect. And yeah, I didn't totally understand what you meant with the benchmarks- I'll clarify some key things, mainly how he came by Tough Skin and Executioner. I do have one question: since I can't really think of how one would come by a lifesteal effect in a 'natural' way, what if the effect was applied by, say, drinking a special elixir? It would require that he have a fairly reliable source of potions, but it makes a little more sense in the context of Pariah as I understand it. And would also promote a little more dependence on other characters/NPCs.

Wouldn't that just make it an item he has in his inventory at that point? A potion and not a benchmark?

EDIT: I suppose he could have something in there to do with extensive potion ingesting changing how his physiology treats things? idk
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@Gowi I suppose. It can be replaced with something; perhaps he's drank so many potions that they now last a little longer? Would that make an adequate replacement?

EDIT: Did...Did we actually just have the same thought at the same time? Are...Are you my long lost twin?
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Stop this whole bromance thing! <.< By order of the grand Co-GM, Taters, this zone is now yaoi-free and is only subject to yuri. Any and all attempts to publish inferior otps will be met with strict punishment!

Seriously though, you could just spec into something called a barbarian skill tree or something which means that you would get extra lifesteal!

Gowi already pointed out everything big but I have to say, I was very impressed by your sheet. He's a dick but he's sort of likeable so it will be interesting and I would definitely like to see the bounty hunting and potentially player killing revealed when we get to IC.

So there ya go, take this Tato sign of approval and post that bad boy up!
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you could just spec into something called a barbarian skill tree or something which means that you would get extra lifesteal!



But no, when I see the changes and all that we'll see about my stamp of approval.
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Well, made some changes on my background. Gave it a little more... Umph if you know what I mean.

Tbh, I was kinda annoyed that my background wasn't as big as others, and tried to extend it a little more. But due to the character I created, there isn't much more I can add to her without "breaking" and deforming her story.
She is just a rich girl who was raised in a very rigid family that doesn't let her live her own life. XD
After thinking and writing a little bit I realized that I'm satisfied with her background.
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Still gotta work on that 'hit Enter button more' thing.
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Saw the level of the other characters and then neutered my character, so here he is!

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Yeah, spacing is not my forte haha

I'm very creative! I don't have time to deal with formatting and organization! Dealing with the bullshit my brain thinks and forcing it to stay on topic is already too much for me to handle!

Oh, and I also forgot to say her height and a more detailed description of her appearance

Plus: Gowi you will be glad to know that I'm organizing my text only for you
Hitting the enter button nonstop!

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I don't have time to deal with formatting and organization!

Uniformity is very important to me!
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I was only joking -_- When I write I usually don't care about it. But I always organize it before posting. I just don't like to put too much spacing between paragraphs. I feel like its a waste of space, y'know?

For example, doing this:

*this*

Kills me a little bit inside every time I do it.

And besides that, come on... my brain is already a mess >__<

If you are curious about how my posts usually are, take a look at my IC posts on other RPs.



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Here we go!

Quotation: Where it at, bruh?

Visage: Is there a psychological reason that he has lighter skin tone and such to his appearance via reality? Remember that there isn't really an avatar creation system but more of an idealization based on your desires, quirks, or insecurities. Just like I allowed Ms. Cat Ears I probably won't decided to be too critical here, but I am curious how you can justify it.

Backstory: Very detailed, well written by my standards, and still gets across to point how Pariah was introduced to his life. "Points!"

Benchmarks: You are missing some physical ones! Did you need suggestions (such as Combat Casting, as one example) or are you content with handicapping yourself in this manner?

Otherwise I like what I see!
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@Gowi
I believe you are still not sold out on the "cat ears" thing...

As i pointed out both on her CS and after it, she has a very "cat like" curiosity.

She wont respect others personal space or privacy, often peeking over their shoulder to see what they are doing etc. etc.

Even one of her weaknesses is "curiosity"...
Hell, throw something shiny on her direction and she will probably stop what she is doing to investigate it...

Yeah, you can also expect a somewhat short attention span.

Aside from my example post, clarifications about organization & etc, i hope my writing and explanations can meet your standards.
Oh, and one more thing: some of the spelling errors are due to the fact that my mother language isn't English, and as such, my cellphone autocorrect foreign words to its own language, creating one hell of a mess. I often refrain from writing from my cellphone for this exact reason, but sometimes its unavoidable to do so (Sadly i cant bring my PC to my bed so i can write while I'm laying down)
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