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let's try again sense i was thinking of a different type of time.
Name: Tori, nickname: T

Age: 16

Race: human

Appearance: blue hair to the side, natural hair brown ( see my profile pic) 6 foot 5, usually has light blue shirt and grey shorts.

Role: mainly is just a hunter but will fight if needed.

Bio: Tori is from a area where the woods are thick and the town is far away. One day during a hunting trip, her mother and father were attacked by a bear which had hurt them so much they couldn't move their legs, Tori was then put in charge of the family at age 11, her brother being only a year younger than her was able to take care of the family when Tori would go hunting for food. Her mother and father were still able to use magic sense they were advanced in it even if self taught. They would teach Tori every day but her mother's magic ( plant magic) stuck more, one day Tori found a school for magic. After saving up enough money she went to school for magic, after school she had just turned 16 and learned her mother and father had passed away after a sickness struck the town. Her brother kept the house together and had told Tori that he would be ok and going to school also. Tori then worked as a guard of a richer and bigger town's royalty, after months of only small news the town was buzzing with talk of a new land, Tori had never thought she would be able to go, one day an attack was made on the castle with all the other guards fighting outside of the walls, she was trying to get the king and queen out of the castle. After the victory Tori thought she would just go back to a calm guard life. With her name going around the town for saving the royal family, she had been talked to and asked about what happened, one day someone came up to her with a flyer talking about a new land in a portal. Seeing as she could find a new place that her and her brother ( with him leaving school in two years) could live safely. She took that chance and hasn't looked back.

Skills: Skilled hunter, guard, and pretty good with a sword

Magic: Plant ( small walls of plant life, and generally being able to grow and move them) and slight fire ( only good for starting things such as a camp fire)

Equipment: Bow,arrows, sword, natural made face paint ( will share with friends)

Other: Tori has a bit of a trust issue even with close friends, seems really closed off until you get to know her.
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I really hope this one was better, i took off things that made not sense for the time period, i also added reasons for being chosen for the trip. I hope it's ok.
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@PharaohAtem Both of those abilities, as you described them, are too powerful for this RP. Transmutation might be okay, but I won't allow anything as powerful as Fullmetal Alchemist transmutations. Like, the ability to extract pure metal from a raw ore, or remove poisonous substances from plants once identified is the level of power I'd want that to be kept at. Let me know what your idea is.

@Nagariin The Leviathan Blade is too powerful. A buster sword is way too heavy for anybody with human of strength to wield, and adding a defensive barrier to an offensive technique is too much. My suggestion would be having Numbo manifest as a wraith blade. I would allow it to phase through solid matter while still dealing magical damage, but at the same time, it would not be able to block anything. I would also have something like this have a very limited duration before a recharge period. Like, it would be good for one attack, because something like this is already very powerful for the scope of the RP. Also, upon looking at your profile again, I noticed you have "healing pots." Please describe exactly what those are.

@Esailia Perhaps you could consider the term Mithra from Final Fantasy XI. You should look them up.

@Force and Fury Very nice bio! He's approved.

@DocTachyon Looks very good. Approved.

@BangoSkank Looks good to me. Approved.

@Drunk Uncle Bob With those alterations, your character is approved.

@checkeredsoul Better, but I would still want you to pick either plant or fire magic. Also, I'd like you to be more specific on the plant magic if you pick it. What kinds of plants can she grow? Rose Bushes? Small trees? It's still a bit vague what she can actually do. I will say that manipulating plants she didn't create is out, and rapidly growing plants that could be used as food/medicine/supplies is also out. That would trivialize the idea of exploring and finding useful things. Perhaps they wither away without constant focus.
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@Yuuta I think I will. The Mithra in FFxi looked more primal than the fanservice catgrl look in FF14. Though that might be the lower graphics XD

Come to think of it.....without the reverse knees, height, and full fur covering, she'd be close to a Ronso from FFX....
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@Yuuta

I agree with what you did with the Numbo edit as a wraith blade, and what I describe as a healing pots are healing potions, like drinkable first aid kits...

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Here's my character


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@Yuuta ok that does make a good point i'll change that but is everything else ok to keep.
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@NagariinOkay, so we're good on the magic powers then. Healing potions trivialize the survival elements of the RP, so I would say make them salves that can be applied to a wound and aid the natural healing process. Do that, and you're good to go.

@Dusty You are approved.

@checkeredsoul Everything else looks okay. Just fix the magic bit.
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@Yuuta got it
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ok last try, i hope all i really changed was the magic part because i was told to be more detailed with how she would use it. here we go.
Name: Tori, nickname: T

Age: 16

Race: human

Appearance: blue hair to the side, natural hair brown ( see my profile pic) 6 foot 5, usually has light blue shirt and grey shorts.

Role: mainly is just a hunter but will fight if needed.

Bio: Tori is from a area where the woods are thick and the town is far away. One day during a hunting trip, her mother and father were attacked by a bear which had hurt them so much they couldn't move their legs, Tori was then put in charge of the family at age 11, her brother being only a year younger than her was able to take care of the family when Tori would go hunting for food. Her mother and father were still able to use magic sense they were advanced in it even if self taught. They would teach Tori every day but her mother's magic ( plant magic) stuck more, one day Tori found a school for magic. After saving up enough money she went to school for magic, after school she had just turned 16 and learned her mother and father had passed away after a sickness struck the town. Her brother kept the house together and had told Tori that he would be ok and going to school also. Tori then worked as a guard of a richer and bigger town's royalty, after months of only small news the town was buzzing with talk of a new land, Tori had never thought she would be able to go, one day an attack was made on the castle with all the other guards fighting outside of the walls, she was trying to get the king and queen out of the castle. After the victory Tori thought she would just go back to a calm guard life. With her name going around the town for saving the royal family, she had been talked to and asked about what happened, one day someone came up to her with a flyer talking about a new land in a portal. Seeing as she could find a new place that her and her brother ( with him leaving school in two years) could live safely. She took that chance and hasn't looked back.

Skills: Skilled hunter, guard, and pretty good with a sword

Magic: Plant ( able to make small walls of rose bushes but if she doesn't focus they will wilt, breaking the wall. In a less of a battle guard stance she can sprout small trees like apple trees, that's not very useful though because it starts off as a sprout. )

Equipment: Bow,arrows, sword, natural made face paint ( will share with friends)

Other: Tori has a bit of a trust issue even with close friends, seems really closed off until you get to know her.
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Ok i hope i did good now ^^
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OK then, I'm okay with the healing pots turned into salves for wounds. great idea !

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So when are we planning to start, @Yuuta? I'm not impatient, just curious.
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@Esailia@Yuuta, Seconded, but I'm involved in other RPGs so I can wait.
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@Regitnui@Esailia It looks like the applications have stopped coming in, so I'd say we'll start within the next day or so. I wanted to give everybody a chance to make their characters because due to the nature of the RP, people won't be able to jump in later.

@Nagariin Okay, along with everything else we talked about, swap out the healing pot with salves and you're approved.

@checkeredsoul The rose bushes are fine, but I'm a little confused about the tree ability. Do those wither away without focus too? Make sure they do because magically generating survival materials defeats the purpose of a survival/exploration RP.

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@Yuuta yes they wither because she isn't as good with trees than she is with the bushes, i plan to have Tori's magic with the trees grow it bit by the end.
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@Yuuta

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Alright, this is the last call for character submissions. If you've gotten your profile approved, please post it in the characters tab. Everyone else, make the changes I said, and post it there as well. I am closing the thread to brand new applicants, so if you haven't already expressed your interest, time's up. I want to try to get this started sometime tomorrow, so make sure your characters are ready if you plan on playing.
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Hi! I would like to join. Is it too late? I've been looking at this thread for the past day. I can have my form up tonight, possibly even in a few hours.

I'm really new (If you couldn't tell by my ASTONISHING post count), so where should I post my form? Here?

Hi.
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Well, for one, welcome to RPG. Usually yes you would post a potential Character Sheet, or CS, in the OOC tab for review, and the GM would look it over first before you would post it in the characters tab.

Yuuta is the GM of this particular thread, so you'll need to wait for her to answer your question of if you made the deadline or not.
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