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"Her uncle and her dad taught her the secrets of the arcane, while her mom taught her the secrets of working a computer."



A little short, but with permission, I will probably expand the "personality" section later.
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@Jeyma -- Looks fine to me. However, I'm sleep deprived and overworked so I'll let @KahleenCuthald or @Bishop take a look at it and I'll trust their decision.
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I thought that Muggles could not go to Diagon Alley... that muggle born children had escorts instead?
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I thought that Muggles could not go to Diagon Alley... that muggle born children had escorts instead?


I don't remember if it's in the books, but in the movies we clearly see that Hermione's parents are talking to the Weasley's in Diagon Alley. It's the scene where Potter goes to buy Lockhart's books.


Low-quality image of muggles in the Alley^^
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Filthy muggles don't deserve more than 144p!
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@mskennedy615 @jeyma yeah, it's mentioned in the books that Hermione's parents go to Diagonal Alley in either the second or third book? If I remember correctly, Molly and Arthur help them exchange muggle currency for wizard currency
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Okay
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@Jeyma -- Looks fine to me. However, I'm sleep deprived and overworked so I'll let @KahleenCuthald or @Bishop take a look at it and I'll trust their decision.


So am I free to post, or should I wait for @Bishop or @KahleenCuthald to approve my CS?

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@Jeyma Your CS is lacking an explanation on why the American wizard moved all the way to the UK with his daughter and when exactly they moved. Or did I miss that?

And she seems to have tons of good traits and seemingly no negative ones. If your character has so many skills / positive traits, you need to add negative ones to even it out.
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And she seems to have tons of good traits and seemingly no negative ones. If your character has so many skills / positive traits, you need to add negative ones to even it out.


My bad, she wasn't meant to seem Mary Sue. I actually really hate perfect characrers, and I never meant for Aideen to look like that.

She has several big flaws. I honestly meant for them to be obvious, but I understand if I need to explain.




For one, she's stubborn and obsessive. I mentioned that her father said she was "stubborn as a tree," and she actually managed to take it as a compliment. This is also shown through her wand's "rigid" flexibility. That's a trait that's going to bite her in the ass, like, all the time.

She's also vengeful. I mentioned that she is "moody as fire" and that she has a "streak of hate."

There's even a huge weakness with her wand: a Hawthorn wand, as said in the Pottermore quote, "can, when badly handled, backfire." PLUS Dragoncore wands are prone to "accident." Her wand is both likely to backfire and likely to fail. It's a deathtrap.

With such a shitty wand, her anger and her stubborness are a poor combination. I can imagine her messing up spells all the time, arguing with authority figures, taking fights too far, and holding grudges across years.

If you really think I need to put more emphasis on those, of course I will, but I stand by what I said: I do believe her flaws are already pretty self-apparent.



As for having too many skills, the only skill I gave her was that she knows a lot about wandcrafting. And... that's it.

I said she's interested in healing people and caring for magical beasts, but nowhere did I say that means she's GOOD at it.
Those aren't skills, just interest. She won't necessarily have any talent for them.

She only has a skill for memorizing shit about wands.




I'll update the history or "worth to mention" section with a short explanation on her family's move.




I don't want this to be a big argument, so I can make her problems a little more clear if you want, but please do consider what I said about her emotional problems and her deathtrap wand. She was never intended to be flawless ;)
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Also I had a few questions about the roleplay. Like based off the timeline, Albus Potter should be a first year and James Potter should be a second or third year (though I'm not entirely sure which). Are we following this timeline? Like I figure it could be mentioned in passing or something. Also, are we going to have Neville as the herbology professor? Finally, I'm sure you've read a lot of headcanons about muggle born students figuring out how to magic-proof electronic devices (since they're commonly used by most muggles) and I was wondering if we were going to go with that or not. I figured I should ask since my character is muggle born. Thanks so much!
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@Melkor
Hi! Was wondering if I can delve back into my CS and change Charlie's appearance a bit. The face claim has been jarring me.
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@candlelitcraft -- I'll have to take a nap before I give any in-depth answers. I just got home from no sleep and a bunch of paperwork. Perhaps @KahleenCuthald can elaborate, they're more knowledgeable in the lore department than I am.

@ineffable -- Go ahead and send me a copy of the revised CS and I'll approve it or share it with my colleagues to see what they think.

[@Everyone] -- Please use the above method for any revisions. Thanks.
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@candlelitcraft I do mot want any electronic devices within Hogwarts. We Will stay with that. No electricity in the castle.

You can pass ny canon characters and talk about them with others, mention them in your posts. However, you shouldn't engage with them. Our story is taking part away from what they are doing. We would basically be "statists" in their story and that's what they are in our story. They exist, but they are not part od our story.

The staff of the school will be discussed between the GMs. Dont worry, before entering the castle you should know the staff lost and if canon character's characters are on it, how you can interact with them.
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@Jeyma -- Thought I'd remind you to update your CS to fix what Kahleen mentioned.
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Yoy guys have to get your posts in. The story cant get started without your help in proceeding IC. Please start to use your characters.
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I'm gonna get started on a response post for Melvus.
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Hopefully I will get a post in soon too. So @FreeElk doesn't have to wait hundred years on me.

@WanderingSpirit @MissCapnCrunch I don't think you have sent in a post yet? If possible, could you please start using your characters on this rp? That's be amazing. Thank you.
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@WanderingSpirit Doesn't seem to be interested anymore, though it'd be nice if they said so -_-

@MissCapnCrunch Hasn't been on in several days, I'd welcome them back because life happens.
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