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Here are examples of the brands. You see how small they are? They should be easy to hide from those who pursue them because anyone with that Mark is a Sin. In this game, the White God marked them with it. It's like a glowing mark that won't ever come off. It's not physical.

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@KeksalotI went looking at Lust in the old game to see how the other player played her and he made her desire things expensive, powerful, and pleasant in excess and afterwards, discarded them because those things were no longer special. Very similar to Greed except I believe Greed is more of a hoarder about it, and shares nothing.

I don't want to tell you how you should play your interpretation of Lust. It is your character. I just read CSes and if I feel the concept doesn't fit, then I try to work with you before I out-right reject it. Your current CS can work but you seem to have a difficult time explaining how its theme is lust. Maybe try for a different sin that is easier for the muse or a Holy Knight.
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@PyromaniacwolfHis personality is "all right." It's workable. I was more concerned with him being over-the-top and having a personality that can't interact with anyone. Like, if he was actually a cool guy but had severe anger issues when ticked off. The hot-head. Instead of being wrathful 24/7. Yeah, just decide if you plan to give him an arc weapon or not.
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Why would god brand a sinner with a mark that is tiny and easy to hide as opposed to one that is a clear and obvious and hard to conceal?

As for lust, I do not quite understand what you consider a theme for lust. Lust, as I understand it, is a powerful, visceral and carnal desire, an intense want for something, a passion that is unwholesome and perverse in its strength and is capable of driving a man to unspeakable acts in pursuit of fulfillment.

My guy, as i have already explained previously, currently embodies and expresses lust by being self-centered and egoistical and narcissistic to the extreme. Everything he does, he ultimately does for his personal fulfillment and pleasure. He can never force himself to extend more than a simple token effort to help someone else in a meaningful way if it is in any way difficult or hard, but he will go to any lengths to make himself feel good, or to chase an object of his passion - it's just that due to his history and memories being shrouded he is yet to remember the sheer perversity and depravity he can be capable of, and so for now his lust is mostly internalized and expressed heavily in being a self-centered bastard that thinks he is a nice person but is too hypocritical to admit that in reality he cares only about the praise he receives and not about whatever goodness he does. If and when something in his situation changes, if he begins to hunger for something greater and more intense, his true and utterly villainous colours would show.

But if lust here is supposed to be purely some sort of carnal lecherous desire for material wealth and sexual conquest i can do that too.
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@KeksalotWith that argument, the White God might as well have made them glow like a beacon so they wouldn't be able to hide it at all. The brand is what I just posted in the example. You don't have to like it but that's how it is in this game. As I said, I'm not going to tell you how to play Lust. I'm just going to let you know if I like the concept or not and for this kind of game, I can't accept your idea. As I said, you're welcome to try for other Sins, even Sins already reserved by players because as I said the roles are contestable. You can try for Holy Knights, but what you currently have I can't accept it.
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I mean, can you at least tell me what parts exactly need changing or editing? I'd like to remain Lust one way or the other instead of changing everything right away.
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@Dark LightYou're trying to make pistols/gunblades out of flintlocks. That's taking us out of the Medieval vibe a bit. Flintlocks fire a single round and then have to be reloaded. I mean, they are a legendary weapon but the weapon has to be like the actual weapon and not a hybrid of multiple weapons into one. There's also other projectiles to try such as bows, crossbows or throwing knives. Maybe even a musket.

@KeksalotI'm just going to hold off on it until all the other CSes come in. Because then I'll decide what concepts are accepted or not. Whatever I take, I'll post up the OOC/IC (since the OP is the OOC) and maybe when the game goes up, I'll fill in any roles that weren't filled during the interest check. I'm also going to be deciding who Eve approaches first.
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So there's still a possibility I'll be able to play this character, even if i'll have to edit some bits?
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@KeksalotI promise and guarantee nothing.
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@Dark LightSure. I guess so. This is anime-themed after all.
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@Holy Soldier aye I think I think I should mention in his personality that his very ragey personality is more due to his lack of memory and being stuck essentially alone for a few years. As time goes on I'm planning for him to become less constantly angry and more snarky and cynical but still able to hold a conversation without stabbing someone as long as they don't start to get under is skin.
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@PyromaniacwolfSounds good.
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Still in the need of Holy Knights? I've only seen the first few episodes of the anime, but I've been planning on finishing it anyway.
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@Holy Soldier Would you rather I mentioned some hint of his more developed personality or add it on as he develops over the RP btw?
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If you still need someone to be sloth, I can fill the part.
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Here's my CS for a Great Holy Knight.

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@PyromaniacwolfNah. You don't have to do that. It just would have been easier if everyone made a distinction between their current personality now versus how they were before. I felt that you did that but I wasn't sure if his post-banish personality was going to be his 24/7 mood for the remainder of the game.

@AllHollowsEveYep! Still need a Sloth. :D And I don't mean the animal.

@HammermanSeems all right. Very anime (not saying that's bad. It meets the theme of the game).

I'm going to give everyone a heads up. When we get all the people needed for this game, I'm going to have everyone submit a writing prompt. This isn't a writing prompt from another game. I want an example writing sample for the character you created. The reason why is I've had situations in the past where people ignored the casual-advanced tags in the game and wrote on a "free form" level. This is not a free-form game. Also, while this is in the casual section. I am going to be lenient to a point on English grammar. If I can tell you didn't at least proofread your work, then that laziness is going to speak wonders on the kind of writing we can expect from you.

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@NobodiesHeroSure. There's no limit on the Holy Knights at the moment.
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Sorry, later than I thought. I have a more I need to write in the sheet, but can share the WIP if you want, @Holy Soldier. Also, sounding high fantasy...are Sins supposed to be human passing or any of the human-sized races?
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