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[ ❇ ] P R E M I S E

Hundreds of years have passed in the Soul Society since the capture of Aizen Sosuke. Whilst many sacrifices were made in order to destroy one of the greatest threats that the Soul Society had ever saw, nobody has forgotten the history. The memory of those who had stopped him and his subordinates is freshly written into the history books and remembered well by the Shinigami of the new generation. Names of former captains were passed down as legends, awe inspiring godlike figures after their departure from the Soul Society.

Much of what was lost has been rebuilt thanks to their great efforts, and no longer are there the gaping holes left by the vast conflicts caused by Aizen himself. However, little of what once was remains, and nearly everyone who had previously existed in the realm of the society is no longer present. New faces have taken over what once was, and that includes you. Whether you are fresh from the Shin'ō Academy, or have been a seat for a year or two, the fact of the matter remains that you are a relative newbie in regards to those in the Seireitei.

How your life starts as a Shinigami is up to you to an extent. Whether you try to ascend the ranks, or remain fiercely loyal to your squad in spite of a promotion is for the most part up to you.

[ ❇ ] B A C K G R O U N D I N F O R M A T I O N

Shinigami or Soul Reapers as they are otherwise known are the regulators of souls and in some sense, the keepers of balance between the world of the living and the Soul Society. Their primary role is to purify hollows(corrupted souls) and help ensure the safe passing of non-corrupted souls to the Soul Society. In essence, their primary role is the governance of soul, and balancing the total number between the two worlds in order to maintain order.

Primarily, this is done through the usage of a tool known as a Zanpakuto which roughly translates to Soul Cutting Sword. Given by the name,
they are the weaponry of the Shinigami that are capable of combating spiritual beings as in Hollows or other Shinigami. Another fun fact is that no two Zanpakuto are the same and every Shinigami carries one. Even those who do not possess the spiritual pressure in order to know the name/release their sword, they still are unique to that said Shinigami. They are reflections of the Shinigami's power and soul, and the name gives the weapon the ability to empower the Soul Reaper that wields it. More often than not, they have distinct appearances and often have personalities that are similar to that of the owner.

It is important to note that Zanpakuto have two releases, Shikai and Bankai. Shikai is the first release of the sword and requires the Shinigami to learn the name of their Zanpakuto. Upon learning the name and communicating and harmonizing with their Zanpakuto, the sword effectively is able to attain the first release, which is activated by a release command. This changes the shape of the blade and more often than not gives it special abilities. The release commands can vary, from a word to a short poem. Bankai however, is vastly different. It is the final form of a Zanpakuto and is obtained once the user is able to materialize and subjugate their swords spirit. Very few attain this state.



[ ❇ ] O O C I N F O R M A T I O N

I suppose I owe you all an apology for making you wait this long, and I will give it to you. I've had an exceptionally busy time over the holidays, but never the less, I apologize. Now that that's out of the way, I suppose we can get this show on the road.
I'm going to leave this welcome for new people to come and create sheets for a while, but once we reach a certain level of people I'll eventually cut off character creation until we stabilise.

Some things to cover however given the lack of clarity within my interest check. This world will be taking place many years after the original arc of Aizen Sosuke although the human world has not moved a hair. You do not need to know much about the series from the show as many of your questions can be answered by the fanmade wiki, but if you have any that they do not cover, then you can ask me. This RP will primarily be based in one squadron up until a certain point where people reach the level that they will be promoted to the rank of seated officers and thus start deferring from the squad if they so wish. We'll be running an original plot that'll slowly unveil itself made by yours truly.

On a final note, I'm going to need a co-gm. If you'd like to volunteer for this herculean task, just hit me up with a PM. Unfortunately, I have no friends otherwise I'd burden them with the task but given the situation I'm going to need a teeny bit of help managing things.


Below is the character sheet that will be used for this RP. If you are interested, please fill it out below and post it for me to review later this upcoming week. Just remember: a quality character sheet makes for a better RP so take your time with it and don't rush concepts if you don't really want to create them. RP what you want to RP.



Also, heres a link to the discord so you can communicate easier: discord.gg/PYdEA23
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@vancexentan @Kaesus @Queentze @KawaiiKyouko @Loki Odinson @Jynmi88 @Suku @BladeSS4 @RumikoOhara

This is for those that expressed interest in the check, just doing it twice to make sure that the ping goes through.
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Hidden 7 yrs ago 7 yrs ago Post by vancexentan
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I hope this turned out well as I stated I'm not too knowledgeable about Bleach.

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Here is my character sheet entry.

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I'll review these sheets once I'm home from college today.
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Any spelling mistakes I blame on the fact that I wrote it all with my left hand. I apologize in advance.


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Your character is good, but as you said you have limited knowledge of bleach so there is a few things that you're going to need to clean up.

- As a whole, Shinigami can live for a long time. However, 740 is bordering on one of the oldest characters in the entire soul society never mind the group, so you should probably shorten the age to the 50-300 range if possible.
- The picture you are using for your Zanpakuto is from the show itself, so I'd like if you change that if possible.
- I'd like to see a few more details in the abilities/weaknesses section. Whilst you've stated what is actually the case for your character, I'd like some more intricacies and expansion in this section.

You did a good job though, just fix those details up and you'll be alright to jump in.




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There's little explicitly wrong with this character and I'm fond of some of the design points although I'd like to see more detail as a whole(it's entirely optional if you want to add it). However, there's a few things that are going to need fixing from a balancing of power perspective

- Change your Zanpakuto's ability to "absorb reishi that is below or equal to the spiritual pressure of the user." The design is slightly overpowered even with this quirk, but if you were able to simply destroy captain's kido based zanpakuto at this stage in the rp then it'd push it a little far.
- In abilities, add more detail to how your character can do. Just give some intricacies and more flavour to it so that we can get a better feel of what your character is capable/incapable of.

Once you fix these up you'll be good to go.




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I love this character. It's exceptionally well made and I'm pleased with the level of thought and detail that's been put in. However, because I'm myself, I'm just going to nitpick something just because it's bothering me.

- I'd like you to change Master of Shunpo to something else. Shunpo is an exceptionally difficult thing to sort of learn within the Bleach universe and to say that you are a master implies that you've perfected something, and given that the roleplay is centred around young/new blood, it leaves you little room for development in this aspect. A word like adept would be better suited in this case I feel.
- You may wanna lower the age a little bit. 344 is slightly old for a rookie Shinigami. Maybe 50 years or so, but this is up to you.

Change that for me and you are accepted(sorry for being annoying!)




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Oddly enough, this is the same scenario as Loki's character. The design and everything is great and I enjoy the overall theme. However, there are a few things I'm going to nitpick just because they annoy me.
- I don't like the term master this early. Use adept, a master would imply that the ability is perfect and they have nothing to improve on. Also, tone down the usage of kido. Perhaps 50 without incantation and 60 with incantation and specify what kido she can use just so that we know what she could pull out, given even the kido masters are not capable users of every single kido.
- The age is a bit high for a young shinigami. Unless your character spent like 350 years in the Rukon district, tone it down to the 50-300 range.

I do love your character however and I feel it's a fairly balanced concept. Fix those two things and you're all good with me.




Reviews are done, I'm sorry for the nitpicking everyone but I'm kind of obsessive over the smaller details so I just had to point them out so please be patient with me on this!

If you fix what I asked you to, just pm me to let you know here or on discord and I'll verify it so you can post it in the character sheet thread.

Also would like to let you know that Syn is going to co-gm. He's a cool guy so just ask him about anything if I'm not online.

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@ArtymisI changed the pictures, and the age but what exactly are you looking for in terms of strengths, and weaknesses? I also couldn't find proper katana designs so I made do with what I could by using other swords from different animes.
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@ArtymisI changed the pictures, and the age but what exactly are you looking for in terms of strengths, and weaknesses? I also couldn't find proper katana designs so I made do with what I could by using other swords from different animes.


Swords are fine if that's what you had in mind for their design. The strengths and weaknesses I'm looking for enhanced details. If you'd like an example to what I'm looking for exactly, something akin to those in Loki's sheet would be optimal. That's kind of what I had in mind for that section if that's fine for you.
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@ArtymisI'm not happy with the designs so I went with aesthetics but I can't find any other sword that would match the pictures in my head. I also edited my skills section hopefully that's what you wanted because if not I'm at a loss for what exactly you want.
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@ArtymisI'm not happy with the designs so I went with aesthetics but I can't find any other sword that would match the pictures in my head. I also edited my skills section hopefully that's what you wanted because if not I'm at a loss for what exactly you want.


Changes look good! Stick it in a spoiler and you're accepted.
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Alright should I post it in the CS section, or are you doing that?
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Go ahead and post it on the character section.
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@Artymis
The kido changes are fine. I didnt want to use the word master yet anyways. However the age stays, she fought a long, hard bttle outta the dumpster!

As for which kido she can access, given the lack of knowledge of all kido available, can we create our own in those without an actual kido?
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@Artymis
The kido changes are fine. I didnt want to use the word master yet anyways. However the age stays, she fought a long, hard bttle outta the dumpster!

As for which kido she can access, given the lack of knowledge of all kido available, can we create our own in those without an actual kido?


Feel free to. Just give a detailed explanation in creation/what it does/chant/number etc. Do submit it for review before so I know it's not broken from a balance perspective.

Age is fine if that's what you want, was just making sure that was your intention.
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@Artymis
I'll make two Bakudo-style Kidos then which will be her go-to skills alongside Sai. Just some weak stuff for now. Might create some more later on too.

Aye it was. No worries! Also, updated for now. Will add in homemade kidos to the spellbook once you've accepted them.
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H'okies, settled on these ideas


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H'okies, settled on these ideas



Both are fine with me. Also, your characters accepted, feel free to post it in the character section.
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