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Depending on the people who have expressed interest and have yet to post their CSs and how many people I decline, there may be options for people I know personally as reliable and communicative writers.
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Hopefully I can get something up by tomorrow with some help from Piro, via discussing this quirk; lets see if I can come up with something that'll go beyond! Plus! Ultra!
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Currently 1600H where I'm at. Finishing up my sheet's history, hopefully by tonight. Just wanted to mention, I'm going for fire breathing. o3o

Edit: App's up. ^^

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@ShwiggityShwah

Unfortunately, I am not able to accept Sakimoto Hiroki for this roleplay for a variety of reasons.

I have no issues with your writing ability, mind you, but there is a lot I had to consider when I looked through the descriptive language you used in detailing your character. Ultimately there is a central and core aspect of your character that is incompatible – personal history. Outside of quirk descriptions, this is one of the primary things I weigh applications on. I’m going to keep this brief so you better understand the problems.

Hero work was a family business in Saitama. Hiroki, his mom, dad, and little brother were all heroes working for the city.

The whole premise of your characterization are based on these two sentences that preface your backstory. I’m not sure why you think this fits within the framework of a My Hero Academia setting. Not only does your backstory allude to child endangerment and other problems, it distinctly ignores canon principles that are unchanged in this roleplay. Hiroki and his brother being heroes is contradictory or at the very least distinctly illegal. You are not allowed to use your quirk in public unless you have a license which you would not be able to get prior to your enrollment at Ishin Academy. If these heroes used their children in such a way they would’ve been imprisoned and there would be a huge controversy around it. It’s not dramatic and it really doesn’t make much sense within what me and Piro are intending to build here.

Beyond this there are inconsistencies and I believe the quirk has issues beyond that. I just cannot approve this application.
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@Bornlucky @DruSM157

I’m moving ahead in the queue a little bit because there’s nothing to address with your characters, so you guys can transfer your bois over.

For everyone else, Piro and I will try to get to Blaze and the others in a timely fashion.
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@Inkarnate

Well it was worth a try.

Again, I never watched the show so it's why I asked before if I needed to understand the premise. From what I read which was mostly focused on the quirks and how they fit I never got that limitation.

The quirks was an attempt to try something original. I see I was mistaken.

It's not really a big deal and it was fun to make him. Sadly its just wasted effort. Have fun. Last time I try to do an RP from a fandom I don't know.

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Welp, got her knocked out; hopefully her backstory does fit into the story involving MHA and this RP!

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@Inkarnate
Hi, just wondering if I have been kicked from this RP?
I was in the 'to be reviewed' section but it's not there anymore.

Thanks.
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Hi, just wondering if I have been kicked from this RP?
I was in the 'to be reviewed' section but it's not there anymore.

Thanks.

Your review was coming, so I guess that pushes it along faster. I guess the easiest way to put it is I will be declining your character. I just don’t particularly think the content provided (generally personal history) is something I want to approve going forward. The quirk also felt like just a dragon-touched version of Dark Shadow, which didn’t do the CS itself any favors when Pirouette and I discussed it at length.
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Your review was coming, so I guess that pushes it along faster. I guess the easiest way to put it is I will be declining your character. I just don’t particularly think the content provided (generally personal history) is something I want to approve going forward. The quirk also felt like just a dragon-touched version of Dark Shadow, which didn’t do the CS itself any favors when Pirouette and I discussed it at length.


Well that's a shame :(
No problem, thanks for the quick feedback 'n' all the best.
Looks like it's going to be a busy game.
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Personal Dossier


Name
Kishimoto Rin


Age
14


Origin
Okayama, Japan


Physical Description
Rin stands a short 5 feet tall, her weight is a light 90 lbs. Her looks mostly hint to her mothers side of the family with a few small hints of her dads family. Her frame is slender and small yet a hint of muscle can be found on her arms and legs from hard physical labor and training. Rin is a flat chested girl with fairly long well kept hair tied with a ribbon at the end. Her hair color is hazelnut brown. Her front bangs cover her face slightly past her forehead, her side bangs are slightly longer reaching at least her shoulders. She has brightly colored green eyes and a perky small nose. Rin has slender lips together with a small mouth. Her short and small chin makes her face seem even more childlike. Rin her body has black lines over it on the places of her joints separating the skin of the body parts. She covers those lines with her outfits as she usually wears dark blue pantyhose under her skirt and long sleeved outfits. The lines on her hands and neck she covers with makeup because she finds them embarrassing.


Characterization
Timid
Hardworking
Naive
Trusting
Antisocial
Kind
Childish


Personal History
In the more offset parts of Japan was a small farming village, the closest big city was Okayama. The farm village was producer of many different flowers and vegetables aggravated by a hand full of different farmers that lived near the village. It was a fairly isolated community that did not accept much newcomers into their circle. Yet a baby was always a joy to welcome. Rin grew up in the village as the second kid. There was one other family that had a few months older child named Anna. They got along great and got thought home teaching by a combination of both their mothers getting them extra attention where they were lacking. Her quirk had already formed before she was born making it quite a usual feat for her her to live with it. Many of the different farmers had quirks that they used to aggravate their crops but as of now Rin did not find a fitting purpose for her quirk to be used as. She had tried many different things but never found herself to be of good use or helpful. She was good at removing weeds or anything that had to do with the plants but that was without her quirk. As kid of a farmer that was a little upsetting for her and her parents but no harm done.

In a town where nothing happened except for playing with each other it would eventually start to grow somewhat boring. Rin would often help out on the land with her dad but also had the habit to just shut herself in her room to do her own things like drawing or reading. When she was not in her room she would do the daily like watching television or play outside near her base. Play superhero with her friend to put yourself in different shoes for once. The shoes that you admired. Something that gave your quirk a purpose perhaps. Rin had off course found a somewhat taste for many different superheroes and started becoming a little too obsessed with them as she hung posters around her room and drew her heroes or super suit. Like any other kids she dreamed to become like one of them later on.

Her parents started noticing her odd behavior and her words about wanting to leave the village, there was a severe disconnection with the family and town, she started pushing herself away from them as she felt like she didn't belong here. She tried to be different, she wanted to be different. Rin didn’t want this boring life in the village, she did love this village but nothing ever happened. She found herself useless in comparison to the others she knew, ever her friend had a super awesome water quirk.

That night when she was staring at the long stretching farm fields she noticed for the first time a shaded blur that zoomed over the farmland. Her eyes could barely catch up to the figure. It had immediately gotten her attention as she dashed after it through the hall and living room. She ran through the farmland as fast as she could with her nimble legs. She felt excited for the first time in a long time. Once she had caught up with the shadow she softly approached and dove into the bushes in no time. From between the branches she watched the person help a trapped foxy escape from being stuck under a fence. The man was masked and wore a suit just like the ones she had seen on television. In awe she stared at the man as he treated the poor thing and gave it food, just before he could get away she jumped out and confronted the hero.

The hero definitely was surprised after he had been caught off guard. Rin talked to him for a long time about her own scenario and about how she thought he was wonderful and eventually had gotten to the conclusion that all crime and problems were already being solved by the masked night hero. Rin was instantly won over by the first hero she had ever seen in real life and made a pact with the hero to train under his supervision during the nights. She put all her work into becoming a true hero even if it was with her weird quirk. Her teacher learned her the ways of using her quirk to use it in fighting. After her training had been completed her teacher had pointed her to the academy he had been too in the past. She came to know about the old retired hero after having spoken ato him many times. He did not show his face or tell much about himself but she knew he lived in the village and did this as hobby now. Doing tasks in his hero suit during the night. Rin wanted to follow into his footsteps with no second thought. She worked as hard and as much as she could for the new school year to participate in the new semester. Just to follow up to her favorite hero.


Character Development & Conceptualization
Rin is like any of my characters a cutesy relaxed girl that interacts with others by her weird personality. I enjoy to do fun things with others like weird challenges or do the most random things with my character to open up others to her so they can have cute and fun moments. Rin is a bit of a weirdo but does put all her hard work into her training in order to do the thing she loves. Right now Rin believes the way to go is to train her body in order to help others by fighting, she has to learn that there are others things to being a hero as well.

In order to be strong she has to learn to work together with others as well just as opening herself up to others. Rin finds it hard to catch up with others from the city as she originally came from the sticks. She get embarrassed when others laugh at her for her accent and finds it a big must to try and talk like the city folks at least, her ultimate goal is to be thought of as normal and to fit in with others.

For the concept of her quirk there is the simple feature of using her joints in order to give swift hard blows and use wrestling and judo moves to 'break her opponents' in many different grips she learned with her own powerful joints. For development I like to let her make use of her flexibility more despite Rin her embarrassment of her own quirk. Right now she only uses her quirk for fighting like a normal human instead of some nightmare horror that rotates her limbs like a helicopter.


Quirk and talents



Quirk Type
Mutation
Living Doll

Quirk Description
Rin can fully rotate any joint in her body. Instead of the normal connection between the bones any human has, Rin has special parts between her bones that she is free to control like normal joints. Her new joints can be seen on the skin by a thin black line that separates the skin parts of her body between the joints. Although the body parts can rotate, anything internal that is connected through her joints is rotated as well. The arteries and nerves are flexible than most people due to her quirk but rotating her joints too much can cause pain. More to her quirks is that she can train her joints the same way as her muscles, she can train her joints to put more force behind her quirk. The after effects of using her quirk is cramps in specific parts of her body when she rotates or uses these parts too much.


Abilities & Talents
From her training in the nights with her teacher she learnt the essentials of Judo and Jiu Jitsu to defend herself from villains. Rin teached herself some moves from the internet as well that she found fitting with her quirk.

Generally she is physically fit from playing, training and working outside over the years due to bad internet and boring television. After she had met her teacher she started doing a lot more cardio as well as requirement to keep up with training.

Furthermore she knows a lot about vegetable plants and flowers from having worked with her parents on the land all the time.
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I would really like it if you edited the application to match the CS code I provided. Indents and all. I only ask this because I use it as a measure to show people can follow directions and work within a framework. Every other person who has applied has done so and I know it sounds like a pain, but I’d like everyone to follow the same CS and I make it a habit of trying to treat everyone fairly and on the same level. Plus it helps with uniformity. Thank you! I’ll add your CS to the review queue right away!
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Y'all are in. You may pass Go! and you can collect 200 dollars.

@Stern Algorithm

I know you as reliable player as we’ve worked together in the past. However, the quirk is something I’m not too much of a fan of. Concerns were addressed and in combination with the weird quirk the establishment of another gaijin is something we want to be very careful on accepting. I only want to accept two non-native Japanese characters, so I’m being very choosy when looking over yours and Savo’s character.

Perhaps an adjustment is in order, but right now I’m going to have to decline the character.
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Hey, thanks for the vote of confidence and the glowing review. I realized with the quirk that it would be a long-shot, and I think I missed the fact that there was another 'gaijin' before me. As it turns out, I'm probably over-committed to RP's as it is, so I suppose I'm a little relieved to be 'honorably discharged'. Anyways, thank you for considering my application, and I hope you and your players have a great RP!
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Hey, thanks for the vote of confidence and the glowing review. I realized with the quirk that it would be a long-shot, and I think I missed the fact that there was another 'gaijin' before me. As it turns out, I'm probably over-committed to RP's as it is, so I suppose I'm a little relieved to be 'honorably discharged'. Anyways, thank you for considering my application, and I hope you and your players have a great RP!

Yeah, we'll still have Pariah anyhow.
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I'm working on my CS today. Hopefully I'll have it posted up today as well.

Sorry for my 4 day inactiveness.
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I'm working on my CS today. Hopefully I'll have it posted up today as well.

Sorry for my 4 day inactiveness.

We've got some pretty tight competition filling out the final characters, but I'll look at your CS fairly none-the-same.
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@Inkarnate Ah, crap.

Let me try to finish quickly then.
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Also, where can I find a CS template?
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