Hello! Is it okay if I join in? I can work on my character by this weekend.

Yep, put up an application and I will let you know.

Promise I haven't disappeared. Been lurking and a working on my cs. Wall-walking, gravity-shifting naive do-gooder coming up.

@Shapesplitter For future reference, please do not post a character in the Character Tab until it has been accepted. The Character Tab is only for characters who have undergone a review and been accepted by me. Until such a time it is an application.

Been gradually working on my Atlantean. ETA by Christmas.

Will probably lead off with a post about HAT, designer drugs, and some small-time gang with big ambitions.

And an angry eagle of course.

Mostly due to lack of time until next week.

@Everyone, Ongoing GM Plots can now be found here.

@Shapesplitter For future reference, please do not post a character in the Character Tab until it has been accepted. The Character Tab is only for characters who have undergone a review and been accepted by me. Until such a time it is an application.

OMG I'm so sorry. I was on the Characters tab to reference approved characters. I thought I switched tabs to OOC when I posted my character application. I'm really sorry. :(

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OMG I'm so sorry. I was on the Characters tab to reference approved characters. I thought I switched tabs to OOC when I posted my character application. I'm really sorry. :(

It happens, just wanted to make you aware of it. I'll have a review for you sometime tomorrow, just about to head to bed.

I’m cooking up a character rn. Hope to get them done in at least a few days : D

I’m cooking up a character rn. Hope to get them done in at least a few days : D

Curious to see what you've got cooking up.

Time Alteration | Lio Woods can manipulate time to specific extents. He can give someone more time to act or move faster than normal, take some of their time to make them act or move slower than normal, or completely trap them all in time. That sounds cool and maybe even overpowered, right? That's because the devil is in the details. Most people often skim that part. They see something cool, it's most definitely cool. No one takes the time to properly go through things anymore. With this ability, Kingston? can give them that time. Lio's ability is actually three parts of the same whole: (A) he can give people increased speed, acceleration, agility, and even velocity; (B) he can slow time for up to six targets within a 40-foot-cube range, making them move and act slower than normal, almost half of their ordinary speed, and therefore unable to react effectively; and (C) he can briefly stop the flow of time for everyone but himself. His ability is not without limitations, though, and boy are they very limiting.

I'm very confused about your chosen application for Lio's abilities. To me, a lot of this reads as though you wanted Lio to have time alteration because it's your favourite power, your user title after all is Time Mage, so it's obviously something you gravitate towards. But everything Lio can do, could be done by a Speedster. It doesn't particularly make sense to call it time alteration as the only time he seems to be alterting is how fast a person can move from Point A to Point B, which again feels like it could be made a whole lot easier with a form of super speed. You further say he can give someone agility but this is neither explained nor elaborated upon, the same goes for acceleration. I understand that by speeding up time, Lio can make some move faster from one point to another but is there now momentum added when he does so to account for the increase in acceleration? I should also point out that in the given context, speed and velocity mean the same thing and you don't need to mention both.

I just feel as though this ability section spends too much time assuring the reader that Lio is not overpowered, (the complete opposite of his personality section which reads as though Lio is better than you) and not enough time clearly explaining his abilities. As a whole, I'm generally wary of players who choose Chronokinesis and evidently, you're aware of this stigma, but I don't feel like this a good attempt at it. In all of media, the character of Hiro Nakamura is probably the best example of a time manipulator, using his abilities to fold time and space as a teleporter, slowing time to a crawl around himself or jumping forward and backward through time. But doing so in this RP would require a lot of cooperation from our players, too much to the point where plots would be hinged entirely on your character and we can't have that unfortunately.

Limitation(s) | Although his ability is believed to be limitless, Lio isn't actually that well-versed in its many and varied applications, owing to his own fears of losing his very existence in time if he overexerts his control over its domain. That said,Lio's range is very limited. Hastening or slowing time requires Lio to see his target(s). He may be able to slow time for up to six targets but they all have to be within a 40-foot-cube range. Both hastening and slowing time also only lasts for a minute. A hastened target is immediately unable to move as a wave of lethargy sweeps over them. The target may even die.

Stopping time completely affects everyone but himself, which means no time passes for anyone but himself, allowing him to act and move normally while everyone else is stuck in place without being aware of that fact. It's cool but also lonely and very dangerous. Time will immediately resume if (A) Lio comes into any form of contact, whether deliberate or not, with another being or any object worn or carried by another being; or (B) Lio moves more than 1,000 feet from where he originally stopped time. Because of the amount of energy it takes to stop time, Lio can barely use this ability for a whole minute.

The amount of time he can alter is dependent on the amount of sleep he gets, with each hour of sleep equivalent to one minute of time he can alter the next day. That means that if Lio slept a full five hours the night before, he will be able to alter a total of five minutes the next day. That means he can hasten or slow time five times that day. This is because his ability consumes his own save energy, the potential he has stored from resting. Using his ability too much will exhaust him and may even lead to fainting on the spot or even death. Lio has experienced reactive hypoglycemia (sugar crash) when he hastened too much time slightly. If he's exhausted, his abilities may even fail to work.

Lio cannot and will not even attempt to travel back or forward in time. It's too problematic and he doesn't even know or want to know if he can actually do that.

So again, you've begun your limitations by assuring the reader that Lio isn't overpowered, except in doing so you've actually done the opposite. What you've written states that Lio is his own roadblock and essentially with experience he will be limitless in power. This is very concerning for me and no doubt other players who will read your sheet. Aside from this statement, the rest of the limitations are well done.

Weakness(es) | Knocking Lio out is the most effective way to render his ability null right then and there. He needs to concentrate and use up energy for his ability to work. Taking his concentration and disrupting his energy flow is a surefire way to have him use his ability. Anyone who can sense beyond the normal may also quickly realize Lio's using his abilities given their apt perception but still won't be able to resist the effects of time alteration if currently in place. Because his ability is reliant on energy, it is possible for anyone who can control their own energy to challenge Lio's time alteration and force themselves out of his control.

I don't quite understand the sentence highlighted in red, did you mean to say that breaking his concentration or disrupting his energy flow is a surefire way to prevent the use of his ability? Outside of that, his weaknesses are fine but overall I can't accept this character as it is currently written. I'd really like to see either the application of Lio ability changed and brought more in line with a traditional time manipulator or his ability completely swapped out. The problem with the former suggestion is to ensure playability and compatibility with other players and time manipulation makes that very difficult, his abilities either need to be related to self or severely toned down. The easier path in my opinion would be to go with another ability that would allow you to replicate your desired effects without directly influencing time.

Ultimately this is your choice though and I will do my best to work with you on this to ensure that Lio is still the character you want to play.

@Star Lord Accepted.

Hmm that basically poaches my alien thing I wanted to do. Kind of out of ideas at this point.

Hmm that basically poaches my alien thing I wanted to do. Kind of out of ideas at this point.

What was your alien idea?

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What was your alien idea?

A teenage character undergoing a transformation into some sort of alien monster.

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A teenage character undergoing a transformation into some sort of alien monster.

Was it a symbiotic/parasitic relationship like Star Lord's sheet or was it more of a 'they had always been an alien, just weren't aware of it' deal. The latter could be quite different and even similar origins can come across as completely different characters provided their abilities, personalities and backstories have enough variance.

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Was it a symbiotic/parasitic relationship like Star Lord's sheet or was it more of a 'they had always been an alien, just weren't aware of it' deal. The latter could be quite different and even similar origins can come across as completely different characters provided their abilities, personalities and backstories have enough variance.

The latter, but the alien origin was the main thing separating him from being too similar to JunkMail's character, who is also a big monster.

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The latter, but the alien origin was the main thing separating him from being too similar to JunkMail's character, who is also a big monster.

Right, I can see how that could also be a problem. The RP has a lot of brawlers, so that entire archetype isn't really to be encouraged at the moment. Did you have any ideas for something like an elemental user or something more based on ranged or energy attacks?