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Lol it will be interesting if our weapons and meisters ever team up because Quinn is like the complete opposite of Cameron lol


Funnily enough, Cameron started out as "Jasper Schumaker." I changed his name once I realized that it could get confusing.
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@stoneyeah it could be confusing just a bit though XD
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I'm just now realizing that I'm at an info deficit in regards to Soul Eater. Guess that's what happens when you only catch a few episodes as a dumb kid and don't really pay attention to what's happening...
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I have become... snail.

Yeah, sorry for the slow pace. I'll finish my sheet today, pinky promise!
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I am also snail, Viola will be done today. I swear ~
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@Sunbather What is your profile picture from?
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@Sunbather What is your profile picture from?


League of Legends
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Also @Hitman is everyone in the same class? Or are DW and M paired into the same class regardless of age and past schooling? I was wondering how much realism we'd be adding into the school setting.

EDIT: We're all in the EAT class I'm dumb. But my school setting question hasn't changed.
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@stone Not a fan of that genre but the video's good.
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@Rockin Strings I don’t really play anymore, but yeah Riot’s videos are always really high quality.
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I am very late, but yes, LoL! I don't play myself, I tried it a few times. Just thought it looked neat. :P

Anyways, here's my sheet, finally! As asked, she's got the spoopy blood, and I hope nothing sticks out as overly powerful. And just to reassure all other players, if you see anything you find too-much, lemme know. :) I just wanted the A E S T H E T I C(tm)



Edit: Fixed some typos and oversights.
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Made it down to backstory on Celica. God, I'm going so slow. I'm sorry about that.
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Save for Soul Resonance, I finally finished her.
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@Sunbather @Shinobu Both look good!
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Here she is! She is done! Still need a partner though.
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Here she is! She is done! Still need a partner though.


I definitely think you have a solid foundation here; however, I feel some quintessential details are lacking that make it feel a bit incomplete.

  • The personality is a bit underdeveloped for my liking. It feels like almost too shallow of a view into Jackie, not really showing that much about her personality beyond surface appearances. If you could expand on that a bit that would be great.
  • I think the backstory could use a little elaboration. As we see in the news and such, celebrity children, especially to rock-star singer,s often have a lot of what could be called "psychological trauma" in many ways, lol. I feel like that's improperly developed, instead just being "Jackie likes music."
  • I do think the scene with the monster is underdeveloped as well. There's not a clear explanation as to how a monster came to Death City undetected and decided to attack spontaneously, and how a Meister just happened to be there to save the day. Elaboration there would be nice as well.


Overall, it's a great start and a likeable character, and I think if it were fleshed out a little more, it would be a great addition to the crew. :)
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Also @Hitman is everyone in the same class? Or are DW and M paired into the same class regardless of age and past schooling? I was wondering how much realism we'd be adding into the school setting.


I'm going to need a bit of clarification on that question, if you could.

That Discord Server y'all wanted is up! It is the pinnacle of rudimentary as of now, but I'll spruce it up at a later date.

discord.gg/2b2rtFu

I'd like to set a tentative start date for this weekend, maybe earlier if everybody finishes their forms! That being said, do not feel pressured to rush! Quality over quantity after all.

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I edit my character bio, I add more into her personality and deleted the scene with the monster
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I edit my character bio, I add more into her personality and deleted the scene with the monster


Looks better already! I do see a little more room to improve still, but overall, it's a good enough character for sure! Accepted.
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