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Excuse me for double posting, but how far are we from starting IC? I wanna know if I should leave posts pre-written before work starts.
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We'll probably wait until we have some of the characters accepted before starting. You can start writing your post, but maybe not post it until later.
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Hey guys. This is slightly in progress still but here ya go:



Feedback Notes and Acceptance

I really dig this backstory, the characterization you're aiming for, and the type of moveset you're creating. I was looking at some of the other threads on here and some GM-applicant exchanges just out of curiosity and it struck me how important it was to have interesting and diverse characters to create a real anime-type cast. I think you definitely managed to make something unique while using some oft seen tropes.

One thing I would say is that there are a few spelling mistakes in there and the formatting of centering everything makes it an abrasive read. I went through the same thing when formatting the OP and found that not centering made things look better. Either way feel free to add Yasuke to the character section.

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Name: Iori Kure
Nickname: Squalo
Age: 22
Type of Voice/Voice Actor: Sahr Ngaujah
Handedness: Left-Handed
Birth Sign: Libra
Village/Country: Land of Iron
Likes/Interests: Appearances. Plays, preferably tragedies. World history,better to know your enemy, his father, grandfather, and progenitors. Their culture. Military. Cuisine. There’s power in knowing. Maps. Ramen. Human nature & its clash with modern science. The pheromones given off by prey nearing death. It’s rather intoxicating,

Dislikes: Messiness. Complacency. Dull stories.

Economic Status/Behavior: Your First Goal Seeking Objective: Upper middle class. Whatever his salary as a fast rising military officer cannot afford he compensates for using political connections.

Personality traits, favorite sayings, habits:
“To put an end to the facade of peace afflicting the world, and see the return of the warring eras of the past. That makes for a better story than this nonsense of “peace”, doesn’t it?

Decisive & cunning. Duplicitous. Iori is manipulative, carefully disguising a sadistic persona under the guise of pacifism. The smell of blood pulls him into the mood of a fight. Intelligent, he’s confident in his ability to mask his true intentions. Despite being cautious, Iori’s underlying sadistic urges sometimes complicate his plans. A man of many illusions and faces. No one ever knows what he is truly thinking.

Brief History:


The man who let Grendel loose. In becoming a breaker of chains, he sent his clansmen to their deaths”
Grendel was the name of this grim demon
Haunting the marches, marauding round the heath
And the desolate fens; he had dwelt for a time
-Beowulf, Seamus Heaney Translation


When he saw that his infamy had risen to such a point that he was given the moniker, Squalo, Iori was amused. At least his enemies were literate. Among the Kure clan, not a single soul understood how the young Iori obtained his position. It was not that there was doubt in his competency as Rear Admiral of the Land of Iron. Subordinates praised him for his intelligence, commended his grace and charm. Yet, when questioned further, no one could account for his true origins.

Iori, a member of the Kure branch house, lacked the monstrous strength common among members of the main house. That is not to say that he was ever considered weak. No one has been able to accurately gauge his strength, nor describe his technique. His entire life, a majority of fights concluded in his opponents forfeit or withdrawal, overwhelmed by his massive battle aura. Whispers in the hall of the Kure palace illustrate the man as a bloodthirsty shark, free from the fear of predation.. And, that is such tales of his infamy have remained as nothing more than whispers.

When the Kure family head, Demali, adopted an outsider into the family, Yasuke found a saving grace from the new prospect. The two became fast friends as Iori assimilated into one of the branch family houses. Yasuke, as the middle child, struggled to find his footing in society. Iori, with effortless grace, commanded attention and respect unlike the clumsy Yasuke, too socially awkward to partake in the clan’s official affairs.

Demali took special interest in Iori and would eventually mold him into becoming a respected right hand. Notably, when he waived Iori’s branding ceremony, powerful fuinjutsu that removed a person’s ability to speak and disclose pertinent information. This was the Kure’s way of preserving the secrecy behind the Gu ritual, keeping generations of human weapon programming in the shadows. Few in the clan were afforded such privileges, and never without a price. Iori paid that price and many more with an indulgent smile, he had no qualms about dancing with the devil so long that it benefited him.

Worming his way into the daimyo’s cabinet, securing Rear Admiral at the age of 18, Iori’s rise in the bureaucracy in the Land of Iron mirrored the tenancy of child soldiers from the Warring Age. He had it all, set for life, and yet dreadfully bored. Before, he satisfied his needs with games. Convincing Yasuke that he could gain independence from the main house with his honest efforts, and then accompanying him in his training in medical ninjutsu. The pleasure of Yasuke’s impending torment satiated his thirst for a while but it wasn’t enough. None of it would be enough.

And so, he would create his own monster. Freeing Yasuke from the clan’s hold on his psyche was like the feeling one gets as a child, setting up fireworks for the first time. The rush of death swarms your chest as you wait for that inevitable explosion. When he realized that his monster had suffered from warped, distorted memories and delusions he crept with joy. Tragedy. Tragedy. Tragedy. Iori believed himself to be a poet. And, a poet pays his toll in suffering. His whole life he felt robbed, stolen from a time long ago. He wished to have been born in that ancient era of heroes and villains, of war and death. Iori would author his own tragedy,

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“A man whose blade rob’s its opponent of their hold on the world. “

“The illusory blade”.Iori style:Jaiantopansā-ryu “Giant Panther Style”[1.5]
The kenjutsu of the Kure clan was forged for the purpose of combating ninjutsu. Jaiantopansa-ryu techniques are divided into five forms based on respective elements(Lightning/Thunder, Fire, Wind,Water, & Earth. Each Kata is specialized in a category, speed, strength, evasion & defense.

A skilled illusionist, Iori employs efficient bursts of genjutsu prowess in combination with the kenjutsu of the Kure. His variant of Jaiantopansā-ryu uses genjutsu to disrupt the chakra flow of an opponent’s nervous system. A pair of bells hang from his blade’s kashira(butt-cap), also decorated by bright purple ribbons. These sensory props enhance his illusory swordplay as he works to disrupt the opponent’s senses.

Suiton Release[1.5]
The user's affinity in nature release lies in water, enabling him control over bodies of water and emission of water through his own chakra reserves.

Jutsu List: 4 D-rank, 2 C-rank, 1 B-rank








Stats:

You have 525 points to allocate to these stats

Strength: 75
Dexterity: 80
Perception: 100
Chakra Control: 100
Charisma: 90
Proficiency: 80
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I just found out we can actually code tables into our posts, which should allow for some really awesome organization. I'll test it out later when I get home!
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I was just working on that actually.

I finished coding the sheet in the character tab, if you guys wanna have a look
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Coding here is kinda weird, but it works and I really do like it. Though it is a learning curve, good lord jesus
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Yeah there's definitely some very interesting things I've been seeing in other threads I've perused through. There's a certain creative energy this forum has that I find exciting. A lot of the posts I've read in other threads are really streamlined despite there being such a high character count to post with.

I think I would like the get the IC up sometime tomorrow night. I think of the known applicants we're just waiting on myself and Kaze no Kizu to finish our character sheets.

I've started making the first mission event and I'm pretty excited to kick off with it. I really think the goal setting system will create a unique experience for everyone.
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I've been doing all kinds of stuff when it comes to prep. Really excited for this to start and start growing my character.
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My shifts are early this weekend so I might be able to start rolling as soon as it starts. This heat kills all my productivity though.

Edit: let's test it out.



D-Rank Jutsu
Ookyuu Shochi: First Aid...............................By channeling his chakra through a person’s blood, Hotaru is capable of healing minor bleeding injuries caused by cuts, gashes or rips. It does not extend to blunt sourced injuries like broken bones.Ninjutsu Neutral Support
Saki no Togatta: Pointy End...............................After piercing an enemy with his sword, a water imprint of the Kinryuu is left behind once Hotaru removes the blade. After doing this in quick succession, he can dismiss all the water to leave the enemy bleeding profusely.Kenjutsu Suiton Offense
Nami no Kyuuden: Palace of Waves...............................Hotaru can gather enough water around him or someone/something he wishes to protect and stop any form of physical attack aimed at it. If the attacker has more strength than him, it cannot be stopped but will, at least, be slowed down.Ninjutsu Suiton Defense
Ouji no Ha: Prince’s Blade...............................A horizontal slice performed with the Kinryuu, its blade infused with Hotaru’s chakra. Powerful enough to knock its target back.Kenjutsu Neutral Offense
What do you think? Does that make it easier to read information? Not sure what's up with the ugly ass space between the table and the upper normal text, I swear I have all the code already glued to it.
This is such a goddamn pain though...I'll leave it be if anyone wants to copy and paste the code to use it, but I'm not gonna change my own template. I like it enough as is. I'm probably going to end up changing everything halfway into the rp anyway.
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I like that it's organized, but I guess I rather have it more like how I used to do it.

I think my template turned out pretty slick, but all I did was essentially make two rows, I guess.

Either way, I really enjoy how vast the coding here is. I'm gonna keep working on to expand on it.
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I like that it's organized, but I guess I rather have it more like how I used to do it.

I think my template turned out pretty slick, but all I did was essentially make two rows, I guess.

Either way, I really enjoy how vast the coding here is. I'm gonna keep working on to expand on it.


It looks pretty cool! How did you make it so your youtube link is hidden behind a [x] though?
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My shifts are early this weekend so I might be able to start rolling as soon as it starts. This heat kills all my productivity though.

Edit: let's test it out.



D-Rank Jutsu
Ookyuu Shochi: First Aid...............................By channeling his chakra through a person’s blood, Hotaru is capable of healing minor bleeding injuries caused by cuts, gashes or rips. It does not extend to blunt sourced injuries like broken bones.Ninjutsu Neutral Support
Saki no Togatta: Pointy End...............................After piercing an enemy with his sword, a water imprint of the Kinryuu is left behind once Hotaru removes the blade. After doing this in quick succession, he can dismiss all the water to leave the enemy bleeding profusely.Kenjutsu Suiton Offense
Nami no Kyuuden: Palace of Waves...............................Hotaru can gather enough water around him or someone/something he wishes to protect and stop any form of physical attack aimed at it. If the attacker has more strength than him, it cannot be stopped but will, at least, be slowed down.Ninjutsu Suiton Defense
Ouji no Ha: Prince’s Blade...............................A horizontal slice performed with the Kinryuu, its blade infused with Hotaru’s chakra. Powerful enough to knock its target back.Kenjutsu Neutral Offense
What do you think? Does that make it easier to read information? Not sure what's up with the ugly ass space between the table and the upper normal text, I swear I have all the code already glued to it.
This is such a goddamn pain though...I'll leave it be if anyone wants to copy and paste the code to use it, but I'm not gonna change my own template. I like it enough as is. I'm probably going to end up changing everything halfway into the rp anyway.


This is pretty cool and I think that the fact it's different from Sync's makes it even better. Uniformity is cool but I think being able to have different types of templates gives them more character.
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[url=http://][x][/url]

like the hider just add the link inside the url next to the = the [x] will hold the link. It works with anything, including images or just about anything that your put inside. Also just don't add the space.
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Feedback

The C-rank is too close to Kamui. I personally think the conversation for intangibility starts at A-rank even if it's just through surroundings. The second Tsuchikage's ability to blend into his surroundings and avoid detection was a B-rank.

In terms of his rank I think it may be too high considering everyone is an adult aged Genin due to the ACNL and a rear admiral even if nominal is the equivalent of a 2 star general in most military settings.

Lastly I'd also say the B-Rank being a 2 step move in essence makes it 2 moves. Maybe replace the phasing with the first form then keep the second form as a B-rank.

The fighting style and jutsu are very impressive though. I don't think I've ever seen anyone create a viable genjutsu build in an RP where PvP is expected. I don't want to get too far out in front of my skis but I think once the above changes are made the character will be good to go.

Edit: After the edits I can officially say Accepted
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Liking the cast so far. When this project was just coming off the ground a bunch of us shared initial designs for our OCs. I was expecting a Village Hidden in Wakanda with all the black characters initially presented lol. Excited to see this take off. I barely have a story idea prepared but it'll be fun working on the fly with ya'll.
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I was expecting a Village Hidden in Wakanda.


Make it happen.

Also. We have a new title. I confess I don't understand what this new one means. The vocab is unfamiliar to me.
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<Snipped quote by KarmicNomad>

Make it happen.

Also. We have a new title. I confess I don't understand what this new one means. The vocab is unfamiliar to me.


It roughly translates to No Limits Generation. We have a pretty quirky cast and I just love the creativity everyone is bringing to this RP, so I wanted something that fit us better. I normally wouldn't have changed the title but it would have irked me something fierce using a title that didn't have as much meaning.
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Liking the cast so far. When this project was just coming off the ground a bunch of us shared initial designs for our OCs. I was expecting a Village Hidden in Wakanda with all the black characters initially presented lol. Excited to see this take off. I barely have a story idea prepared but it'll be fun working on the fly with ya'll.


Ikr, but it makes me happy seeing so many different interpretations
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