@VitaVitaAR What if they used to fight in the past and now there is an understanding/NAP between the snakefolk and the Burial Agency, who keep their distance from each other?
Anyway is that everything? I've already made the last round of edits to his appearance.
@Searat: Hmmm, I think I could go with the personality being a bit more fleshed out at least, and I do want to point out Alhein's not a city or territory, it's a paramilitary organization operating in any territories that give it permission.
@Dead Cruiser: I'm going to be honest and say something I've been a little hesitant to: I still kind of want to see @Bartimaeus's take on the idea before I go ahead.
Since your ideas are so close to one another, I think it's fair to see both.
@Dead Cruiser Okay, I'll be blunt, since you seem to be failing to read between the lines here: your character is so far away from the intended tone of the roleplay that it's blatantly unrecoverable. The anime/manga tag there is meant to suggest that beastfolk are almost entirely human, not cannibalistic Voldemort knockoffs.
The accepted characters so far are a robot catgirl, ghost puncher, and a fluffy bird wizard. Loner poison monk with a cursed sword is missing the intended tone by a mile.
@Dead Cruiser: Okay, I apologize for failing to look over the whole bio properly now aside from the specific details that stood out to me.
But I'm not certain any further recommendations would have him fit into the plot for this RP very neatly, and I can't really support multiple character groups as a single GM.
I apologize for my failure in terms of bio analysis, I've actually been sort of preoccupied with some other stuff and thus I screwed up here.
@VitaVitaAR What plot is that? There is no overarching plot described in the OP, besides a short mention of whom I am to assume is your DMPC.
He doesn't need a separate group, he can join in with whoever on his quest to save his village. I thought his personal goals were pretty simple and easy to work into everything else.
@Dead Cruiser: While I did endeavor to keep the plot relatively under wraps and thus did not include too much of it in the OP, that doesn't mean considerations in regards to this are irrelevant.
And I'm currently not certain how well your character will fit.
@Dead Cruiser: If you want me to be clearer, I do immediately have to take issues with you forcing in the man-eating snake angle after being told to remove it as an action your character takes by shifting it to your snake summon. Sure, maybe having a snake that could chomp people wouldn't have been an issue on its own, but the way this has been handled certainly is to me.
Honestly this is less to do with the trait at this point and more to do with the fact that it feels like you're trying to work around my word as a GM rather then listening to what I ask you do to. Getting you to make your character appearance fall in line with what beastfolk are meant to be like in the setting took more tries then it should have and you've still tried to keep as many details in as possible, including waxing his entire body to remove all hair for some reason.
Worming around my word is not going to endear me to your attempts to join my RP and it's in part why I've been hesitant this entire time.
Most importantly, however, I've already had one player publicly state concerns about your character and that isn't the only person, both in terms of people who have already signed up and who are considering signing up, who have done the same privately.
In this light I'm not inclined to continue working at this character.
Name: Erika Frost Age: 19 Gender Female Appearance: It’s easy to pick out Erika in a crowd for the most part. She has rather impressively tanned skin and bleach blonde hair. While a bit on the taller side, the woman definitely isn’t anything impressive in that department. She’s rather well endowed in a few select areas and tends to wear outfits that emphasize that aspect.
Personality: There’s an old, archaic term used to describe one aspect of her. Gyaru. Her speech mannerisms, for the most part, tend to be odd and likely to garner her a few looks of curiosity. Outside that, however, she’s a rather out-going and friendly girl though with a small competitive streak. She likes to make friends with most people she sees unless they give her bad “vibes”.
When it comes to her job however, she’s more than happy to make it a competition if it comes to it and she can be a bit on the aggressive side with trash talking, though she seems to calm down when she wins or loses.
"Brief" Backstory: At a young age Fuuka lived with her father, an artifact hunter, near a rather active artifact hotspot. He had a few small but interesting pieces that may or may not have been actual artifacts, it was hard for her to tell. But, he showed her how to work on said pieces to make them work and it sparked a passion in her. Some years later, he went on an artifact hunt to the nearby spot and she never heard from him again. She asked some of the hunters that knew him if they had seen him and they all told her that they hadn’t.
Years passed until she was almost nine years old. She lived in the same dilapidated house that she had lived with her father in. She became somewhat well know, at least among the orphan population and some of the poorer folk, as someone who could fix things for some food if there was no other choice. She took scraps she found and worked them together with some of her father’s weathered and beaten equipment to make a few small, simple gadgets. Simple things that she could sell off to some of the artifact hunters for a small price and telling her if they found a clue about her father. Not that there was any of that ever found. One, however, an older man brought her a stack of books. Books with pictures with bubbles carrying text. An old entertainment source of some kind. They were in miraculously good shape too! Seeing as she was interested in then, he gave it to her since she made something that was useful to him in his search.
Not long after she decided that if no one else would find her father she would. She went out of her way to gather a weeks worth of supplies, water and make some devices. With that and some protective clothing, she descended into where the relics would be. The same place her father might be, an underground complex of sorts.
She dove rather deep and at one point, she was just about to give up. There were many chambers and all were empty. Obviously, others had already looted these easy to access areas. Then she came upon something. A mark etched into the wall that she had seen only from one person, her father. It was something akin to a snowflake and there was an arrow pointing to a direction. Then another. And another and then she found herself in front of a hole in the wall. It was seemingly dug out some. Obvious indentations showed someone had tried to take a pick to it before. They were somewhat successful as there was hole. Small enough for someone of small stature to crawl through.
On the otherside, she found a room that was mostly looted. There was, however, a capsule-like construct in the middle of the room. It was a machine of some sort. It still hummed with power, somehow, but it didn’t seem to want to open. She had brought some tools with her so she took a look at it and, somehow, opened it. Inside was a bracelet of some sort. She took it. Perhaps… An artifact? She frowned and exited the way she entered. She stuffed it in her bag and explored a bit more though she did not find hide nor hair of her father. She turned back and safely returned home.
When she got home, she met someone. A rather well endowed woman who seemed interested in her skills and the ability to collect an artifact herself. Her name, Fuuka. And, as Erika learned later, one of the sages. Due to her expressed skills, Fuuka took her in as a disciple. After she was taken in, Erika started to imitate the style of the girls in those books the old man had given her and started to respect Fuuka as a teacher and came to appreciate her as mother figure, or perhaps even more than that…
Skills In her heart, Erika is an engineer before anything else. That said, there’s a part of her that just loves delving into ruins and other places to find Artifacts. It’s even better if she can mix both of these passions into one thing. She’s honed herself as an engineer, fighter and searcher. Almost comically, she’s also quite skilled at parkour, starting training in this after she was taken in by Fuuka. She’s very good at keeping up or keeping away from people.
Abilities: Erika has pretty good reflexes and dexterity. What she lacks in fortitude and strength she more than makes up for with her control over her body.
Equipment: Erika has one artifact that she just so happened to come across in her journeys. Her teacher, Fuuka, called it “Medusa” and it’s a marvelous piece of machinery and magic. By first look, it’s a rather fine looking bracelet. But once you put it on and funnel some magic into it, it produces an outfit around the wearer.
It gives a feeling of having multiple forms, but there only seems to be one. A picture in an old book seems to describe the look as a “Ninja Outfit”. As for what makes the outfit special, it increases physical strength through mechanical means and has a grappling hook in one gauntlet that can pull the user to the location the hook is as well as giving the user a rather cool look. In her free time, Erika likes to pick at the bracelet to discover its secrets.
Outside of her single artifact, she has a more mundane magitech sword to defend herself with.
@VitaVitaAR So Olly I was going to have him be a rather skilled mage but still mastering his talents. I was thinking he was an amateur in pretty much all fields of magic but only able to use the weaker spells of each category. Like he can sputter crappy flames, make ice cubes, do some small-scale landscaping and be annoying by spreading condensation on stuff, etc.
