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Initially the thought is to wait til we have all our eggs in one basket, but since there's no conflictions I guess I could start us off fairly soon once I get through some more apps.

EDIT: Updated some of the approved applications, will look over the second half ASAP.

EDIT #2: Updated the wiki with some of the gathered information.
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Okay, CS updated. Only missing a sample post now. ^.^
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|IDENTITY| Slade Wilson Alias Deathstroke

| Origin & Backstory | - Slade Wilson was born in Melbourne, Australia to career criminal Joseph Wilson. Joseph abandoned his son, leaving Slade little else but his name. Slade landed in a foster home, and as soon as he came of age, joined the Australian military alongside his foster brother and best friend, Billy Wintergreen. The two received top marks in all physical and mental examinations; Almost immediately the two were recruited into ASIS.

During their partnership, the two took part in more than 37 black operations, with Slade operating under the call sign "Deathstroke" and Billy under "Ravager."

During their last mission as a team, ASIS had gotten word that the Chinese had files on a Former ASIS agent and the experimental training he'd undergone. ASIS' response was to send Billy & Slade into Shanghai to recover the files. Though their insertion went smoothly, Billy inadvertently set off the silent defense system, and the two were caught. Upon their capture, they were introduced to a man named Yao Fei. Yao Fei gave them two options: talk now & work for me or I'll make you talk.

For the next six months, Slade & Billy were water boarded along with other methods of torture. 5 months and 3 weeks in, Billy broke and talked. Turning on his partner and his country, Billy then presided over Slade's torture, venting years worth of jealousy. Angered by his friend's betrayal, Slade broke free during an interrogation and fought Billy. Though the two had been partners for years, Slade managed to mortally wound Wintergreen, but at the cost of his right eye. Slade then proceeded to escape, but was stopped by Yao Fei. Fei engaged Slade and the two fought to a standstill. Just when it looked like Fei was going to kill Slade, he was shot by a dying Wintergreen. Billy had saved Slade out of guilt and a hope of redemption; he died in Slade's arms

Upon his return to ASIS, Slade underwent severe psych testing and met his new psychiatrist, Dr. Adeline Kane. After a month of his testing, Slade was approached by Dr. Kane for an new serum salvaged from a sunken Japanese WW2 ship. They named it Mirakuru. Slade accepted and became enhanced; Speed, strength, reflexes, mental functions. Having no idea as to the psychological effect of Mirakuru, Slade's CO placed Dr. Kane in the program, monitoring Slade's psych/mental health.

. As the darling of the program, Slade was sent on more and more missions but became increasingly disenfranchised. The Mirakuru made him better, but in the process, he was losing his deep sense of honor

A year after Mirakuru, he resigned from ASIS and killed everyone involved with manufacturing the serum, believing them to have forgotten all sense of honor and morality. They had sent him in blind numerous times, each time with an objective more atrocious than the last; he had been forced to kill civilians based on unverifiable intel.

Almost immediately, he went rogue, contacting a man named Christoph, an information broker/merc handler, working as a mercenary,choosing to pick his own missions and using his old code name and mask.

| Character Notes | - Is there anything you want to elaborate on? Extra lore for the city you are home to? Notable NPCs? Addie Kane. The one person he left alive is relentlessly hunting him, doggedly pursuing him; but at the same time she harboring feeling towards him.

| Powers & Abilities | enhanced speed, strength, reflexes and mental capacities

| How is this character different? | like Arrow Slade, He's Australian and has Mirakuru but there are other marked differences

| What is your goal with this character? | during the old NUDC I ran Slade and I missed him. I wanted to do him, but with a new take.

|Sample Post|

Sydney, Australia

The steel room clanged with the opening of a heavy steel door. Dr. Adeline Kane walked in, taking appraisal of the six men sitting in a half circle. All six had turned to face her, and she could see that their dispositions were of the unpleased variety.

Walking to the small podium facing the semicircle, Addie set her notes on it and cleared her throat. Before she could speak, the man directly across from her, ASIS Director Adam Walker spoke. "Dr. Kane, before we begin, may I ask why you've called this meeting?" Addie nodded, activating the large screen behind her. "His name is Slade Wilson. Former ASIS Agent, partnered with deceased rogue agent Billy Wintergreen." Director Walker spoke up again. "Agent Wilson? I remember him. Good man. Unparalleled skill." Addie shook her head, too angry to speak, and too professional to do so if she could.

"With all due respect, sir, Wilson, code named "Deathstroke" has gone rogue. Last month, he slaughtered the entire Mirakuru project heads and burned the rest of the serum." Addie responded, causing Director Walker to balk with surprise. "Dr. Kane, why wasn't I informed? I want the full story, now!"

"Well sir, it all began a month ago....."

|One Month Earlier|

Slade Wilson was lying on a cold steel table, the kind reserved for hospitals and medical clinics. The room he was in was bare, save for a few monitors attached to the wall. They monitored his vitals via the wireless pads on his head, chest and bicep. Readouts beeped softly, the only sound in an otherwise silent room.

Slade thought of his recent missions, of detonating the bridge in Kandahar, of wiping out the supposed Taliban village in Afghanistan, of the assasination in Munich. He reflected on the actions he'd been forced to take. What he found through reflection was an absence of honor, of morality. So when he ripped the wireless sensors off, and the guard came rushing in; Slade dodged the baton and punched the man in the kidney. The man fell to his knees and Slade stood behind him, hands on the head and jaw. He leaned in and whispered in the man's ear.

"You should've had honor."

The man's neck snapped, and Slade grabbed his nightstick; the massacre had begun.
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I'd like to see more dealing with the details of Slade's backstory; why he killed the Mirakuru project leaders, why he turned to mercenary work (and how, you need a handler or a broker). Perhaps detailing the torture they endured as well. Also a more detailed sample would help too since you tried to impress me last game so why stop now?
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Ok. I'll work on it... For the record I was distracted by Arrow. But I'm going to continue to try to impress you.
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....and I'm missing a new Arrow episode, bollocks. I'll catch up on hulu in a few hours then.
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Lol this Arrow episode, DSW might've had a nerdgasm (I did, so its OK lol)
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No spoilers, or I will castrate every last one of you.
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Gowi said
....and I'm missing a new Arrow episode, bollocks. I'll catch up on hulu in a few hours then.


You've turned!...

I'm holding out for Gotham. That totally sounds like it won't be a flop.
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You've turned!...I'm holding out for Gotham. That totally sounds like it won't be a flop.


I rewatched season one with the fanboy stick removed from my rectum, and saw it in better light around... episode twelve or so?
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Personally I think Constantine's new show and Flash'll be cool
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Gowi said
I rewatched season one with the fanboy stick removed from my rectum, and saw it in better light around... episode twelve or so?


Fair enough. My blood has cooled somewhat on the matter. I still don't physically have the time for it, but I can acknowledge that there's a place for it.
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Okay! Sample post is done for the Spirit! :D

*Has been watching Sherlock from BBC lately*
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lydyn said
Okay! Sample post is done for the Spirit! :D*Has been watching Sherlock from BBC lately*


Oh, I love that show *squee!*.
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thatguy said
Lol this Arrow episode, DSW might've had a nerdgasm (I did, so its OK lol)


I totally did. Rewatched it six times. I finally like Slade's New Zealand accent
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On pending CS’s from: Thatguy and Ben.

I feel a little divided on this one as I have no doubt of the enthusiasm and drive for Ultimate DC in the last few seasons though I do feel I have to stress that while I don’t want to come off as being opposed to Andy’s (and Master Bruce’s) inclusiveness – I feel that to up the quality control of this as a roleplay I have to put some objectivity in the ballpark and concern myself with grammar/spelling and narrative. For Ben, there’s a lot that I see that need to be went over—may I suggest a word processor or something of that effect that covers grammar as well? I don’t want to bar people from the roleplay, but I want to push it to a quality that some of the people I’ve consulted with desire and I can’t promise them quality like this. This is not an outright denial, but I’d like to see more out of the applications (both of them) before I make comments of consideration.

I am not Andy, but I am not Thrawn – so I think I offer a comfortable middle when I ask for a little more than last time. However, I will stress that this isn’t a developmental circuit either. If you want to run in this low advanced / high casual roleplay then let’s show me that dedication; if not, then perhaps down the line after some more time and development I’d have changed my tune. I apologize if this seems overly non-inclusive, firm, and shattering – but I made a promise to myself and the players when this responsibility got handed to me and I’m trying to go for it.

The word of the day is Quality Control and I do not know how to enforce it without burning bridges. I hope that much is understood. I know that this seems to go against "have fun"... but I've always felt we should strive for something more than careless fun when sitting down to write something together where it is fun for all. I hope that isn't seen in a negative way.

I am in the chat if informal chat is more appropriate, but otherwise 'tis my judgement.

TLDR – Revise your apps, work on grammar & spelling, show me a sample with a little more drive or convince me through other means that you're still able to commit to this game.
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Okay! Sample post is done for the Spirit! :D*Has been watching Sherlock from BBC lately*


Taking a look, will let you know judgement.

Edit: The sample shows some narrative I particularly look forward to reading and all of it seems to check out. The Gypsy / The Spirit (with a dash of Nightshade/Shade) blend is particularly interesting and I can't wait to see where you take it on with. Accepted.
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Hey guys, sorry for the absence but college is taking a lot out of me. I am in the works of tweaking my CS and finishing the sample but first I feel the need to ask...Gowi, do you have any comments or concerns about the way my CS has turned out so far, specifically the back story? I only ask since the major comment in every "criticism" (for lack of a better word) is quality control.
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On pending CS’s from: Thatguy and Ben.I feel a little divided on this one as I have no doubt of the enthusiasm and drive for Ultimate DC in the last few seasons though I do feel I have to stress that while I don’t want to come off as being opposed to Andy’s (and Master Bruce’s) inclusiveness – I feel that to up the quality control of this as a roleplay I have to put some objectivity in the ballpark and concern myself with grammar/spelling and narrative. For Ben, there’s a lot that I see that need to be went over—may I suggest a word processor or something of that effect that covers grammar as well? I don’t want to bar people from the roleplay, but I want to push it to a quality that some of the people I’ve consulted with desire and I can’t promise them quality like this. This is not an outright denial, but I’d like to see more out of the applications (both of them) before I make comments of consideration. I am not Andy, but I am not Thrawn – so I think I offer a comfortable middle when I ask for a little more than last time. However, I will stress that this isn’t a developmental circuit either. If you want to run in this low advanced / high casual roleplay then let’s show me that dedication; if not, then perhaps down the line after some more time and development I’d have changed my tune. I apologize if this seems overly non-inclusive, firm, and shattering – but I made a promise to myself and the players when this responsibility got handed to me and I’m trying to go for it. The word of the day is Quality Control and I do not know how to enforce it without burning bridges. I hope that much is understood. I know that this seems to go against "have fun"... but I've always felt we should strive for something more than careless fun when sitting down to write something together where it is fun . I hope that isn't seen in a negative way.I am in the chat if informal chat is more appropriate, but otherwise 'tis my judgement.TLDR – Revise your apps, work on grammar & spelling, show me a sample with a little more drive or convince me through other means that you're still able to commit to this game.Taking a look, will let you know judgement. The sample shows some narrative I particularly look forward to reading and all of it seems to check out. The Gypsy / The Spirit (with a dash of Nightshade/Shade) blend is particularly interesting and I can't wait to see where you take it on with. Accepted.


Well I’m not quite sure, what you mean. I have looked over my CS, and I really only found 2-3 places or so, that needed to be fixed (according to my understanding of the English language, of course).
I realize, there are slightly different comma rules in Scandinavia (I use those, cause I’m from there), but after reading yours and mine (Based on the OC intro post of this RP) I do however come to the conclusion, that I could teach you where to place a comma. That possibly seems like a low blow, yeah. Hopefully you see it as a fair point, and believe that I have no intentions to analyze and argue over verbs and stuff. I just want to be sure that, that is not, what you are talking about. I assume your understanding of quality control, on an advanced RP, don’t involve that kind of grammar and syntax.
Which lets me to assume that, you are talking about, how well I bend verbs and stuff like that, right?
Well, as I wrote, I couldn’t really find much wrong with what, I had written before. And what I have written before is more or less the standard, I'm able to write with, once the IC starts. I guess that is bad news for me, because that does mean, I can’t be a part of the IC.

Just because I was a part of the previous season (and a positive force I dare say so), you, of course, don’t owe me a spot on this one. This is your RP, your rules and your understanding of right and wrong (just like any GM).
I do however (hopefully the other players will agree) believe, I deserve to walk out of this with a perfect understanding of what exactly was wrong/not good enough with my CS. Because, like I said, I couldn’t find anything wrong.

EDIT: This is a shame, of course. I had really missed the previous RP and was excited to see it start again. There are also a lot of great people involved.
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Slade CS updated; if further revisions are needed, I'll make them.
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