Any CS's that need to be reviewed?

In any case, to those waiting, I posted (*cough*Alternathan*cough*)

And I'm back from a mini-vacation, if I may call it like that, and am now back to university and posting.

Lesli said
Any CS's that need to be reviewed?

http://www.roleplayerguild.com/topics/15895/posts/ooc?page=25#post-725824

Zzzz. Don't know how many acceptances you need to join, but it has two already :vvv

You should be good to go then Nero. I'll put you in Eiji's team, that will fill up the team. We are currently on our way to a trainingsession and are stuck in a strange forest, but I am sure we can figure out a way for you to easily join.

Also Roro, yes you may call it a mini vacation x3

Is there a skype group or something to make communication easier? Anyway! Once you figure it out, please tell me.

@Gamer

If you would accept my invitation on skype Nero then we could talk easier. I might have something figured out with Nim's help.

Nero, I will be the one entertaining you until Eiji and the rest of the team come back. If you could arrive at Training Field E, I'll meet you there with the Jounin Commander. Think of this a way to be active and pass the time until you can properly meet your team.

I accepted you now, Fiery! Sorry, haven't logged in Skype for a while. And I will go ahead and make a post in order to get him at training field E,
but... Should there be any reason of why he'd go there? Like being told to, receiving an invitation, dunno.

waiting on you roro... or do you think we should collab?

Yes we probably should.

E: Sent you a PM.

Sorry, but I will be active tomorrow. I still have some things to take care off and am really overloaded with work atm.

Team 14 : Best if we finish the mission off asap. This means, post the end together and I will try to fit in with Mika.

Team 2 : Chrome, can you see if you can wrap the collab up so that it can be posted?

Fiery : I will post with Harumi tomorrow again.

Have it.


Name: Rin Yamakaze
Nickname/Alias: Rin is not known by any title or alias.
Gender: Female
Age and date of birth: 19 years old, born on January 15 of 456 ADS
Age Appearance: Late-teens
Sexuality: Doesn't matters

Parents: Tsu-sen Yamakaze (Otherwise known as Golden Coin, deceased) and Yumoto Yamakaze
Length and build
1.69m, slender yet somewhat muscular build (as in, not really noticeable muscles, but not skinny either)
Weight
60kg
Favorite weather and season
Rainy, winter



Village: Amegakure
Birthplace: Amegakure
Organization: N/A

Clan/Bloodline: N/A

Rank: B - ANBU

Chakra Nature:
Suiton (Water Release)
Raiton (Lightning Release)
Which creates the Ranton (Storm Release) kekkei genkai.



Appearance:




Personality: Rin seems extremely relaxed and calm. She's soft-spoken, being far too reserved and very rarely speaks about herself. Giving away her name itself is a rarity and usually, this makes it difficult, if not bearing impossible, to know what exact type of person she is from the first talk. She's not purposelly mysterious, but the way she is makes she appears so. Whenever she speaks, if someone is not entirely focused on her, they wouldn't hear at all because her voice is a soft whisper that's barely audible. Some have noted her quiet presence to be unerving, as if she carried a strange sensation with herself, but she's ignorant to why some might've said that. Perhaps the silence bothers those who are used to being loud.

While it might appear that Rin is closed off to social interactions, that's not exactly the case. The truth is, she's extremely shy and everything about her shows that. From the way she speaks (or rather, whispers) to her body language itself. Note that while shy, she's not a stuttering poor excuse of a shinobi with no confidence in herself what so ever. She's pretty confident about her abilities when it comes to fighting; in fact, Rin is a fan of fighting, even if it's a friendly spar or a real battle. She describes the thrill and adrenaline as her favorite feeling in the world. However, generally socializing is a bit troublesome for her.

The ANBU is usually- or rather.. Unusually gentle with her allies. Even in a sweet, caring type of manner. She carries within herself an aura of trust and authentic friendliness. At the other hand, as expected from her rank, she's the opposite towards her foes and foes of her village. In battle, she does not waste time. In the first opportunity, she will aim to kill; she's cold, and her unbreakable will makes any provocation obsolete. Rin is also extremely determined, both in battle and outside of it; to her, being yourself and following your own path is the true task of a shinobi. Which is why her village holds such importance to her, because Rin both as a person and as a shinobi, believes that it's up to her the duty of protecting those who she cares about.

“The only person you are destined to become is the person you decide to be.”



History: The Yamakaze family isn't worldly known as the greatest shinobis, however their past isn't exactly a rather honorable one. The clan was known as mercenaries who traveled the land and offered their services to whoever paid the most; and they've lived for ages like that. However, a good portion of the clan was killed when a losing village hired the clan for a deadly battle; they did made the difference, turning the battle into a victory to the village which had hired them, however at the cost of more than half of the clan being killed. This was when Rin's parents met, both were survivors; and her father had promised to never raise a weapon again. He became a merchant, quite young and with little knowledge about what he was about to step in, but with the help of his newly found romantically partner, everything went fairly fine.

Around this time, a rising village known as Amegakure was starting to industrialize itself. This seemed like the perfect opportunity for Tsu-sen, who moved there to increase his trading opportunities. It worked perfectly; and his life only became better. Not only was he increasing his wealth, but Yumoto became pregnant as well. With the increase in Amegakure's forces, Tsu-sen saw an opportunity to create his own business. He waited his daughter's birth and spent a while with her before leaving to travel through the countries, learning how to forge excellent quality weapons before returning to Amegakure two years after; right when the First Shinobi Year was declared and Amegakure quickly declared itself neutral towards the other nations.

The man's business prospered greatly and he soon made himself name within Amegakure, becoming known for his excellent weapons, his weaponry was named 'Golden Coin', a title which was also given to the man himself after a few years. By this time, he was already teaching his daughter, Rin, the basic of trading, selling and buying, hoping that she'd follow the same way as the man himself, however... Rin wasn't particularly interested in learning how to be a merchant. Tsu-sen's brother, her uncle, always trained far from the village and Rin often followed him to watch. She found the whole idea of him shooting 'blue beams' from his hand amazing and had decided that moment that she wanted to become a shinobi, like the man himself.

Her father however, wasn't exactly pleased by this. He and his brother had very different mindsets: To him, being a shinobi meant danger. To his brother, it meant that you were capable of protecting himself. So, he prohibited her from following her uncle and forced her to learn different things. Rin's mother didn't agree with that, at all, she always claimed that her father couldn't decide their daughter's fate, this stirred up some sort of... hostility between Rin's parents. This made her feel bad because she knew that it was her fault. After a serious and long talk between Rin and her parents, the man accepted that she should be enrolled in the academy.

And so that happened, and her interested in becoming a shinobi turned into the desire of her life. She wasn't content with only learning the things she was learning in the academy, though. Once again, she seeked her uncle, without her father's permission. The man hesitated, for days. But everyday she was there, pestering him, until he finally decided to help her train, claiming that as soon as she learned her first ninjutsu apart from the ones learnt in the academy, she'd be on her own. So their training started; the girl was young, but being so determined and wanting so desperately to become led her to put up immense efforts. The first few days and she was already managing to keep up with the man in terms of Taijutsu, even if he was going really, really easy on the young girl.

When they moved to ninjutsu, however, her uncle discovered that she wasn't so average as he thought. The man gave her a chakra paper, to reveal her nature affinity in order to teach her a ninjutsu, but it had turned out that just like himself, she possessed two chakra natures; water and lightning, which meant that she had the storm release kekkei genkai, which was the case of various shinobi amongst the Yamakaze clan. With that in mind, he decided to train her intensively, with or without her father's consent. And so it started, everyday; just after academy, she'd meet with her uncle and train varying things for three hours. Her father soon found out, but the man understood that his daughter's dream wasn't being a merchant; and really, they didn't need another merchant in the family. The man was already rich enough.

By the time the tragedy with the Sutã clan happened, she was already skilled and deadly. The girl passed the tests on her academy with maxed out scores, proving to be extremely dedicated and smart, she had been graduated and from there, rocketed into success. She discontinued her training with her uncle, as she now had a sensei- even though she was admittedly much more advanced than her teammates. She didn't get any special training for that, however, which was why she'd train alone whenever she had free time. Her dedication to become better was so much, that she became closed off; kind of... shy, she didn't really became friends with her teammates, and even her sensei had trouble talking with her. He had told her that she needed to talk and become friends with her teammates in order to increase their synergy, but her reply was that 'she wasn't sticking around them for long'.

The chuunin exams happened, and naturally, Rin graduated a chuunin beating every of her opponents with ease. She did a mission here and there, but due to her inability in being... present, she didn't join or take any team as a chuunin. Her never ending self-training would only stop with the invasion of the Metsuke, which took her father's life. Some imbecile Metsuke soldiers invaded his shop and tried to take the weapons away, he resisted. They killed him without mercy. The tragic event seemed to make Rin even quieter than she already is, the girl simply... became an untalkable figure. Entirely closed off to everything and everyone.

Once Ryoku Samidare returned and together with Soru Deshuga, fought the Metsuke; Rin did not hesitate in taking part and helping in any way she could. This earned her certain respect, and she earned a recommendation... But the promotion wasn't as a jounin, she was promoted to an ANBU at the age nineteen. Furthering her training to become more effective in her job, she, with the help of her mother, managed to get a contract seal with Weasels and frequently uses her two favorites whenever they're needed.

Theme Song: Just listen to this.
Also, battle theme.


Weapons/Items:



Skills/Abilities
• Well versed in Ninjutsu
• Adapts easily to different opponents and battlegrounds
• Great chakra control
• Resourceful fighting, relying on everything she can
• Uses small weapons to make up her lack of physical strength
• Smart, intelligent and quick-witted



Special Traits
Average chakra resources
Extremely agile, both physically and mentally.
Good reflexes.
Unbreakable will in battle.


Kekkei Genkai:

Name of Kekkei Genkai: Storm Release
Clan: N/A
Description: Storm Release (嵐遁, Ranton; Viz "Gale Style" or "Storm Style") is an advanced nature kekkei genkai that combines lightning and water-based chakra to create energy beams that can be guided towards the enemy. This kekkei genkai is wielded by several Kumo-nin. Despite the name of this nature, it does not manipulate storms; it instead manipulates beams of electricity which flow like water. The name is more symbolic, representing the names of the natures used to create this nature.


Jutsu:



Custom Jutsu



Summons

Little Alice said
Sorry, but I will be active tomorrow. I still have some things to take care off and am really overloaded with work atm.Team 14 : Best if we finish the mission off asap. This means, post the end together and I will try to fit in with Mika.

well i probably should have read this before posting huh. sorry! thats all you now Fox. *hides behind Nim doll* and dont ask me why i have this.

I accept her Nero.

Also to everyone, I'm sick. Not the dreadful flu everyone seems to be stuck with, but a very nasty cold that gives me headaches and makes it pretty hard to concentrate. So I might be slow in replying to stuff. I'm sorry for that.

Little Alice said
Sorry, but I will be active tomorrow. I still have some things to take care off and am really overloaded with work atm.Team 14 : Best if we finish the mission off asap. This means, post the end together and I will try to fit in with Mika.Team 2 : Chrome, can you see if you can wrap the collab up so that it can be posted?Fiery : I will post with Harumi tomorrow again.

and our collab?

Just in case your curious as to why I haven't posted Gero: I'm waiting for everyone else to post and chose to skip my turn posting because it would be identical to my last post.

I guess I'll try to make a post about literally waiting too, even though I think it's pointless and bad filler. =/

AlterNathan said
and our collab?

That is a flashback, so I think the priority with that one isn't that high as the current present things I need to take care off, which I am going to do right now.

Review of : Rin Yamakaze

Don't have much on the character, other than finding it having Chidori. Then it was confirmed in story that the technique was copied by a lot of shinobi, so I shouldn't be commenting on that actually. But I do have some things to say on the custom techniques in general.

-. Though they look in nice in my opinion, they are contradicting the fact that she has 'average' chakra reserves. Though with better control, you could say that you could use it in a better way and thus in theory enlarge your pool of chakra, I find it a bit odd. Like, ''a spiralling ball of massive Ranton chakra''.

Its a C ranked technique, but then is a technique about forming a 'massive' form of Ranton Chakra? That is a bit odd, because :

-C ranked techniques aren't likely to be nowhere around massive or much in such states.
- Her chakra reserves are just average. Even with a great (thus lower than high) chakra control, she could do this once and then actually be without any chakra reserves left.

Same goes actually with the other custom techniques. Its just that I think you need to look back at the jutsu rank and the way you word them. As I find that for example, the last one isn't really a C ranked technique. Throwing an actual shrapnel grenade that explodes in ''thousands'' of senbons that actually go through a target? Sounds more like S ranked to me.

That is my review so far.