MFP#6 - colours (voting & feedback)

[Loksfjoer]

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Welcome to the Voting and Feedback round for MFP#6!

Voting and Feedback guidelines

• Please take your time to read through all the entries before voting for your favourite work. The reasons you base your vote on are up to you, as long the vote isn’t based on whether or not you like the author.
  It would be nice if you could share why you voted for a specific work.
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• The entry with the most votes will win, but in case of a tie a Contest Mod will cast the tie-breaker vote.
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• The voting period deadline is July 29th, 9:00 CET, which is 7:00 server time (both times are in a.m.).

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The Entries

Classy

Tiedye coloring aught to be warm colors for those who don't know.

Peach, pink, orange, yellow, red, and green I think.

By @Sebastian D

Despair

Despair

Black, like his pupils. They were dark and pierced through me. It didn’t matter what color his eyes were. It was the undiscovered universe behind them. It was the mysterious darkness that looked at me. It was like the color of this room. Completely and utterly pitch black.

I opened my eyes and studied the shadows of the silence. All I saw was black, like a void, trying to swallow me. My sheets were reassurance that I was still alive, still breathing, still lying in the stiff, sanitized bed in a hospital room.

Father Sergius is scheduled to visit me today. He will arrive with his black cassock and black briefcase and his black shoes. He will open his briefcase and pull out his cross and a few other holy things. He will caress his black prayer rope with his fingers. He will ask what is on my mind, what is ailing me.

What will I say? It’s all around me. It caresses my skin, yet I cannot feel it. It holds me tight but never touches me. It folds me into the very heart of my sin. It leaves me empty and cold. Yet, no matter how close I am to the darkness, it never leads me to him.

All I have are memories of him. I can watch them. I can hear them. I can replay them over and over. They are a part of me, and yet I am not a part of them.

How can I keep searching in the darkness for his mysterious universe? No matter how close I get to the darkness, it will never be close enough to see him again. However, I must not lose hope, Father Sergius, even if it kills me.

a world of colour

Green grass breaks through white snow,
A red fire with an orange glow,
Color, Colors are everywhere.

Yellow lightning strikes on brown fields,
A frozen blue river, Dark fish beneath concealed,
Color, Colors are everywhere.

Purple and pink flowers grow,
On black earth, with thing below,
Color, Colors are everywhere,
Shining, Twinkling through the air

By @Kale19

[Kassarock]

My vote goes to Despair.

Of all the entries I think this one most drills down into the emotive associations we have with colour, and chose a single colour to explore in depth rather than exploring the subject in breadth. There's also an element of narrative and intrigue in this piece, where it invites multiple readings of its potential meaning, something that I think is quite difficult to do in the micro-fiction format where your word count is so severely limited.

So yeah, good job everyone, but Despair is definitely my favourite for this round.

[Shovel]

My vote goes to Despair.

[Salenea]

I vote for: a world of colour

I love the lighthearted nature of the poem, simple but managed to paint a pretty picture with words. It made me smile when reading it.

[Loksfjoer]

That concluded our voting period.

The winner is: Despair.

I will add that entry to our Hall of Fame later today and a new contest will launch on August 1st.

Thank you to everyone who submitted an entry and took the time to vote!