[OOC] An Alternate Universe Naruto Story

[anothered]

@RandomguyAwesome, accepted!

[Letter Bee]

@anothered, what is the minimum number of paragraphs for an IC post?

[anothered]

@Letter BeeTwo casual paragraphs.

[Lewascan2]

@anothered

Just to double-check, but have the Genin teams already been assigned ICly? Is this already post-graduation?

[anothered]

No, they're still in the academy. Consider the first act a prologue.

[Lewascan2]

Posted!
Figured this opening post would right away convey a big reason why Kasumi is so cynical and paranoid/power hungry.
TLDR: Being a sensor forced her to sense the ugliness of the world from a young age, and it very much shaped her perspective.

[anothered]

Posted!
Figured this opening post would right away convey a big reason why Kasumi is so cynical and paranoid/power hungry.
TLDR: Being a sensor forced her to sense the ugliness of the world from a young age, and it very much shaped her perspective.

@Lewascan2

She's like - just got outta school, initiate nihilistic monologue.

[Lewascan2]

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She's like - just got outta school, initiate nihilistic monologue.

@anothered

Kek, think of this like a sort of culmination (as implied in her reasoning for actually accepting Mu's offer to eat out) of her acknowledging some the brewing tension in the village. She's picking up on it in a broader sense, and it's been wearing at her mood all day. She's not always stuck internally brooding only most of the time. But I suppose you could say my opening posts for characters usually consist of me better fleshing out what drives them the way the CS usually doesn't quite cover in my mind. It's one thing to say a character acts a certain way; it's quite another to really dig into why. So, now, we have the why for Kasumi. Call Lin's nearby (and therefore more notable/grating) pettiness something of a "straw that broke the camel's back" in terms of really tanking her mood and sending her on an inner spiral. XD

Also for this post, I actually needed to really work to find a reason for Kasumi to accept Mu's offer to eat (because OOCly, that feels like a plot hook), because ICly speaking, she absolutely would have blown him off normally. That's why I asked if they were already assigned Genin teams, because then she could have justified to herself intervening with Lin as "team cohesion", which didn't end up being an option.

[Letter Bee]

@anothered@Lewascan2, I hope you don't mind Ren's reason for accepting Mu's offer - Aka his crush on the poor guy!

[Lewascan2]

@anothered@Lewascan2, I hope you don't mind Ren's reason for accepting Mu's offer - Aka his crush on the poor guy!

@Letter Bee

Not like it's my character being targeted here, lol. :V
The only thing I'd really note from an immersion perspective is that boys usually romantically mature much slower than girls, biologically speaking, so Ren being "attracted" to anyone at all is unusual and probably disconcerting to those that know in how strong it is. Even Naruto's own crush on Sakura in canon was incredibly immature in nature, and Sasuke didn't seem to have an attracted bone in his body ever. :V

Anyway, that's all technically subjective. Ren's free to have his crush, but it's still unusual for a 12-13-year-old.

Also, for the sake of narrative smoothness, you really don't need to go out of your way to describe what Kasumi might feel from his chakra. I'm confident I can read between the lines enough to make surface-level estimations without an exposition for every detail. So, don't feel like you need to constantly psychoanalyze his every emotional decision for my own sake. Only do it if that's what you'd have written anyway. It's just going to bog things down otherwise.

[anothered]

@Letter BeeI feel like Ren is the type of guy to sexy jutsu himself, haha.

Also, I just a cool thought, if Satoshi is looking for variants of himself to solve this problem, surely there's an alternate version of him doing the same but vice versa. What kind of safeguards would Satoshi put in place to protect the Konoha of alternate universes? Or is that something he doesn't think about?

[Letter Bee]

@Letter BeeI feel like Ren is the type of guy to sexy jutsu himself, haha.

Also, I just a cool thought, if Satoshi is looking for variants of himself to solve this problem, surely there's an alternate version of him doing the same but vice versa. What kind of safeguards would Satoshi put in place to protect the Konoha of alternate universes? Or is that something he doesn't think about?

@anothered

I intended the alternate worlds to be possible universes, not fully existing ones, if you get what I'm saying.

Think of Limbus Company's 'Identities', if you play that Gacha game...

[anothered]

I was imagining Everything Everywhere All at Once, haha

[anothered]

I'm thinking about making Lin go full psycho mode... but maybe it's too early... is it too soon to pull out a knife? - Hmm-mm-mm. If I make him that crazy Day 1 his character development is gonna be so-o-o difficult if I don't want him to be a villain... I don't want him to be a villain but I want him to pull out a knife...

[Letter Bee]

I'm thinking about making Lin go full psycho mode... but maybe it's too early... is it too soon to pull out a knife? - Hmm-mm-mm. If I make him that crazy Day 1 his character development is gonna be so-o-o difficult if I don't want him to be a villain... I don't want him to be a villain but I want him to pull out a knife...

@anothered

Just have the intruders attack early to give him an excuse to pull out weapons, then?

[anothered]

@Letter Bee@Lewascan2 Can one of you transport us to the diner with your next post?

[Randomguy]

@anothered so about those intruders in the outskirts, how far are they roughly from the academy?

[anothered]

@RandomguyHm, I don't know the layout of the village. I guess pretty far. How far is Byakusight?

[Randomguy]

@anothered800 meter radius. Technically as telescopic vision it’s 15 km (just above canon shippuden hinata’s 10 km) But she’s not using it as telescope currently so if it’s more than 800 meter she probably wouldn’t notice until they got closer.

[anothered]

Okey dokey, maybe you can help me keep everything authentic haha