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Been a while and sorta forgot these characters XD
There are more I just thought I would post the finished ones.











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Better? I changed the magic to make it most effective against Slayers (course it will still pack a punch against normal people, but so does all magic when used well) which was the main aim anyway. I wanter her as an 'anti-slayer' so to speak. I might change the name if I get a decent suggestion XD
I edited the others slightly as well but unsure how to change Sophie in anyway. Her magic is full of openings and weaknesses.
Also I made Shiro to pretty much be anti-Cody XD
A mage like Shiro is Cody's worst nightmare to verse, teleportation is quite effective against him. Or speed.
But in all seriousness I can't seem to make Sophie's magic any weaker XD Point out what the problem is there.
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Better? I changed the magic to make it most effective against Slayers (course it will still pack a punch against normal people, but so does all magic when used well) which was the main aim anyway. I wanter her as an 'anti-slayer' so to speak. I might change the name if I get a decent suggestion XD
I edited the others slightly as well but unsure how to change Sophie in anyway. Her magic is full of openings and weaknesses.
Also I made Shiro to pretty much be anti-Cody XD
A mage like Shiro is Cody's worst nightmare to verse, teleportation is quite effective against him. Or speed.
But in all seriousness I can't seem to make Sophie's magic any weaker XD Point out what the problem is there.


OK, so back to the first one, the big issue is we're still not accepting Slayers. Unless something was said while I was unconscious in bed. Second one, in her back story it now reads 'Act of Guild' XD Just thought you'd like to know. Third one, I think rather than including a photographic memory in his magic, why not just give it to him? Also, still not sure I like his Byakugan style see all magic vision.

Fourth one, well, I'm not sure a black hole is a good idea for innocents, or even personal, survival. Their range of suction is incredibly wide, even for a small one and there simply isn't anyway to truly "control" a black hole once it's let go. I mean, I like the magic, but the Black Orb is dangerous beyond reason, even for a dark mage.

Fifth one is good, though perhaps instead of Ghost magic, which people are going to go, "He can summon ghosts?" call it phase magic or something. Just a suggestion though, to avoid confusion with others. Sophie is good as well, though I feel like you're shorting yourself with her just a little. Anyways, new critique done. I hope you're enjoying the dance.
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I'll get a post up today. Let's just say I wore myself out for quite a few days. xD
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Hai guys, I'm back from having tons of fun!

Am I needed for anything?
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Ugh...I hate writing college application essays.
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Ugh...I hate writing college application essays.


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Hai guys, I'm back from having tons of fun!

Am I needed for anything?


What is that?
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What is what?
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What is what?


This 'fun' you speak of.
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This 'fun' you speak of.


I had a link to it.
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I had a link to it.


Clicked it. Made no sense to my brain.
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paws at people
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*yawns sleepily*
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Clicked it. Made no sense to my brain.


Well too bad?

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paws at people


So you aren't going to critique the CS's?
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Posted lol


I bet Sayatachi would have been mortified to realize that a being capable of creating any clothes from thin air passed her by less than an hour before.
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I bet Sayatachi would have been mortified to realize that a being capable of creating any clothes from thin air passed her by less than an hour before.


The fibers are used more for offensive measures really. This aint Ragyo we're talking too lol. Though I suppose I COULD make it a thing. And again, she has lots of money so buying her a dress like that wouldn't be painful really. Maybe once she knows Malice's style, THEN she can make her a dress she made herself.
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So you aren't going to critique the CS's?


I will soon
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