[OOC] Attack on Titan - Survival of the Fittest

[Diminuendo]

Ah, okay! Will do.

[Diminuendo]

Is there anything I should add? I feel like my character sheet thingie is the shortest of all of them... hmmm... what am I missing...?

[Undying Curiosity]

I think you just need to go a tad bit more in depth with you bio maybe. You're accepted btw.
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[Diminuendo]

Okay, great! I'll work on it tomorrow if I have time.

[vancexentan]

Alright looks like we have a decent roster so far. Any idea when we will get an IC?

[Undying Curiosity]

Probably sometime tomorrow, maybe late tonight. I'm actually going somewhere with the Fam, so.

[vancexentan]

Fair enough I got two posts to make today since they're overdue by a day.

[Jangel13]

Undying Curiosity said
I don't think a Mary Sue character is what you think it means. Mary Sure, Is a very loose term for a character that doesn't really have flaws, and just seems a little to unoriginal in that sense.A quick summary of your characters personality: To nice to fight, Hard worker, Funny, Not Violent, Persuasive. All the things to a to-good-to-be-true characterQuick summary of his Bio: Helps his dad be a carpenter, To busy working hard to have friends, Mother died giving birth, Stronger than average cause he's a hard worker, Big dreams and ambitions, Wants to leave the walls to build a better place for everyone.Your character doesn't really stand out. It's like someone pulled out the main character from a novel. Your character's inefficiencies are even good: Leaning more to pacifism? How is that an inefficiency To top it all off you didn't read the rules >:cI don't intend to be rude or mean or anything, but maybe reading this will help you further develop your character, maybe even rework his CS and have it acceepted.

no please I thank you for it! finally someone actually tells me what that means! I changed it up I hope its better. I made him bullied a lot and lacks respect. he got teased about it and has anger inside him that he doesn't show if that's not enough I could make my character go through a worse kind of hell to him...

[Undying Curiosity]

@Jangel13. I'm glad to see that you took my advice and made your characters back story better, but that wasn't the only problem with your character. You did fix the biggest problem with your character. yes, but, making a CS isn't only about your character. It's also a way for me (The GM) to see your skill in writing. I've already come to the conclusion that you lack originality in your character (This was made evident but the second time I asked you to adjust him), lack the writing skill to use proper grammar, and fail to be creative with your characters (I've noticed this was the second time you've used this character in an AoT Rp, and it was the second time you got declined. I would have have taken the hint already.)

I know I don't have to be like this, but I'm not accepting your character. sorry.

[Jangel13]

nobody but you bothered to tell me what was wrong they just said mary sue and assumed I understood what they meant. I know I have problems with the grammar but I would like to point out that its only like that during the occ because im really just trying to put everything down beforehand. thanks to your help though this cs will be able to be approved by someone else. its not that im unoriginal I just want to make sure that since Aot is made as a dark anime I don't want to steal someone on the animes problems so I tried to go with upbeat. ill ask someone to help me make the cs you made better for someone else. thanks again

[vancexentan]

How's the IC coming along? Will it be done by tonight or tomorrow boss?

[Undying Curiosity]

I have some of it done, but I'm feeling pretty tired atm. I'm going to post it sometime tomorrow, most likely early in the day.

[vancexentan]

well btw I sent you a private message could you give me some feedback on that before you log out for the day?

[vancexentan]

I just got done playing a mod for crusader kings two and even though I had to save scum I just made an eldrich worshipping ruler the king of Gotham! (New jersery and York) as a customer character at the new jersery duke start! I feel badass! Note that Jersey is surrounded by two kingdoms from the start including the confederate empire in the south.

For notes I started in south jersey and now have complete control of New York, Jersey, and half of Delaware and a small part of Pennsylvania. And for good measure I named most of my children (and I have A LOT of them) after the bat family with my heir being named after dick greyson and the next is Bruce.

[Undying Curiosity]

Okay, the IC has been posted in! You guys can post now.

[Rinnee]

Fantastic first post Undying! I'll start working on my post now. ^^

[Undying Curiosity]

Rinnee said
Fantastic first post Undying! I'll start working on my post now. ^^

[vancexentan]

Still no post other than us Undying it seems.

[Undying Curiosity]

I know ):

[Rinnee]

I really want to apologize for not posting yesterday. Things got a bit busy for me family, and work wise and my time got compromised.
I'm not home at the moment, but when I do, I'll have my post up! Sorry again guys. ; - ;