I'll try to get a post in early tomorrow. Feels like I'm about to crash here in a bit.
*shoots with Bunker Buster* No dancin'o.o
The helicopters didn't fly over anything.... they were there since the beginning of the battle. They're quite literally in my first post with the Purge. The bombs were supposed to signal a kind of ending to the fight scenes occurring, or at least on a larger scale. The battle is sufficiently scattered that there's no real way to tell who's winning and who's losing. The Purge are ripping through Newbloods like candy floss, and have suffered hardly any losses on the hands of the vampires. The few that have fallen are at the hands of the Olbloods and Matt. Also, I'm pretty sure the top hatch would be locked for exactly this reason. But whatever. Tanks are going left and right, so whatever. Oh, and breaking machinery in a tank filled with highly flammable liquid is maybe not a good idea? In any case, these are all just minor comments. However, Shikaru, I would like to comment that your Actions Per Post are a bit high for my taste, your characters tend to jump all over the place and do a whole bunch of stuff before people can respond. Also, me and Wraith are thinking of a way we can have the story progress beyond this battle.
The helicopters didn't fly over anything.... they were there since the beginning of the battle. They're quite literally in my first post with the Purge. The bombs were supposed to signal a kind of ending to the fight scenes occurring, or at least on a larger scale. The battle is sufficiently scattered that there's no real way to tell who's winning and who's losing. The Purge are ripping through Newbloods like candy floss, and have suffered hardly any losses on the hands of the vampires. The few that have fallen are at the hands of the Olbloods and Matt. Also, I'm pretty sure the top hatch would be locked for exactly this reason. But whatever. Tanks are going left and right, so whatever. Oh, and breaking machinery in a tank filled with highly flammable liquid is maybe not a good idea? In any case, these are all just minor comments. However, Shikaru, I would like to comment that your Actions Per Post are a bit high for my taste, your characters tend to jump all over the place and do a whole bunch of stuff before people can respond. Also, me and Wraith are thinking of a way we can have the story progress beyond this battle.Gonna categorize this: Helicopters: They flew in from somewhere, they didn't just magically poof into exsistance. Bombs: Wouldn't the bombs have simply blown everything into oblivion? Tank: I can edit it to show he ripped it off if it makes it better. Flammable liquif in tank: Wouldn't the liquid be stored in some kind of canisters and not simply sitting open? Progression: Group chat with me on this through PM then or something. I'd really appreciate it instead of just deciding to change everything dramatically.
"With wicked wings did the wizened warrior withdraw from the wrath of war, wandering while wearing the wistful weave of Woden's wise wards: a waxing wraith of the waning witching hour. Tenaciously tracking the traitor through the troubled town, timely taken by toothed tourists and techno terrorists, to try and tempt to turn the tramp to temporary treaty. A light illuminating alliteration to write a literary rumination of ill iterations."Go to hell Grey. Go to hell. lol Anyhow, I was about to post when I saw Grey had posted, so I pretty much tookt he lazy route and added to my own post to include a response. I hope this is satisfactory.
Rusalka: "Are you, like, a crazy person?" Grey: "I'm quite sure they'll say so.""With wicked wings did the wizened warrior withdraw from the wrath of war, wandering while wearing the wistful weave of Woden's wise wards: a waxing wraith of the waning witching hour. Tenaciously tracking the traitor through the troubled town, timely taken by toothed tourists and techno terrorists, to try and tempt to turn the tramp to temporary treaty. A light illuminating alliteration to write a literary rumination of ill iterations."Go to hell Grey. Go to hell. lol Anyhow, I was about to post when I saw Grey had posted, so I pretty much tookt he lazy route and added to my own post to include a response. I hope this is satisfactory.
Crazy? Certainly! Carefully crafting choice constructive consonants constantly consecutively creates common connotations consciously contentious consummating crazed consensus.Buffalo buffalo, buffalo Buffalo buffalo, Buffalo buffalo buffalo. Translation: Buffalo (animals), who are from Buffalo (a place), buffalo (verb: to push around), other buffalo (object of verb), who are also from Buffalo, that are buffallowed by such buffalo from Buffalo that do buffalowing. *drops mic, walks away with hands up*
Magnus and Grey = perfect if Magnus was realRusalka: "Are you, like, a crazy person?" Grey: "I'm quite sure they'll say so.""With wicked wings did the wizened warrior withdraw from the wrath of war, wandering while wearing the wistful weave of Woden's wise wards: a waxing wraith of the waning witching hour. Tenaciously tracking the traitor through the troubled town, timely taken by toothed tourists and techno terrorists, to try and tempt to turn the tramp to temporary treaty. A light illuminating alliteration to write a literary rumination of ill iterations."Go to hell Grey. Go to hell. lol Anyhow, I was about to post when I saw Grey had posted, so I pretty much tookt he lazy route and added to my own post to include a response. I hope this is satisfactory.
Magnus and Grey = perfect if Magnus was realThey are very different kinds of crazy, I believe.
Which is the good kind? Everyone has heard the joke about the Neurotics who build the castles in the sky staffed by the OCD's who clean them for the Psychotics who live in them all the while the Psychologist collect the rent... But I am a God who built sky. (and thus this joke.)Magnus and Grey = perfect if Magnus was realThey are very different kinds of crazy, I believe.