[OOC] NARUTO: Road to Ninja [ARC 3] Buy it now and get a second punt free!

[Xuna]

edited

[Savato]

【Fighting style】
Conservative. He's not particularly fond of fighting, however all males part of the Ooi bloodline must. Meaning he will play defensive, although when in a rage his true skill shows. Most blinded by rage tend to stray from their skills and fall back on more instinctive reactions. Douzen, however, hones all the skills and manages to remain sane and collective on the outside, while raising Hell inside.

@Xuna

Hones all the skills? What does that mean? Does he have all the skills in the world?

Jutsu name: Hell's Wrath
Rank: B
Range: 1 yard circumference around user
Description: After placing one's hand on the ground, the User channels their energy through the Earth, Sapping the the life force around a small area. After doing such, the user pulls his/her hand from the earth with it's energy flowing around the palm. The user then combines that energy with the fire elemental affinity to create a small ball of fire. Once the ball comes in contact with a target, there is a small explosion that occurs that may inflict more internal damage. This may also knock the target back a few feet.

@Xuna

What energy is he absorbing? Measuring system for power in Naruto is Chakra, and you can't absorb energy from the environment without senjutsu, and it doesn't work that way either. However that aside, it's essentially a fire ball that does an explosion. The fact that it makes internal damage needs to be explained a little.

Jutsu name: Hell Hound
Rank: C
Range: 50 yards
Description: Douzen kneels to the ground and cuffs his mouth with both hands to perform this jutsu. He releases fire chakra from the mouth in the shape of a flaming wolf. The wolf charges forward to collide with the target causing a semi-small explosion that may leave 2-3rd degree burns.

@Xuna

I'm okay with this, just as long as 3rd degree burns don't suddenly happen unless it's a direct hit, and it's only at the most exposed parts. I'd say 2nd degree burns most of the time though considering it's only C rank.

A Rank:
Fire Release - Blaze Eruption

B Rank:
Fire Release - Fireball

C Rank:
Fire Release - Flame Flower
Fire Release - Pheonix Flower Jutsu

@Xuna

You're going to have to link all the jutsu to the Narutopedia site. I have no idea what half of these do.

【History】

Museigan, however, would not let his son die with him. He filled a book with all his teachings and had asked Atemi to give it to Douzen. He had always seen great potential in his son and insisted that he become a ninja. Atemi also possessed the same feelings about the boy, so she obeyed her husband and handed the book over as promised. Douzen absorbed the information and translated it into action beautifully as a child, but lost a lot of that aggression and drive after getting over his father. Atemi never let him stray from the ninja way. after observing the boy's behavior, she knew the case and decided to put him through ninja school.

@Xuna

This last paragraph is essentially the only part about your character's history. The entire thing is about his dead dad. That's somewhat irrelevant to the CHARACTER'S History. We want to know what he lived, not what his deceased father lived. I'm not sure what you were aiming for here.

[Partisan]

I think I do want to mention that it definetely is an improvement.

[Savato]

I think I do want to mention that it definetely is an improvement.

@Partisan

Giving credit where it's due. I can second this.

[Partisan]

@Xuna I do agree about history - however that doesn't mean SCRAP IT ALL! because, we have clan sheets. This kind of depth and info is perfect for a deeper look at your clan.

[FallenTrinity]

@Crimmy Posted

[Partisan]

We can tell my friend, it shows up in our subscriptions.

[FallenTrinity]

Yeah well....

[Assassin]

Hello! This is my guy:3

Shouken Washi

【Full Name】
Shouken Washi

【Alias】
...

【Age】
15

【Gender】
Male

【Birthplace]
Sunakagure

【Bloodline】
Washi

【Rank】
Chūnin

Combat reports.
Gathered from evaluation reports after missions.

【Fighting style】
Shouken likes distance between him and his opponent. He rarely deals in close and when he does, he gets out quick. His hand to hand is not bad, by no means, but his confidence fades when it comes to this category.

(If need be more, tell me! I can definitely elaborate)

Jutsu

【Ninja techniques】

A-Rank
-Water Style: Giant Water Vortex

B-Rank
-Water Style: Snake Mouth
-Water Style: Five Sharks Frenzy
-Water Style: Cannon Ball Jutsu

C-Rank
-Water Style: Water Clone
-Water Style: Water Prison Technique
-Water Style: Water Gun

Psych. report.
Medical secrecy applies.

【Personality】
kind hearted and loyal. He is confident within himself but ignores his limitations. He is always eager for a challenge and often is the first to start making wages. It is nearly impossible to dampen his spirit with words, and all who have tried have failed.

Shouken hates to see any form of suffering and will go out of his way to ease someone else's stress before his own. He was fairly popular amongst his class, and even teachers were pleased by his presence. He strives to become the best ninja possible and is willing to do whatever it takes to achieve that goal.

Shouken's seriousness shows rarely, as he usually covers up his emotions with jests or taunting. He doesn't fear death, which allows him to fight with everything, holding nothing back. He'd sooner spit in the face of a kage rather than give up. He is forgiving and understanding, yet his bold attitude shades it to where people may get the wrong idea.

He likes the attention from the crowd but refuses to lead. He's a little lazy when it comes to responsibilities and will usually turn down a leadership role, unless the order is necessary.

【History】

Shouken was born in Sunakagure, expected to take over his Father's store. Though, fate had a different plan for Shouken. He was blessed with the element of water and also possessed a strong urge to use it. by 3, raising water from the Earth was a game to Shouken. Although, it would take him until 10 to learn his first jutsu, Shouken already made huge progress for his age.

At 9, Shouken took his first life. His parent's store was being robbed and burned to the ground as he returned from playing with friends. Thugs had started the fire and fled the scene, but one remained, pointing a small knife at Shouken. His gaze still struck upon the burning building, Shouken snapped. Thoughts of his parents being trapped inside rummaged through his head and rage filled his body. He lunged at the large man, knocking him to the ground. Shouken was instantly atop the man with his hand over the mouth of the thug. Water surged down the throat of the man and began to fill up his esophagus. Shouken returned the man's horrid struggle to breathe with an emotionles glare. As the man's body went still, Shouken eased his hand down to be accompanied by his Father who had been running errands. His mom remained inside the building.

A year passed with the death of his Mother, but that never stopped him from following his dream. That very next year, Shouken's father registered him in The Academy. Shouken had even more determination now than ever. He loved his mother and knew she would love to see him excel. Shouken studied and trained non-stop.

Once Shouken turned 12, he achieved the Genin Rank. The following year he would earn his next ranking of Chunin.

He soon hopes to achieve his Jonin Rank and truly make his family proud. However, he does not plan to stop there.

【Family ties】
Danguu Washi - Father

[Partisan]

@Assassin

1. Pictures are preferred.
2. Even if you don't want to use a picture, we want a written descriptive of the characters appearance.

Reason for that is simple: I need to envision him, like what he looks like. And, to do that.. well, it might be useful to know what he looks like

3. I see you've just joined and thus, I reckon you have no idea how BB codes work, right? Well, actually you got the hider working but all the other BB code is gone.

codes

[hider=Character name]
[center][img]image url here[/img]
Your characters picture should go above. Delete this afterwards.
[i]“Character motto here”[/i]

[b]Character appearance description here[/b][/center]

[u][b]Personnel files.[/b][/u]
[i]Access only by security personnel with a C3 clearance.[/i]

[indent]【[U]Full Name[/U]】
[I]Character name[/I]

【[U]Alias[/U]】
[i]Nicknames and/or callsigns[/i]

【[U]Age[/U]】
[i]14+[/i]

【[U]Sex[/U]】
[i]Male/female/?[/i]

【[U]Sexuality[/U]】
[i]Self explanatory[/i]

【[U]Birthplace[/U]】
[i]Can be any village, canon preferably.[/i]

【[U]Bloodline[/U]】
[i]What bloodline is your character from?[/i]

【[U]Rank[/U]】
[i]Chūnin, unless permission was given for something else[/i][/indent]

[u][b]Psych. report.[/b][/u]
[i]Medical secrecy applies.[/i]

[indent]【[U]Personality[/U]】
[i]How would your character behave? Ticks, behaviour in positive situations, neutral situations or negative situations, behavior in emotional situations?[/i]

【[U]History[/U]】
[i]How does the characters history relate to personality? General history to be told here as well. Can be organised into childhood years (0 to 6), base school years (6 to 10-14, depending on graduation year) and highschool years (10-14 to 14-18).[/i]

【[U]Family ties[/U]】
[i]Describe shortly what type of family your character grew up in, how the ties were and how this influenced him. After that fill in form below, for all family members of importance, living or dead.[/i]

[b]Name | Relationship to character | Age, living place, profession and additional info [/b]

【[U]Dreams and fears[/U]】
[i]What does your character dream of achieving, and what does he fear in life? What are his hopes? Imagine this being extracted by a shinobi, what would he see?[/i][/indent]

[u][b]Combat reports.[/b][/u]
[i]Gathered from evaluation reports after missions.[/i]

[indent]【[U]Fighting style[/U]】
[i]Describe shortly what your characters fighting style is.[/i]

【[U]Kekkei genkai, or bloodline limit[/U]】
[b][u]Bloodline limit name:[/u][/b]
[i]'Sharingan' or 'Byakugan' or something fictional you made yourself.[/i]
[b][u]Description:[/u][/b]
[i]Explain what the technique does, how it works and what the manifested kekkei genkai looks like both in use, and outside of use. For example, the sharingan in battle shows through tomoe in the eye. The byakugan manifests itself through white eyes. Not neccesarily limited to vision/eye based, such as the bone bloodline limit Kimimaro uses. Pretty obvious manifestations.[/i]
[b][u]Strengths:[/u][/b]
[i]Describe your kekkei genkai's strengths here, what is it effective against? What is it power at currently?[/i]
[b][u]Weaknesses:[/u][/b]
[i]Describe how your kekkei genkai can be overcome, advertently or inadvertently. Be reasonable.[/i]

【[U]Ninja techniques[/U]】

[u]A rank techniques:[/u]
[i][url=narutopedialink]Name no jutsu here.[/url][/i]

[u]B rank techniques:[/u]
[i][url=narutopedialink]Name no jutsu here.[/url][/i]

[u]C rank techniques:[/u]
[i][url=narutopedialink]Name no jutsu here.[/url][/i]

[u]D-E rank techniques:[/u]
[i][url=narutopedialink]Name no jutsu here.[/url][/i]

【[U]Custom made techniques[/U]】
[b][u]Jutsu name:[/u][/b]
[i]Be creative.[/i]
[b][u]Rank:[/u][/b]
[i]If you'd have to rank this technique, what rank would it be? A, B, C, D or E?[/i]
[b][u]Range:[/u][/b]
[i]At what range is this technique useful? You can measure this in 'long' 'medium' or 'short' but those are rather vague. If you want more depth, use a distance such as meters.[/i]
[b][u]Description:[/u][/b]
[i]Describe the jutsu, how it works and what it looks like. Explain potential damage that can be done with it, and describe the weaknesses and strength of the jutsu. Be as clear as you can.[/i]

Repeat form for as many jutsu as you can create, within the rules.

【[U]Weaponry, tools and objects.[/U]】
[b][u]Weapon, tool or object name:[/u][/b]
[i]Can be a term, i.e 'kunai' or it can be a self given name, i.e 'Revered Razor'.[/i]
[b][u]Weapon, tool or object type:[/u][/b]
[i]What type of weapon, tool or object is this? Sword, axe, kunai, knife, blade, tanto. Omit if the weapon, tool or object name already designates this.[/i]
[b][u]Description:[/u][/b]
[i]Describe the weapon, tool or objects appearance, and describe it's potentials and weaknesses. tl;dr how powerful is it and what does it look like. Be reasonable.[/i][/indent]

[b]Omit any parts that are unnecesary for your character, or that you deem unimportant. Remove this when posting.[/b]
[/hider]

Please copy paste this instead, and copy paste the info into this. It'll look much better than currently, and much more pleasant for both of us to look at (trust me when I say you'll feel better about yourself when you can make it look good mayne.. speaking from experience)

If you can do all this I'll take another look but you're missing some vital aspects here.

[Assassin]

@Assassin

1. Pictures are preferred.
2. Even if you don't want to use a picture, we want a written descriptive of the characters appearance.

Reason for that is simple: I need to envision him, like what he looks like. And, to do that.. well, it might be useful to know what he looks like

3. I see you've just joined and thus, I reckon you have no idea how BB codes work, right? Well, actually you got the hider working but all the other BB code is gone.

codes

[hider=Character name]
[center][img]image url here[/img]
Your characters picture should go above. Delete this afterwards.
[i]“Character motto here”[/i]

[b]Character appearance description here[/b][/center]

[u][b]Personnel files.[/b][/u]
[i]Access only by security personnel with a C3 clearance.[/i]

[indent]【[U]Full Name[/U]】
[I]Character name[/I]

【[U]Alias[/U]】
[i]Nicknames and/or callsigns[/i]

【[U]Age[/U]】
[i]14+[/i]

【[U]Sex[/U]】
[i]Male/female/?[/i]

【[U]Sexuality[/U]】
[i]Self explanatory[/i]

【[U]Birthplace[/U]】
[i]Can be any village, canon preferably.[/i]

【[U]Bloodline[/U]】
[i]What bloodline is your character from?[/i]

【[U]Rank[/U]】
[i]Chūnin, unless permission was given for something else[/i][/indent]

[u][b]Psych. report.[/b][/u]
[i]Medical secrecy applies.[/i]

[indent]【[U]Personality[/U]】
[i]How would your character behave? Ticks, behaviour in positive situations, neutral situations or negative situations, behavior in emotional situations?[/i]

【[U]History[/U]】
[i]How does the characters history relate to personality? General history to be told here as well. Can be organised into childhood years (0 to 6), base school years (6 to 10-14, depending on graduation year) and highschool years (10-14 to 14-18).[/i]

【[U]Family ties[/U]】
[i]Describe shortly what type of family your character grew up in, how the ties were and how this influenced him. After that fill in form below, for all family members of importance, living or dead.[/i]

[b]Name | Relationship to character | Age, living place, profession and additional info [/b]

【[U]Dreams and fears[/U]】
[i]What does your character dream of achieving, and what does he fear in life? What are his hopes? Imagine this being extracted by a shinobi, what would he see?[/i][/indent]

[u][b]Combat reports.[/b][/u]
[i]Gathered from evaluation reports after missions.[/i]

[indent]【[U]Fighting style[/U]】
[i]Describe shortly what your characters fighting style is.[/i]

【[U]Kekkei genkai, or bloodline limit[/U]】
[b][u]Bloodline limit name:[/u][/b]
[i]'Sharingan' or 'Byakugan' or something fictional you made yourself.[/i]
[b][u]Description:[/u][/b]
[i]Explain what the technique does, how it works and what the manifested kekkei genkai looks like both in use, and outside of use. For example, the sharingan in battle shows through tomoe in the eye. The byakugan manifests itself through white eyes. Not neccesarily limited to vision/eye based, such as the bone bloodline limit Kimimaro uses. Pretty obvious manifestations.[/i]
[b][u]Strengths:[/u][/b]
[i]Describe your kekkei genkai's strengths here, what is it effective against? What is it power at currently?[/i]
[b][u]Weaknesses:[/u][/b]
[i]Describe how your kekkei genkai can be overcome, advertently or inadvertently. Be reasonable.[/i]

【[U]Ninja techniques[/U]】

[u]A rank techniques:[/u]
[i][url=narutopedialink]Name no jutsu here.[/url][/i]

[u]B rank techniques:[/u]
[i][url=narutopedialink]Name no jutsu here.[/url][/i]

[u]C rank techniques:[/u]
[i][url=narutopedialink]Name no jutsu here.[/url][/i]

[u]D-E rank techniques:[/u]
[i][url=narutopedialink]Name no jutsu here.[/url][/i]

【[U]Custom made techniques[/U]】
[b][u]Jutsu name:[/u][/b]
[i]Be creative.[/i]
[b][u]Rank:[/u][/b]
[i]If you'd have to rank this technique, what rank would it be? A, B, C, D or E?[/i]
[b][u]Range:[/u][/b]
[i]At what range is this technique useful? You can measure this in 'long' 'medium' or 'short' but those are rather vague. If you want more depth, use a distance such as meters.[/i]
[b][u]Description:[/u][/b]
[i]Describe the jutsu, how it works and what it looks like. Explain potential damage that can be done with it, and describe the weaknesses and strength of the jutsu. Be as clear as you can.[/i]

Repeat form for as many jutsu as you can create, within the rules.

【[U]Weaponry, tools and objects.[/U]】
[b][u]Weapon, tool or object name:[/u][/b]
[i]Can be a term, i.e 'kunai' or it can be a self given name, i.e 'Revered Razor'.[/i]
[b][u]Weapon, tool or object type:[/u][/b]
[i]What type of weapon, tool or object is this? Sword, axe, kunai, knife, blade, tanto. Omit if the weapon, tool or object name already designates this.[/i]
[b][u]Description:[/u][/b]
[i]Describe the weapon, tool or objects appearance, and describe it's potentials and weaknesses. tl;dr how powerful is it and what does it look like. Be reasonable.[/i][/indent]

[b]Omit any parts that are unnecesary for your character, or that you deem unimportant. Remove this when posting.[/b]
[/hider]

Please copy paste this instead, and copy paste the info into this. It'll look much better than currently, and much more pleasant for both of us to look at (trust me when I say you'll feel better about yourself when you can make it look good mayne.. speaking from experience)

If you can do all this I'll take another look but you're missing some vital aspects here.

@Partisan

ha I missed the appearance..Thought I was forgetting something xD. But I got it...Thanks

[Partisan]

Aye it's all good, if you need help don't be afraid to ask - PM me, Savato, Masaki, Kal-El or Nero. Or anyone that wants to help. Make sure to @ me when it's done so I can check again.

[Assassin]

@Partisan

Can you explain the narutopedia links under the jutsu tech? Do i need to choose exclusively from that site and log it?

[Savato]

@Assassin Yes it's the best source for Canon and anime jutsu to be displayed in their integrity. They must all be linked of course.

[Assassin]

[hider=My Hider]

[center]


Personnel files.
Access only by security personnel with a C3 clearance.

【Full Name】
Shouken Washi

【Alias】
N/A

【Age】
15

【Sex】
Male/

【Sexuality】
Hetero

【Birthplace】
Sunakagure

【Bloodline】
Washi

【Rank】
Chūnin

Psych. report.
Medical secrecy applies.

【Personality】
kind hearted and loyal. He is confident within himself but ignores his limitations. He is always eager for a challenge and often is the first to start making wages. It is nearly impossible to dampen his spirit with words, and all who have tried have failed.

Shouken hates to see any form of suffering and will go out of his way to ease someone else's stress before his own. He was fairly popular amongst his class, and even teachers were pleased by his presence. He strives to become the best ninja possible and is willing to do whatever it takes to achieve that goal.

Shouken's seriousness shows rarely, as he usually covers up his emotions with jests or taunting. He doesn't fear death, which allows him to fight with everything, holding nothing back. He'd sooner spit in the face of a kage rather than give up. He is forgiving and understanding, yet his bold attitude shades it to where people may get the wrong idea.

He likes the attention from the crowd but refuses to lead. He's a little lazy when it comes to responsibilities and will usually turn down a leadership role, unless the order is necessary.

【History】
Shouken was born in Sunakagure, expected to take over his Father's store. Though, fate had a different plan for Shouken. He was blessed with the element of water and also possessed a strong urge to use it. by 3, raising water from the Earth was a game to Shouken. Although, it would take him until 10 to learn his first jutsu, Shouken already made huge progress for his age.

At 9, Shouken took his first life. His parent's store was being robbed and burned to the ground as he returned from playing with friends. Thugs had started the fire and fled the scene, but one remained, pointing a small knife at Shouken. His gaze still struck upon the burning building, Shouken snapped. Thoughts of his parents being trapped inside rummaged through his head and rage filled his body. He lunged at the large man, knocking him to the ground. Shouken was instantly atop the man with his hand over the mouth of the thug. Water surged down the throat of the man and began to fill up his esophagus. Shouken returned the man's horrid struggle to breathe with an emotionles glare. As the man's body went still, Shouken eased his hand down to be accompanied by his Father who had been running errands. His mom remained inside the bulding.

A year passed with the death of his Mother, but that never stopped him from following his dream. That very next year, Shouken's father registered him in The Academy. Shouken had even more determination now than ever. He loved his mother and knew she would love to see him excel. Shouken studied and trained non-stop.

Once Shouken turned 12, he achieved the Genin Rank. The following year he would earn his next ranking of Chunin.
He soon hopes to achieve his Jonin Rank and truly make his family proud. However, he does not plan to stop there.

【Family ties】
Danguu Washi - Father

Danguu Washi | Father | 37, konohagakure, Store Owner

【Dreams and fears】
Simply to be the best ninja as he can and to help anyone in anyway he can.

Combat reports.
Gathered from evaluation reports after missions.

【Fighting style】
Shouken likes distance between him and his opponent. He rarely deals in close and when he does, he gets out quick. His hand to hand is not bad, by no means, but his confidence fades when it comes to this category.

【Ninja techniques】

A rank techniques:
Water Release: Great Shark Bullet Technique

B rank techniques:
Water Release: Snake's Mouth
Water Release: Five Feeding Sharks
Water Release: Water Fang Bullet

C rank techniques:
Water Release: Gunshot
Water Prison Technique
Water Clone Technique

【Weaponry, tools and objects.】
Weapon, tool or object name:
Kusemono
Weapon, tool or object type:
Standard 40" blade
Description:

[/hider]

[Assassin]

Yeah @Partisan I dont know what happened man

[Savato]

@Assassin In the family ties you forgot to put the [/i] to finish the coding. Hence why it screwed the rest.

Also, you want to put the LINKS to the wiki pages of each move. All good?

[Assassin]

[quote=@Savato]
@Assassin In the family ties you forgot to put the [/i] to finish the coding. Hence why it screwed the rest.

Also, you want to put the LINKS to the wiki pages of each move. All good?
[/quote]

Well I know I probably look pretty dumb, but I still dont know what the hell I did wrong

[Savato]

@Assassin Do see [url=narutopedialink] ? You inset the link RIGHT AFTER the =.

Between the two codes you write the name of the technique. Is that clear enough?

[Assassin]

[quote=@Savato]
@Assassin Do see [url=narutopedialink] ? You inset the link RIGHT AFTER the =.

Between the two codes you write the name of the technique. Is that clear enough?
[/quote]

..Yes I understand that part. Its the fact that the hider isn't working for me..