[OOC] NARUTO: Road to Ninja [ARC 3] Buy it now and get a second punt free!

[FallenTrinity]

@Partisan is it possible for chuunin to learn or create new jutsu or techniques and if so I'm assuming it must be approved right? This is more for future purposes.

[Partisan]

Yes but like you said we'd like to see them first, and also, we think it's kind of silly to just say ''okay he has a new technique'' without any IC reason or IC clarification as to how he got it, but yeah you _can_ get new jutsu.

[FallenTrinity]

I figured that IC reasons would be necessary anyway. If I was to make a new jutsu or technique it wouldn't be for quite some time anyway.

[Xuna]

F**k it

Douzen Ooi

(Brown Hair insted)
【Full Name】
Douzen Ooi

【Age】
15

【Gender】
Male

【Birthplace】
Kirigakure

【Bloodline】
Ooi

【Rank】
Chūnin

Combat reports.

【Fighting style】
Conservative. He's not particularly fond of fighting, however all males part of the Ooi bloodline must. Meaning he will play defensive, although when in a rage his true skill shows. Most blinded by rage tend to stray from their skills and fall back on more instinctive reactions. Douzen, however, hones all the skills and manages to remain sane and collective on the outside, while raising Hell inside.

【Custom made techniques】

Jutsu name: Hell's Wrath
Rank: B
Range: 1 yard circumference around user
Description: After placing one's hand on the ground, the User channels their energy through the Earth, Sapping the the life force around a small area. After doing such, the user pulls his/her hand from the earth with it's energy flowing around the palm. The user then combines that energy with the fire elemental affinity to create a small ball of fire. Once the ball comes in contact with a target, there is a small explosion that occurs that may inflict more internal damage. This may also knock the target back a few feet.

Jutsu name: Hell Hound
Rank: C
Range: 50 yards
Description: Douzen kneels to the ground and cuffs his mouth with both hands to perform this jutsu. He releases fire chakra from the mouth in the shape of a flaming wolf. The wolf charges forward to collide with the target causing a semi-small explosion that may leave 2-3rd degree burns.

Basic Fire Jutsu:

My Hider

A Rank:
Fire Release - Blaze Eruption

B Rank:
Fire Release - Fireball

C Rank:
Fire Release - Flame Flower
Fire Release - Pheonix Flower Jutsu

Jutsu Name History

Hell is given to some the advanced custom jutsu of all the Ooi clan in honor of Sishui "Hell" Ooi, the founder of the clan.

Sishui was given the name "Hell" by his father, Undu, due to his decieving and mischievous personality. His older brother, Kuraku, was intellectual and wise, earning him the name "Heaven".

Kuraku was cursed and was ordered to assassinate Undu while he slept. Kuraku was caught by Sishui, seconds before his blade fell. Sishui ended up killing Kuraku and saving his father.

【Personality】
In his early years, Douzen was full of life and excitement. He was perceptive and a very fast learner. However, after the death of his father, Douzen slowly fell into depression and isolation. The first year was the worst, in which douzen would not speak. He had lost a lot of the interaction with his peers. His depression was relieved by determination. Douzen knew his father would've like to see him flourish, so he continued to train everyday. Upon achieving the Genin rank, Douzen only thought of his father which, at the moment, gave him a since a pride but proved to only further his depression.

Douzen finally conquered his depression after achieving the rank Chunin. His glum outlook still remained, but he could finally be at peace with his mind. He let his dad go and moved on with his life. He has vowed to not let another person or himself bring him down. He's dropped fear and laughs in the face of adversity, knowing it cannot be bested.

【History】

Douzen was concieved and born in Kirigakure. His father was Museigan Ooi, deadliest and middle child of his 7 brothers, he was also despised by his father, Shin Ooi. This was due to the strong resemblance Museigan had with his mother, Reigan Ooi, Who left Shin after Museigan's 10th birthday. The boy was closest to his mother, even more so than Shin, so Atemi took Museigan and fled to the Sand.

5 years passed and Museigan was determined to venture back to the Mist and settle things with his father. Achieving the Jonin rank, Museigan at 15 was more prepared than most men would've been in their entire life.

After arriving at the mist, Museigan noticed a lot of change and took it all in as he made his way to his clan's home. The small complex of buildings was thriving with children, women and ninja. Museigan first noticed his youngest brother, Sougishiki, who directed him to the Elder's Quarters where their father was. His mother had never explained the "atrocities" committed by Shin so he decided to find out himself, first-hand.

Shin was honest with Museigan as their customs deny false-tellings to any sort of kin. Shin spoke of drunken stupers and old whores, but even then this wasn't Atemi's reason, Museigan could tell. After hearing out his father Museigan shouted at his father, ordering him to stop hiding and to face his son like a true father...So he did..

Shin revealed himself.

--

He spoke of 16 years ago, 9 months before Museigan's birth. He explained how that was the peak of his honeyed romances and how his mother left before the last time. His words were soft and his blood calm, a rare state for Shin..

"She gave me her final warning and I didn't listen... She went out with her friends for a drink while I was galavanting with my ladies."

Museigan glared, attention fixed on shin.

"I returned home to discover that my wife was missing...I made my way back to the streets in a panicked search. It was the dead of night and all was still, save for the rats that scavenge the ground in the darkness..."

He paused and lowered his head. Museigan only stood in silence to await his fathers next words.

"There was a shriek...I managed to track the sound and found your poor mother cast upon the dirt lifelessy.. She had lacerations all over her body and she was stripped to the..."

Museigan halted his father and turned his back. Tears fell from his face after hearing the tragic truth about his mother. Which she, herself, could not bare to tell.

"I found the man 6 years later when passing by in a market. Your mother dropped her things and only the look of horror remained on her face. He also..."

"Also what?" Museigan interrupted.

"...Looked exactly like you..." Shin forced, "I found out where he stayed, when he left and when he came back. I knew everything and once the moment was right, I did what needed to be done..." Shin sunk his head and slouched his shoulders. Douzen stood tall, but still turned around.

Seconds passed before Museigan finally gained the composure to speak, "So why'd she leave?"

"I came home drunk, 5th night in a row, she had grown tired of it. The arguing began, but this time it was different. We both had different tones than usual and she wasn't crying as usual. I felt like I was losing the argument so I brought up the game winner...You.."
Shin grew quiet.

"She was gone by morning..."

--

Museigan then returned to the Sand where 3 years later he would meet the love of his life, Atemi Kanshaku. She was a beautiful brown haired accountant with a rich family history. They fell madly in love and eventually landed back in Kirigakure, where they would have Douzen.

Before Douzen could even walk, the young family moved to Konohagakure. Museigan took up his role as a Jonin and Atemi had her accounting job for a big company. Museigan's skill advanced over the years and was considered top tier by some. Although earning this title gained him huge respect, it also came with the dirty work... While Douzen was still young, Museigan took on an elite mission and due to certain circumstances, He had chosen to sacrifice his life for his squad.

Museigan, however, would not let his son die with him. He filled a book with all his teachings and had asked Atemi to give it to Douzen. He had always seen great potential in his son and insisted that he become a ninja. Atemi also possessed the same feelings about the boy, so she obeyed her husband and handed the book over as promised. Douzen absorbed the information and translated it into action beautifully as a child, but lost a lot of that aggression and drive after getting over his father. Atemi never let him stray from the ninja way. after observing the boy's behavior, she knew the case and decided to put him through ninja school.

【Family ties]
Atemi Ooi (Kanshaku) (Mother)
Museigan Ooi (Father) -Deceased-

[Savato]

@Xuna Hello, I'll be your reviewer.

I will put this very simply in three easy steps.

Step one: Take into consideration the amount of detail put in both your character's moves (what they precisely do and effects) and personality.

Step two: Compare text volume of other accepted CS's to yours. You can take my character Aoi for example, both in terms of personality and technique description. More rigorous work is demanded.

Step three: Perhaps you didn't realize this, but this isn't a shonen. Putting Hell into the name of a technique and explaining what it looks like isn't enough. Also, your character's personality is essentially he's a cool guy until someone is uncool with him. What kind of abnormal human being remains cool and swell when the situation sucks balls? "He's nice until someone makes him mad", these kind of cookie cutter personalities simply don't go.

Bonus: Working on presentation is always a plus.

Now you have everything you need to succeed in very simple steps.

Verdict: Denied until you actually put some effort like anyone else. I hope you understand.

[Xuna]

@Xuna Hello, I'll be your reviewer.

I will put this very simply in three easy steps.

Step one: Take into consideration the amount of detail put in both your character's moves (what they precisely do and effects) and personality.

Step two: Compare text volume of other accepted CS's to yours. You can take my character Aoi for example, both in terms of personality and technique description. More rigorous work is demanded.

Step three: Perhaps you didn't realize this, but this isn't a shonen. Putting Hell into the name of a technique and explaining what it looks like isn't enough. Also, your character's personality is essentially he's a cool guy until someone is uncool with him. What kind of abnormal human being remains cool and swell when the situation sucks balls? "He's nice until someone makes him mad", these kind of cookie cutter personalities simply don't go.

Bonus: Working on presentation is always a plus.

Now you have everything you need to succeed in very simple steps.

Verdict: Denied until you actually put some effort like anyone else. I hope you understand.

@Savato

Appreciate it, but I've never really done personalities before. That's just something I like to develop into the RP. I have no idea what his personality is at the moment and I dont believe you can actually pin a personality down. I could've used more detail, yes, but I didn't since I thought it was of little importance. Will edit.

As for jutsu, will edit. However the word 'Hell' should I avoid it?

[Savato]

@Xuna Once again, follow step 2. Compare text length to the rest, it doesn't have to be exactly that size but you can easily pull an average. That's generally how much is needed in High-Casual (yes we're pretentious enough to consider ourselves that). You can do the same with personality, you essentially say how he behaves for now, and if it evolves, well, you can always edit it according to various events that build up his identity. Everyone has done it here, so you can to.

You don't have to avoid the word 'Hell', but naming every jutsu with that word in it and not giving a single explanation as to why other than it sounding cool is cliché and generally pointless. I wouldn't really care if you explained the jutsu, but right now it's just not cutting it.

[Xuna]

@Xuna Once again, follow step 2. Compare text length to the rest, it doesn't have to be exactly that size but you can easily pull an average. That's generally how much is needed in High-Casual (yes we're pretentious enough to consider ourselves that). You can do the same with personality, you essentially say how he behaves for now, and if it evolves, well, you can always edit it according to various events that build up his identity. Everyone has done it here, so you can to.

You don't have to avoid the word 'Hell', but naming every jutsu with that word in it and not giving a single explanation as to why other than it sounding cool is cliché and generally pointless. I wouldn't really care if you explained the jutsu, but right now it's just not cutting it.

@Savato

Lol I did have a description for the "hell" in there but I must of deleted it and forgot to re-type. It'll be done

[Partisan]

<Snipped quote by Savato>

Appreciate it, but I've never really done personalities before. That's just something I like to develop into the RP. I have no idea what his personality is at the moment and I dont believe you can actually pin a personality down. I could've used more detail, yes, but I didn't since I thought it was of little importance. Will edit.

As for jutsu, will edit. However the word 'Hell' should I avoid it?

@Xuna

It's not pinning it down. Let me help you:

Dedicate a paragraph to each of these:

How is he in a positive situation? (ex: being with friends)
How is he in a neutral situation? (ex: talking to a jonin team leader)
How is he in a negative situation? (ex: fighting some bad guy)

How is he with family? How is he with friends?

It's not pinning down and can change ICly but it helps us interpret who he is and who we can pair him with.

[Taka]

Nevermind this then. lol

[FallenTrinity]

Nevermind this then. lol

@Kal-El

This is just showing me now that I might need to expand on details with my jutsu
@Savato @Partisan Would it be possible if I could go into my character and expand on his jutsus? Mostly details or lack of

[Savato]

@FallenTrinity Erm, why? They're good as they are for you.

[FallenTrinity]

Ok

[Raijinslayer]

@PartisanAny reason why Savuro's breaking into people's houses and what not, or is this what he does on his days off?

[Partisan]

@Raijinslayer He didn't have a place in any team because fuck knows why so I'm just amusing myself. He'll be using the info he gathers to buy presents for them to make friends. He's also a weird guy, so probably he would do this regardless. He just feels it's best to have info on everyone so that he can use it.

[AlteredTundra]

@Kal-El
Nobunaga

@j8cob
Your Circular Header Tags:
Tsukiko


Shin: did one of each of his used character images. You can decide which you like best.

[Partisan]

Choose the right because the left one's art is stoopit.

[Partisan]

Rei Minamoru

“For the Minamoru, everything.”

Rei has changed quite a bit over the years, having bleached her hair a white colour. Compared to earlier ages she has also grown physically, becoming more of a woman and less of a child. As such she's grown more curves in a lovely hourglass figure (like her mother) with wide hips and a wide upper body, but a thing and small waistline. She's not all that muscled, definetely not compared to Yamato, her older brother. She is however a lot more flexible and lighter, allowing faster movement and more daring dodge moves. She is also quite small reaching barely 5'3.

Her facial features resemble that of her brother ever so slightly, but enough to make people recognise them as brother and sister (despite the age gap) where they both have a rounded face but a chiseled jawline (him more so than her) and just like him, she has a thing nosebridge. Different from him however she doesn't have dark green eyes but rather, a brownish kind of colour.



Her shinobi-clothes are relatively simple, being a blue vest over a black athletic crop top, with a blue skirt underneath that. Her vest is usually partially open revealing a bit of her stomach and her belly button, which are toned. Alongside that she also wears gloves, as well as black stockings with cuts in the side revealing her leg. Besides that she wears the relatively standard shinobi sandals, a high version with a metal plating attached.

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Personnel files.
Access only by security personnel with a C3 clearance.

【Full Name】
Reihana Minamoru

【Alias】
“Little Master”

【Age】
16

【Sex】
Female

【Sexuality】
Straight. Finally allowed a boyfriend, though Yamato will be bitchy about it.

【Birthplace】
Konohagakure

【Bloodline】
Minamoru

【Rank】
Chunin

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Psych. report.
Medical secrecy applies.

【Personality】
Rei is unlike some in her family a bit more friendly, however she still bears the Minamoru trademark of not being pro-kekkei genkai. She might not be as upright and straight-forward about it, but she has a fine memory imprinted in her mind that kekkei genkai's are generally bad. Never the less she remains quite friendly to those with kekkei genkai, although she probably shouldn't if she wants to remain in her fathers' good graces.

Furthermore she is also quite sociable and has quite a lot of friends her own age (in other teams, too) and the few times she's met other shinobi from other villages she was always able to form new relationships with these people. Her proximity to Yamato, a somewhat known boy since he is a prodigy, a genius of a sort, has only furthered this since even if people dont neccesarily like the girl, they might be interested by Yamato and want to stay close to him, and thus, Reihana.

Rei is a happy girl who provides a stark contrast to her brother Yamato. Being pretty much an exact opposite in personality, she is friendly, cheerful and respectful towards everyone at all moments - yes, even when she's grumpy she'll make an effort to excuse herself for it. Due to this she's quite popular, although you could wonder if this is because of herself or because her brother is Yamato, a popular boy in the lower grades, especially amongst the girls who seem to frequently want to stay over at the Minamoru residence to “sleep over at Rei's”.

When dealing with authorities such as jonins or chunins, or any other sort of authority who ranks higher in the hierarchy, she seems to listen well but often dwells off during briefings or lectures - she isn't sure if she even wants to be a shinobi and mostly is taking classes in it because she wants to follow in Yamato's footsteps, although she doesn't seem to want to put effort towards this goal. She frequently declines Yamato's harsh offers to train together, stating she has plans already (usually comprised of buying makeup or clothes in the Financial District with friends.. daddy's creditcard.)

【History】
Ever since birth Rei was overshadowed by Yamato in all aspects except in love - being a girl she drew closer to her mother, and father always wanted to protect her so she was never lacking in the attention department either. However she was always forced to hear about Yamato's greatness during dinner and other family meetings, something she doesn't feel warm or cold towards. It seems to be accepted as a fact of life that Yamato is a better shinobi, something that hasn't really impacted her relationships with mom and dad anyway so she hardly cares. Matter of fact it seems to have fostered and nurtured a great amount of respect and forced her to look up to her older brother, something she'd never admit and something he'd never notice.

She seemed to do quite alright in base school, never really doing above average but always managing to get a proper pass on any test. Teachers loved her, despite not being a great student, due to her brother being a good student before her. This caused them to constantly reminisce about things Yamato mastered before anyone else and led to them expecting the same of her - although they were quick to realize that this would probably not be the case. Now that she's passed her base school exams she's become a genin, and she's now in shinobi high school, to become a chunin and partaking in genin missions in the designated times as well in her free time whenever she's called on by her sensei. Formerly her sensei was Tsukiko Umene, the “Honeybadger” and although they weren't compatible in styles, she enjoyed her time with the sensei, who was a bit wild and strange at times but was a good teacher none the less. Furthermore she was extremely beautiful, something that always drew Rei closer to her and that made her want to be like Tsukiko - sadly for her it would never come to this as sensei was pulled away from the team following a reorganisation in favor of a new experiment to divide the teams into variable teams handpicked for each missions. Last known, her sensei is a man named Kirimoro, who specialises in medical jutsu. Given that she's not particularily fond of this man but has a keen interest in medical jutsu and wished to work in the hospital rather than become a shinobi fighter like Yamato, she's put up with the man and has tried to become better friends with him.

That failed ultimately, and after a mission with Giichi and Yamato, she has decided to actually follow in Yamato's footsteps in whole, and put forwards greater effort to become a better fighter. This succeeded and by then she'd become a capable genin, ready to enter the chunin exams. She entered alongside Giichi and Rin, to become chunin together with them. Ultimately this was achieved by all three of them and now all three of them are chunin, Rei included.

【Family ties】
Rei is more or less the favored child in the household due to Yamato's inaccessibility to his father and mother. Due to that she's quite pampered, but not to the point where's she's a spoiled brat. Rather, she just gets all she wants, but this has also humbled her a bit.

Mika Minamoru | Mother | 38, Konohagakure, restaurant owner and part time mother, she is a hard worker who never complains. Atleast she likes to think so.
Reijo Minamoru | Father | 44, Konohagakure, although often away on bussiness, politician and economist, it's said he has a pair of mistresses in any city.
Yamato Minamoru | Older brother | 18, Konohagakure, Rei is often left in his shadow due to him being a prodigy but that hasn't made her resentful, but rather proud instead. She adores him and wishes to be like him, although that will never happen and she knows it.

【Dreams and fears】
Rei dreams to simply have a family when she grows older, and to one day get out of the turbulent life of a shinobi without too much scratches.

Her fears are that her family is murdered (obviously, a fear for anyone) or being endangered.

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Combat reports.
Gathered from evaluation reports after missions.

【Fighting style】
Unlike her brother Rei has little aptitude for taijutsu due to her fragile frame and slender build - as such she is more accustomed to the use of ninjutsu, becoming quite adept at it in the progress. She has an average chakra pool and average chakra control, so in essence she is not above or below anyone in terms of any type of combat besides taijutsu and some weaponry. However this has allowed her to also become adept at the use of ninjutsu - maybe she is no expert at the actual jutsu, but she can use the jutsu that she has quite well.

【Ninja techniques】
A rank techniques:
SUITON: Thousand Flying Water Needles (scaled up, because, well, it's a good technique)

B rank techniques:
DOTON: Bedrock Coffin
DOTON: Earth Flow Spears

C rank techniques:
SUITON: Mouth Shot
DOTON: Hiding like a Mole Jutsu
SUITON: Water Prison Technique
SUITON: Water Trumpet

D-E rank techniques:
DOTON: Double Suicide Decapitation Technique

【Custom made techniques】
Jutsu name:
DOTON: Earthen Flask Technique
Rank:
B
Range:
Medium-close.
Description:
This technique is part one of the combination techniques that Rei made up herself, of which this is the first jutsu needed. It's not neccesarily a B rank but the combination of it's own is a B rank style jutsu.

The first part of the jutsu is creating a dome around the target. This can be done in numerous ways as a setup (i.e how to get it around the enemy) such as a lure using a clone, or other such trickery. It's also possible to use some more chakra and simply create the dome right where the target is.

Now, this isn't a cheapshot, since there is a hole at the top of the dome (for a good reason that I will come to later) that the target can then escape out of. At this point the technique is done and the next technique is put into action to finish the combo. Phase two!

Jutsu name:
SUITON: Refilling Well Technique
Rank:
B
Range:
Close.
Description:
This technique is part two of the combination jutsu that Rei can do. After performing required handseals *as always* Rei will jump onto of the dome and spew water with the chakra kneaded in her stomach, into the opening, to fill up the dome of earth.

Rei, the new chunin. Any criticism, ideas or comments are welcome from anyone.

plz tell me how gud this character is

Also, this is for after the year time skip so don't bother about her rank/age, it will all be explained. I think.

[j8cob]

she gai

[Partisan]

yes the cs says she is straight but i guess she is gay thanks for this insight j8 really appreciate that