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@Partisan is it possible for chuunin to learn or create new jutsu or techniques and if so I'm assuming it must be approved right? This is more for future purposes.
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Yes but like you said we'd like to see them first, and also, we think it's kind of silly to just say ''okay he has a new technique'' without any IC reason or IC clarification as to how he got it, but yeah you _can_ get new jutsu.
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I figured that IC reasons would be necessary anyway. If I was to make a new jutsu or technique it wouldn't be for quite some time anyway.
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F**k it
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@Xuna Hello, I'll be your reviewer.

I will put this very simply in three easy steps.

Step one: Take into consideration the amount of detail put in both your character's moves (what they precisely do and effects) and personality.

Step two: Compare text volume of other accepted CS's to yours. You can take my character Aoi for example, both in terms of personality and technique description. More rigorous work is demanded.

Step three: Perhaps you didn't realize this, but this isn't a shonen. Putting Hell into the name of a technique and explaining what it looks like isn't enough. Also, your character's personality is essentially he's a cool guy until someone is uncool with him. What kind of abnormal human being remains cool and swell when the situation sucks balls? "He's nice until someone makes him mad", these kind of cookie cutter personalities simply don't go.

Bonus: Working on presentation is always a plus.

Now you have everything you need to succeed in very simple steps.

Verdict: Denied until you actually put some effort like anyone else. I hope you understand.
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@Xuna Hello, I'll be your reviewer.

I will put this very simply in three easy steps.

Step one: Take into consideration the amount of detail put in both your character's moves (what they precisely do and effects) and personality.

Step two: Compare text volume of other accepted CS's to yours. You can take my character Aoi for example, both in terms of personality and technique description. More rigorous work is demanded.

Step three: Perhaps you didn't realize this, but this isn't a shonen. Putting Hell into the name of a technique and explaining what it looks like isn't enough. Also, your character's personality is essentially he's a cool guy until someone is uncool with him. What kind of abnormal human being remains cool and swell when the situation sucks balls? "He's nice until someone makes him mad", these kind of cookie cutter personalities simply don't go.

Bonus: Working on presentation is always a plus.

Now you have everything you need to succeed in very simple steps.

Verdict: Denied until you actually put some effort like anyone else. I hope you understand.


Appreciate it, but I've never really done personalities before. That's just something I like to develop into the RP. I have no idea what his personality is at the moment and I dont believe you can actually pin a personality down. I could've used more detail, yes, but I didn't since I thought it was of little importance. Will edit.

As for jutsu, will edit. However the word 'Hell' should I avoid it?
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@Xuna Once again, follow step 2. Compare text length to the rest, it doesn't have to be exactly that size but you can easily pull an average. That's generally how much is needed in High-Casual (yes we're pretentious enough to consider ourselves that). You can do the same with personality, you essentially say how he behaves for now, and if it evolves, well, you can always edit it according to various events that build up his identity. Everyone has done it here, so you can to.

You don't have to avoid the word 'Hell', but naming every jutsu with that word in it and not giving a single explanation as to why other than it sounding cool is cliché and generally pointless. I wouldn't really care if you explained the jutsu, but right now it's just not cutting it.
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@Xuna Once again, follow step 2. Compare text length to the rest, it doesn't have to be exactly that size but you can easily pull an average. That's generally how much is needed in High-Casual (yes we're pretentious enough to consider ourselves that). You can do the same with personality, you essentially say how he behaves for now, and if it evolves, well, you can always edit it according to various events that build up his identity. Everyone has done it here, so you can to.

You don't have to avoid the word 'Hell', but naming every jutsu with that word in it and not giving a single explanation as to why other than it sounding cool is cliché and generally pointless. I wouldn't really care if you explained the jutsu, but right now it's just not cutting it.


Lol I did have a description for the "hell" in there but I must of deleted it and forgot to re-type. It'll be done
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<Snipped quote by Savato>

Appreciate it, but I've never really done personalities before. That's just something I like to develop into the RP. I have no idea what his personality is at the moment and I dont believe you can actually pin a personality down. I could've used more detail, yes, but I didn't since I thought it was of little importance. Will edit.

As for jutsu, will edit. However the word 'Hell' should I avoid it?


It's not pinning it down. Let me help you:

Dedicate a paragraph to each of these:

How is he in a positive situation? (ex: being with friends)
How is he in a neutral situation? (ex: talking to a jonin team leader)
How is he in a negative situation? (ex: fighting some bad guy)

How is he with family? How is he with friends?

It's not pinning down and can change ICly but it helps us interpret who he is and who we can pair him with.
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Nevermind this then. lol
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Nevermind this then. lol


This is just showing me now that I might need to expand on details with my jutsu
@Savato @Partisan Would it be possible if I could go into my character and expand on his jutsus? Mostly details or lack of
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@FallenTrinity Erm, why? They're good as they are for you.
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Ok
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@PartisanAny reason why Savuro's breaking into people's houses and what not, or is this what he does on his days off?
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@Raijinslayer He didn't have a place in any team because fuck knows why so I'm just amusing myself. He'll be using the info he gathers to buy presents for them to make friends. He's also a weird guy, so probably he would do this regardless. He just feels it's best to have info on everyone so that he can use it.
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Shin: did one of each of his used character images. You can decide which you like best.



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Choose the right because the left one's art is stoopit.
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Rei, the new chunin. Any criticism, ideas or comments are welcome from anyone.

plz tell me how gud this character is

Also, this is for after the year time skip so don't bother about her rank/age, it will all be explained. I think.
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she gai
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yes the cs says she is straight but i guess she is gay thanks for this insight j8 really appreciate that
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