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Or if he, @Vortenx, would like I could sometime explain my thought processes for some of my original characters (Note: None in here are original). But that will have to be on a rain check for at least 24 hours.
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Okay, I'm good. I have another two weeks of no internet but I can just borrow someone's phone to check posts and write everything up. I'd basically just have time to check and post so for the next two weeks, I won't be speaking in the OOC much (not that I do anything productive in the OOC XD).

@Pirouette, I'll work on the response as soon as I can, I've just been everywhere and doing everything. I will get onto it tomorrow after I rest a bit.
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I'm just going to do an Ika dump.
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A song based on Ika Musume!
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Because of what Lmpkio's been getting, I suppose I'll make a thorough review of what's wrong here. I'm not a GM like Lmpkio, but considering he's alone at the job, I suppose I'd give him a hand to make you understand the issues since you're new and all.

Bio: His backstory changes as he tells it but the most common thing that comes up is that his parents died when he was young. he lived one the streets before finding out about his powers. After finding out about his powers he became a thief first stealing things for him to live. Until one day he ran into this guy who had a weird symbol on his and and on the ground under him, before either one of them could say a thing, a glowing red light flashed. When Kevin woke up he felt different, he looked forward and saw the same guy. After learning about becoming a philosopher stone the guy disappeared. After that his life story is choppy and no one can figure out the rest.


Apart from it being super cliché, what it's missing would be the reason why he's from Arcadia-2 and how he got the conglomerate of powers he's currently got. Plus the Pholosopher stone thing is silly.

Abilities: Super speed, Super fast regeneration, Is a human philosopher stone(it has its limits when it runs out of souls he dies, currently has 4,918.) so he can change anything he wants with a touch


If this is based off FMAB, a human philosopher stone would be a homonculus, right? Or at least something similar to King Bradley since he was a human fused with a philosopher stone. If it's the latter, why does he have immortality? That was Bradley's flaw, he aged and didn't have extra lives in exchange for being mega strong. In any case, you're making yourself immortal as well as being as powerful as Father. To give some perspective, he could, in theory, defeat the God Emperor.

Congenital insensitivity to pain, Virtually immortal cause of the power of 2 reality gems(if he were to lose BOTH gems he loses the power of immortality)


Why do you need extra immortality when you have haxed Homoculus powers anyway? Double immortality?

smart enough to come up with a game plan that can get him out of any problems in a pinch,


It depends on the extent of your creativity. Plus why would you need that, you're double immortal?

can move fast enough to stop anyone from moving but can only use his hands to do it with in a range of about 10 to 20 feet(if he uses his whole body he will teleport through time with out control),


... This doesn't make much sense. He's so fast he exceeds others without question? It's either silly or powerplaying. Or both.

has the ability to break the 4th wall cause of the gems.


I hate this. I really do. It makes the character like another Deadpool, funny after a couple of jokes, a forced experience afterward.

A pouch that is never ending and small(he can just pull what ever he wants out of it), 2 stone like gems that control reality(one in his pouch and the other in his stomach),


As Skeletor said so wisely: wat

Seriously, what? In no RP'ing platform have I seen such a need to have ridiculous power. I'm giving you the benefit of the doubt and say you probably didn't think it all through.

Any weapon he can think of to pull from the pouch.


No limit? Guess you'll summon Kyouka Suigetsu.

If his head is under salt water he loses the ability to move, but he can think so he can use the gems to teleport.


So this weakness is completely irrelevant if he can just warp away from completely arbitrary weakness.

If caught in an explosion he will freeze up for a bit till he comes to his senses, He will sometimes get too cocky that he forgets he has a lot of his equipment.


So instead of falling into pieces ... He freezes up? wut, where's that from?

Since he can pull out anything from his magic pouch thing, I'm going to assume that last thing is null. Unless he forgets the pouch itself. In that case, it's still null. Because of all the batshit insane powers you have.

So yeah, now that you can see in detail what's the issue, I'll side with Lmpkio here and say start fresh with something that isn't an OP mess.
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It is truly dead today.
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This song right here should be the theme song for the RP

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It is truly dead today.


Finals.

But I'm done so good cheer for all!
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@Absolis Finals are coming up man. But after Thursday, I'll be more available. Might have a post either today or tomorrow.
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Welp, theres a post from me. Also going to take a break from Long War I think, I'm starting to get bored with it and I'm a bit mad that you can't respec soldiers without making them mechs.
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@Mtntopview I need you to post so that I can do so next in one go.
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I wait patiently. Somewhat. Not really.
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@Mtntopview I need you to post so that I can do so next in one go.


You could always do an Arcadia 2 post and an Arcadia 1 post as different posts too.
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<Snipped quote by Lmpkio>

You could always do an Arcadia 2 post and an Arcadia 1 post as different posts too.


I just usually prefer to do everything in one post. But if not, then I'll do just those.
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Are you on @Pirouette's diplomatic shuttle or landing shuttle?
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Are you on @Pirouette's diplomatic shuttle or landing shuttle?


I play many characters.

The BoP sent a diplomatic shuttle to your guys and have various dropships hanging out in orbit.

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Yeah BoP sent one of their shuttles to meet yours.
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