@TheUnknowableGreat, I'll write and put up a CS and if it's accepted, get something in the IC tonight or tomorrow depending how long it takes my slow brain to get something jotted down. :P
Hope this is okay, I don't know, felt the backstory and a few other things might not have been right, if this is accepted, I was wondering if it would be okay for her to be either arriving or already there as a padawan alone, I know that on most occasions they're accompanied by a master, but there have been occasions where they've been on their own missions before and I figured this would be one of those times, what with a war going on.
Name: Neviana Sarin
Race: Human
Appearance: She has vibrant strawberry blonde hair, soft facial features along with with gray-blue eyes to compliment the rest of her head, her figure is slim but not overly so.
Force Tradition: Jedi Order
Force Powers: Push and Pull, Battle Meditation (Limited), Telekinesis (Moderate), Force leap.
Skills: Decent Slicer, Form I (Skilled), Form V (Poor)
Personality: She has a gentle nature, always tries to find the good in people, impressionable (good or bad depending on perspective) and always tries to do her best with the allies that she's with.
Backstory: Neviana was born on Coruscant, she lived a decent life, her family wasn't the richest, but they made enough to afford a moderately nice home, one night when her family and her were returning home from dinner, they were held up by a local gang trying to rob them. Of course as most people would, her parents gave them their money along with any other valuables they had, however they weren't satisfied with that and then tried to take Neviana herself, naturally her parents weren't going to allow that and tried to keep the gang at bay from their daughter to the best of their ability, but with with them out numbering them by an additional two making a total of four, they were beaten and then once incapacitated, blasted by the gangs pistols and killed.
She had been about to be taken when a Jedi's lightsaber, erupted from the dark, quickly disarming and dispatching the gang, the Jedi took Neviana, ready to file a report and then decided to seek permission from the council to train her as a Jedi after sensing some force ability in her; she had been discovered before months earlier but her parents had refused to allow the Jedi to train their daughter, they didn't want to be separated for so long and also didn't want her potentially being killed by the on going war. With permission granted, the young four year old Neviana was trained in the ways of the force, along with lightsaber training and learning of the Jedi. Now with her at fifteen and a new padawan, she tries to do right by the Jedi and ensure that nothing happens to someone else what happened to her.
@Sohtem Not the GM, but I wanna put some input on this.
- There is that part of the series where it was shown that there was a Holocron Chip of all the force sensitive children in the galaxy, so they would most likely know about her.
- Most children are brought into the Jedi Order around 3 or 4 years old, so she would most likely be very young to have still been accepted.
Other than that that needs clearing up, I like it. It's interesting to say the least.
@Shiny Keldeo Yeah, suppose I could edit a few things around to try and make some things fit better and I always try to make my characters interesting in some capacity, thanks for the feedback.
Edit: I fixed it up a bit, hope that works a little better, probably not but my tired brain thinks anything looks good, hehe, I had written something else but I felt it was a little long and a lot of stuff in it wasn't needed, hopefully this is better as I said.
