[OOC] Bleach: A New Dawn

[Zane620]

Well the backstory is okay, but I believe we dont want any canon character being mentioned, and we know who this Black spikey hair guy and pink haired child is XD. And having close to Zaraki's spiritual energy is pushing it a bit, this is the man that has been a Captain and fought many people with Bankai's, and beat them with sealed state. Other than that everything looks fine to me.

[AbigailTenshi]

hatakekuro said
I remember. ^^ It's great to see you again.

Wooo! ^_^ Yay! It's good to see you again too :) I hope everything is well with you

[Remram]

Zane620 said
Well the backstory is okay, but I believe we dont want any canon character being mentioned, and we know who this Black spikey hair guy and pink haired child is XD. And having close to Zaraki's spiritual energy is pushing it a bit, this is the man that has been a Captain and fought many people with Bankai's, and beat them with sealed state. Other than that everything looks fine to me.

Kurisa approved that all before so I think it's all good. xD

[Remram]

AbigailTenshi said
Wooo! ^_^ Yay! It's good to see you again too :) I hope everything is well with you

Things have been so so. How have you been?

[Remram]

If he wants me to change then I will.

[Phobos]

HAATAAAAKEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE

[Remram]

SHOOSSSSSSKEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!

[Axel]

I will be back tomorrow!!!! And when I get back then I will assimilate you all!!! Naw, happy late ass Fourth Of July and I'll check any other post so I can respond to them when able. Until then ze Axel will remain in complete darkness till the moment of reckoning is upon you. In seriousness, hope you guys enjoyed your day and see ya later... *Vanishes*

[Phobos]

hatakekuro said
SHOOSSSSSSKEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!

How have you been?^.^

Also, I'll reply soon Zane xD

[Zane620]

Damn right ya will

[Phobos]

Zane620 said
Damn right ya will

And by soon, I mean next week xD

[Remram]

Phobos said
How have you been?^.^Also, I'll reply soon Zane xD

I've been pretty busy with summer school and helping my mom garden. ^^ How are you?

[Axel]

AbigailTenshi said
Well it probably is best that you revise them xD And maybe have that move an illusion type so that the target looks at the area and see it as the part being ripped out, the are around the fake wound become light weighted as if they're bleeding out and they feel the pain. That way the part isn't removed but the feeling of removal is there xD That seems more fair as it would be difficult to prevent small stains from staining the body or cloths. Or you could have it so that the stain burns constantly, maybe the red stain turns a Milton colour as it gives the target a constant burn xP Removal of limbs is just a little OP for me f(^_^') But I think Expllo should have a look, he knows what Kurisa would want.I didn't notice XD And Naaaa, my characters aren't as creative as yours xD

Hiezogawa doesn't deal with illusions, only spatial manipulation and fire so not possible. Your second has given me a thought but I'm gonna turn whatever move it becomes into a Bankai move so that I have more time to think. I believe that Expllo is right about it being over powered for a Shikai technique doing that means I have to find Shikai replacements. And yeah they are when one char's Shikai form changes depending on the card it chooses or something like that( XD They.don't look as creative as mine only because you're looking at them through your eyes ^_^

Expllo said
*Jumps in*Alright I'm lazy, tired, and Kat desperate so I'll try to keep it short.I wouldn't accept the move, yeah I know Axel isn't one to go all OP, but yeah the move is a bit OP.....Especially if the stain is in a certain area. As well there isn't really an restrictions on him using a move like that, or backfire to using it.And personally I think a move like this would be more acceptable in Bankai....Erasing things from existence instantly and completely? I think that's a bit too OP, especially for only a Shikai O.o now if it was just ripping that area then it'd be fine, or something other than erasing it from existence.So pretty much what I'm saying is that it'd be more....Acceptable in Bankai than just a Shikai, so yeah O.o

Yes it will be more acceptable in Bankai and delaying it will allow me to revise it to complete perfection. I actually wanted to use this Shikai move so that'll grant me the space needed to add it. With that said, I'm gonna get to work and thank you guys & gals for the assistance ^_^

[Jangel13]

@axel need your reply to move it along

[Phobos]

hatakekuro said
I've been pretty busy with summer school and helping my mom garden. ^^ How are you?

Same here, been busy with work/school/rl shit, but good to see you back ^.^

[Zane620]

Phobos said
Same here, been busy with work/school/rl shit, but good to see you back ^.^

Irl shit being not getting laid over Monopoly and having some angry as shit sex

[Phobos]

Zane620 said
Irl shit being not getting laid over Monopoly and having some angry as shit sex

Nah we stopped playing monopoly, that shit can ruin marriages xD we just skip that part now

[Zane620]

Phobos said
Nah we stopped playing monopoly, that shit can ruin marriages xD we just skip that part now

Wowwww

[Remram]

Phobos said
Same here, been busy with work/school/rl shit, but good to see you back ^.^

Thanks man. ^^ I only found this place by complete chance. xD

[Axel]

Finished with Hiezogawa(Pg. 782) and revised a few things(I'm really sleepy but you'll see what I mean unless you're sleepy too I suppose) so yeah. Like whenever anyone has the time I'll surely appreciate it ^_^