@Partisan Alright, it took a bit but here's the edited character sheet.
“Sacrifice yourself to do one good thing, or live on to do many? Think about it.”
Standing at about 5'11" and weighing in at 150~lb, Nori is tall, lean shinobi, with an air of thoughtful relaxation about him. His bluish-black hair is trimmed slightly shorter than in the picture above, keeping the bangs out of his eyes, and the length in the back about halfway down the neck. His skin is rather pale, with sharp grey eyes, and slightly pointed teeth reminiscent of the Seven Ninja Swordsman of the Mist.
Attire-wise; in battle, he forgoes a flak jacket, instead settling for a chain mesh under a loose, sleeveless blue shirt, black shin-length pants, standard issue black sandals, arm-guards, and his dark blue scarf tucked into the back of his shirt; a worn Kirigakure plate is attached to the end of this.
Out of battle, his attire is much more modern; while he still sticks to wearing blue out of habit, he often dresses in semi-casual suit jackets, button-up shirts, slacks, and sneakers, varying to weather and situation as necessary. The only consistency is the dark-blue scarf, kept with him regardless of occasion.
Personnel files.
Access only by security personnel with a C3 clearance.【Full Name】
Nori Hisakawa
【Alias】
The Listener; The Drowning Spear; Scarfy lol
【Affiliation】
Red Sages
【Age】
23
【Sex】
Male
【Sexuality】
Bisexual it's not gay in a three-way
【Birthplace】
Kirigakure Rest in Pepperoni
【Bloodline】
Hisakawa
【Rank】
Chūnin
Psych. report.
Medical secrecy applies.【Personality】
Nori is an analytical type. Even in casual conversations, he will take long periods of time to listen thoroughly to what the other(s) have to say before replying, replying only when he has found something worthwhile to say in response. He's often relaxing to be around because of this trait; you'll almost never be interrupted or ignored, and especially those needing to blow off some steam will drift to him.
The responses are where that line becomes less clear-cut. His honesty in his responses, and the depth he might go to analyze a statement, can lead to starting an argument that never needed to happen, or worsening an existing one. Not everyone likes hearing the truth. He doesn't seem to regret these situations, since the problem wasn't his fault in the first place. Some people think he's arrogant because of this aloofness, and they wouldn't be wrong. He'll become frustrated if people challenge his analysis, and even moreso if he happens to have made a mistake in his interpretation of the situation in the first place. nerd
Being such a good listener though, sometimes he has trouble starting conversations, or holding them. He doesn't really have the social drive to keep up small talk for very long, and he also dislikes having to talk about himself. It takes work for him to honestly feel like opening up to anyone, and he grows extremely uncomfortable talking about himself or his past. Which leads to a conflict of interests; if he can talk to you about your problems, why can't he talk to you about his own? my bad, he's extra nerd
【History】
Nori is the only son of his parents, a non-shinobi father and a hunter-nin mother, in the unsteady Kirigakure village. With the years preceding the era of peace from the Hamajō Confederation, his mother was hardly ever home for the boy, constantly performing missions, be they for the village, or against its defectors. No questions asked has always been the terms of the Hidden Mist though, and so he simply smiled and nodded when his father constantly praised her mother as a hero, regardless of how dirty her job was. Even when she did return though, she never doted on him, unlike how he saw other mothers do with their children. She simply enjoyed the brief tranquility that would come between her missions as much as possible, and Nori accepted the exhaustion that came with his mother, the "hero."
As he grew into his Academy years, he himself trained diligently in the Academy, to become a "great hero" like his scarcely seen mother, and succeeded; he was quiet, talented, and most importantly, obedient. What he also learned however, is how to be an outcast; children in times of war are never settled, and they found every reason to question why his father wasn't a shinobi, and tease that maybe his mother wouldn't come back this time. He simply let them speak and continued his training; his father did everything he could as a parent, and his mother was a hero. He didn't have the nerve to question them early on, and didn't care once he understood later. Even after learning of just what the job of hunter-nin entailed, well, it was just another grisly duty, and he would be more than willing to follow his mother's footsteps in that role.
And then, during his graduating year at the Academy, the war hit a terrifying peak for Kirigakure--the destruction of the village. People scattered. Most died. Nori and his family were of the lucky ones; they managed to get out before the devastation, finding themselves heading north across the water to the Land of Lightning, and the new Kumo Province. For a long time, neither of them knew where his mother was. His father took up the task of farming, struggling to get by in the lackluster area. Nori didn't know what to do. He had been following in his mother's footsteps, but how could he join a military that let their home be destroyed and separated him from his "hero?"
His decision would be solidified several years later, after the Hamajō Confederation had settled in. After the destruction of Kirigakure, his mother had been lost. She didn't know what had happened to her family. She thought them likely dead, herself being another lucky one, sent over to the Land of Fire on her most recent task. The loss of home, the loss of family...she ended up with some of the scattered armies, and eventually decided that she would fight against the power that couldn't protect her anymore; she joined the would-be Red Sages, and eventually got herself killed for it. Family connections were made. The Confederation came to his father's farm, looking for intel on the Red Sages. Neither of them knew anything about what had happened after Kirigakure, and after some extremely stern interrogation, decided that refugees fled to Kumo wouldn't know what happened to a traitor last seen near Konoha.
"Traitor." That was the term that had solidified his decision. There had to be a reason; she had been a hunter-nin. Her duty: to track down rogue shinobi, the traitors. She had to know the consequences of becoming the hunted, so the reason for her supposed defection had to have some meaning behind it. He thought it over, and decided to continue her fight. His father never questioned it; he was a grown man now, and his decision was his own. He would join the Red Sages, and fight the real traitors. I actually really like this history. Good work.
【Family ties】
Nori grew up in a single-father middle-class household, with his mother visiting only once every several months during her time of service after she got herself off of maternity leave. He has no siblings. After the destruction of Kirigakure, he lived in near-poverty with his single father, and never saw his mother again.
Naozumi Hisakawa | Father | 50, Kumogakure, farmer. Suffers depression from the loss of his wife. Under surveillance following disappearance of chunin son. Former spouse classified as traitor.
Koyori Hisakawa | Mother | 44, Deceased. Hunter-nin. Classified as traitor for assisting criminals against the Hamajō Confederation.
【Dreams and fears】
Nori's dreams are to . Whether that means he will be a shinobi of the Hamajō Confederation or the Red Sages is yet to be determined. Looks like you deleted a few things here. Should probably clean this up, but I don't care much about this section because history and personality already exist.
Combat reports.
Gathered from evaluation reports after missions.【Fighting style】
Nori focuses around genjutsu-based combat, looking to manipulate his opponents into a corner with various Water-style ninjutsu and weaponry--most notably being a naginata--before locking them down with genjutsu and going in to finish the job.
【N/A】
Bloodline limit name: N/A
Description: User possesses no known kekkei genkai.
You can just delete this section to cut down on size and make it look nicer.
【Ninja techniques】
A rank techniques:
ayyyy lmao
B rank techniques:
Water Release: Water Formation Wall
C rank techniques:
Water Prison Technique
Water Clone Technique
Water Release: Water Bullet Technique
Water Release: Water Bowl
D-E rank techniques:
Body Replacement Technique
Unsealing Technique
Hiding in Mist Technique
【Custom made techniques】
Aquatic Bone Suffering
Rank: B
Range: Dependent
Description: This jutsu causes all water created from a previous Water Release ninjutsu to have an extreme numbing effect to any skin in contact with it, extremely hindering the sense of touch, and in turn, making it more difficult to control the dampened areas. While the effect is immediate and intense though, it's reliant on how wet the opponent is; if they've been successfully dodging techniques, or happen to be in heavy armor, they likely won't be affected significantly. Likewise, managing to sufficiently dry themselves will remove the effect, and as with all genjutsu, if they are aware it's the illusion of loss of sensation, then they can mentally force themselves to overcome it if possible. The strength of the technique is its subtlety and range, the weakness being its ease of avoidance.
Jutsu name: Water Release: Seashell Current Discord
Rank: B
Range: Mid to long-range
Description:
An audio genjutsu, in which the user releases a quick jet of water from their mouth onto anything nearby. Those hearing any noise the jet of water creates, such as its impact, will begin hearing only the noise they heard the genjutsu create, be it a splash on another body of water, against a tree, etc., essentially cutting off their ability to hear. In combination with the Hiding in Mist Technique, it can be crippling to have one of your other means of locating your opponent crippled. The strength of the genjutsu lies in it's simplicity of execution and subtlety. The weaknesses lie in the lack of physical hindrance; the opponent is not incapacitated in any other way, and it can be avoided by not hearing the initial noise, and the technique can be overcome with sufficient time/chakra control.
Jutsu name: Kingdom of the Eastern Seas
Rank: A
Range: Short
Description: The user clasps their hand at an opponent's throat or forehead while casting the genjutsu, after which, the victim will be under the illusion of being dragged to the bottom of the ocean floor; painful, crushing water pressure, asphyxiation, no light, and no sound. These effects persist until the caster of the genjutsu releases their hand from the opponent, or loses the ability to channel the chakra. The weakness of the technique lies in its extremely close range, especially so with the need to grasp something as usually well-protected as a head or neck. The strength lies in the fast effects and sheer intensity of the genjutsu, crippling all senses at once, incapacitating most in short order. Nevermind, you did have an A rank. Oh well. Nothing wrong with it though.
【Weaponry, tools and objects.】
Weapon, tool or object name: Customized Naginata
Description: A 5 foot long bright grey naginata, with the bottom half able to collapse into the top to make it a more efficient weapon at extremely close range, as well as the tsuba consisting of a hardened rubber disk, to insulate electricity coming through the blade, knowing that his exclusive use of water techniques makes him quite vulnerable to an electric discharge. The coloration is exclusively for blending in with the Hiding in Mist Technique, to make the weapon harder to see.
@Raijinslayer the Mk2 chakra powergloves that I said were too much in my first review.
You mean he can twirl his sword a bit until water comes out of it?