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Character Theme: My inspiration for Chen was a Jet Pilot, so I incorporated a lot of stuff about jets and flight. His father was a jet pilot, his weapons are named after the effect on air behind a fast jet, and his last name is an allusion to the color "Jet Black". Lots of jet imagery.


Yes you can join. There are some issues regarding the need of a team though but that could be dealt with later. For now, I must say I like your character. The only issue I see in your CS so far is your character theme. People seem to misconstrue this frequently. When I say theme, I'm talking about how Yang is from Goldilocks and the three bears or how Pyrrha is from Achilles, Ren from Mulan, Blake from Beauty and the beast, etc. It just needs to come from something more firm in that regard than just a general concept being used as a theme.
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Yes you can join. There are some issues regarding the need of a team though but that could be dealt with later. For now, I must say I like your character. The only issue I see in your CS so far is your character theme. People seem to misconstrue this frequently. When I say theme, I'm talking about how Yang is from Goldilocks and the three bears or how Pyrrha is from Achilles, Ren from Mulan, Blake from Beauty and the beast, etc. It just needs to come from something more firm in that regard than just a general concept being used as a theme.


Ok, I can change up his theme.
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@floodtalon Thanks :) Let me know when you're finished. Do you have a skype? We don't talk in the OOC much because we discuss stuff in a skype group.
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@ReaptheMusic I just finished editing, and I'll PM you my Skype.
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@ReaptheMusic I'd like to join. here is my sheet, please let me know if I need to make any edits or changes!
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@Apollosarcher As this occurs after the great war, and it is the point of the roleplay, please rename your character based on a color. Also your photo appears to not be working.
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@ReaptheMusic Changes made, I think I fixed the picture. It's appearing on my screen, if it's still not working I'll go find another picture.
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@Apollosarcher I'm not able to see his picture, still. I can see the blade, though.
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@Chickn I swapped out the picture any better now?
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@Apollosarcher I can see it now, yes.
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I like him alot and look forward to having him in the rp. That being said, I don't quite think I grasp the concept of his semblance. And Dust doesn't work quite so precisely like making 'cages' and whatnot. It's much more erratic, loose, like a typical final fantasy spell, going canonically to the show.
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@ReaptheMusic It's along the lines of the killer quartet that Flynt Coal does, just rather than all them copying the first they can fight separately.

As for the dust I guess that's fair I just assumed he would be able place dust in thread then when dust his set off it would form whatever shape the threads were in.
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Just a quick note, I'll be genderbending Rowan. It seems like male characters are more popular, so I'll be switching over to help balance it out. I'll have the updated CS done in a little bit.
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@Apollosarcher Hm. If you wouldn't mind to put some sort of other creative spin on the 7 splits, I think you have a lot of potential for something really neat. Otherwise, that just may be a little overpowered. As for the dust in the thread, I see where you're going with it, but that also seems REALLY powerful and would take a lot of time to learn how to do something so intricate. So while I like the idea, do keep in mind that these are still students and that his precision with it would probably come with age. If you had a less-than-reliable way of using it, I'd be okay with that (In the sense that it doesn't work exactly the way it's meant to every time). I appreciate all the thought you put into the intricacies.
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@ReaptheMusic Well the problem is all seven share one mind, so they can't actually fight and block and combat as individuals. Thus he use's them as a sort of fast attack combo, however if one is destroyed, well then his aura is quite weakened. Sort of like how Blake can escape her target, his lets him strike multiple times in one blow, however seven targets is and all of them being lead by one brain would end poorly.

As for the thread he would require loads of practice to make some of the more impressive stuff, or a lot of time. It's why his semblance is so different from his weapon, one to strike and the other to defend. Both have strong points however with they both do have a weakness, I can rework the seven in one if it is still overpowered. Changing the it would probably just do something like give him seven times the strength or something like that.
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@Apollosarcher I think the problem is that unless you severely nerf their capabilities, 7 is just too many. If you look at the clone-based Semblances, they are all significantly simpler than yours. According to what we've seen, Sun is only able to "conjure" two clones, and even then, he has to be standing still to do it. Blake's clones have no ability to strike back. Unless infused with Dust, they are solely used as a distraction. I get that it is thematically appropriate, and it connects to his backstory, but it still is just overpowered. If you are adamant about having 7 clones, then I would suggest perhaps making it so that each one takes a seventh of his whole Aura to be conjured, and when hit, they completely drain him of that seventh. I know you said that it works similar to that, but giving raw numbers actually helps visualize the significance of the Aura drain.

The Dust on the other hand, I'm not too sure about. I do agree with Reap that it would take a lot of time and effort to perfect that craft, and unless he was truly dedicated to the craft, he probably didn't spend a lot of time tinkering with the intricacies of Dust. Keep in mind that Dust is (presumably) a limited resource, and probably not a poor boy's top priority when going shopping. That being said, it is perfectly acceptable for him to know how to imbue thread with Dust. However, the way you have him right now, he is quite a bit overpowered. Being able to just immediately block off an enemy would make for too easy of a fight. If you still want to incorporate Dust-infused thread, then maybe have him carry around a spool or two of thread, which he can throw like a yo-yo to wrap around enemies or something. The thin material would probably translate to relatively weak structures, which, when using earth Dust for example, would mean a smaller rock structure that wouldn't be too hard to break out of. The spool idea also addresses the fact that Bran is able to precisely target any area.

I realize I may come across as trying to take over your character, and I don't mean to do that at all. Just trying to give suggestions on how to balance him out. I think that he'd be a great addition to the RP, so I'm just trying to help out.

Also tl;dr (because that was way longer than I originally intended): Clones still OP, see examples from the show. Dust kinda OP, maybe use spools of thread.
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@Chickn@Apollosarcher Actually, what chick says here is right on the money of the issue at hand.
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@Chickn @ReaptheMusic I've changed both around a little, should be less over powered if the clones are still just to much I'll have to find something else from the fairy tale to use as a semblance.
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@Apollosarcher You are approved. Place Bran in the character Tab and add me on skype so that you may be put into the group chat. username is reapinglady.
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This is still open for applications, yes?
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