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@bluetommy2 remember that you're ability is manipulation of your bone structure not all out shapeshifting. I'd also like it if you can't change the shape of your skull (As that wouldn't be the best thing for your brain to go through). So long as you were in the military you would know how to use firearms, even in the engineering corps you would still be required to keep up to date on how to use a weapon. Perhaps a little more detail on the group that breaks him out and the mission that traumatizes him?

Also on that note you wouldn't "Retire from active service" to join the Engineering Corps. You'd request a transfer and the additional training that goes with it.


Made some alterations, I'd prefer to allow the event from his past to be revealed in IC, manipulation of the cheekbones and chin cause huge differences in appearance, and those wouldn't affect the brain.
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@bluetommy2 will take a second look in the morning.
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@vietmyke is officially co-gmified.

Which reminds me, while you are busy working on Military stuff for me can you add a sample post to your sheet?
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@Sep I finished my character, look him over at your leisure, I'll make any needed changes.
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whelp i'm tired

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@Heat So I have a question. Can your charcater teleport to ANY place, or does he need to know the place, or to have seen an image/model of it before, so he can do the. Apart from the wall thickness, and headache, does he have any other limits to his teleport?

@Sagittarius What do you mean by nigh undetectable? Is he going so fast he only leave afterimages? Or fast AND silent?
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@6slyboy6 He needs to have been there before or have at least seen it before. As I said his powers are only on the most basic level, if he overuses his powers to an extreme amount then it could kill him.
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@Heat I am working on my review, but cooking at this very second.

An interesting difference between the teleportations (for a later stage) could possibly be that he retains his speed when he teleports? So teleporting out of vehicles could be problematic (this is not connected to my review, just an interesting tidbit I thought off).
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@Heat no issues. I approve.

@6slyboy6 Those fucking hiders man, please don't use them. Power looks fine, but I'll wait till that W.I.P bit is no longer W.I.P.

@Jake@Not Kano You two alright?

@bluetommy2 so to clarify, he leaves military service to become an Engineer? Not a Military engineer? If so where does he work if he got promoted a couple of times. If you're going with unskilled with a gun you may also be able to tie that into his PTSD. Could you also put your PTSD in your flaws section just to round it out a bit nicer? Ta.

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@Sep XD Okay mate. The WIP is only till the whole company stuff gets sorted out, but I am yet to write it. Maybe in the following hour.
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@Sep Thanks for the suggestions, all edited in.
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@bluetommy2 @Vietmyke is taking a look now.
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@6slyboy6

Sorry, I should have clarified. Unless a person is concentrating hard to see him, he's not going to be noticed by eyes alone.
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By the way, anyone on a W.I.P sheet waiting for comments... the reason I won't is because I prefer seeing the whole sheet before I declare judgement.
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@bluetommy2 your character has the ability to very slightly shift his height and change his face, how slightly is "very slightly"? One inch? two inches? 5? Also, 7'3" is very tall for asian descent, even 200 years in the future. Your background has very little detail to it, so its hard for me to find out if the height is a genetic thing, a freak accident think, a strange stroke of luck.

Incidentally, I wouldn't call being uni-lingual a flaw. I assume every character in this RP will know english/common form of communication. I'd consider knowledge of extra languages an advantage, but lack of extra languages is by no means a flaw.

Power balance is fine, sample post looks good.

Just my two cents on the character.
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By the way, anyone on a W.I.P sheet waiting for comments... the reason I won't is because I prefer seeing the whole sheet before I declare judgement.


I on the other hand, will be pointing things out as I see them.
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<Snipped quote by Sep>

I on the other hand, will be pointing things out as I see them.


and double posting apparently :'(




If anyone really wants a sample post, I can do it. Though currently I've been busy planning other stuff for this RP.
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@vietmyke Very slightly would be an inch or so. The height is just luck. Why does him being of Asian descent make him any less likely of being tall? Many of the tallest men in history are of Asian descent, like Vikas Uppal, or Zhang Juncai
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@bluetommy2 Mkay, I mainly wanted the clarification in slightly. The thing about him being 7 feet tall is mere curiosity, because it is quite uncommon for the average person. Meh, makes my job easier- a 7 foot tall superhuman is a lot easier to spot than a not-7-feet-tall superhuman.
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