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I've already mentioned the brotherhood so should I get in talks with y'all to?

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Yeah. We could take it to the Titanpad, brainstorm ideas for both the X-Men and the Brotherhood there.

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@Burning Kitty What books are you reading?

Different resources for writing dialogue; 1. 2. 3.

Literally every book sitting on my bookshelf gives a new speaker a new line.

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Ok guys, I'm heading off to sleep. I'd very much appreciate if that after Leos and Easy have posted their collab, ya'll wait on me to post my own reply first before offering up any of your own. It should be long after their post is up.

Cheers in advance.

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@Leos Klien Could you send a copy of what you have so far to me please?

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@Rithy I heard it's the first RPG post ever in the runnings to win a Pulitzer. THATS how good it is.

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@Burning Kitty Small piece of constructive critcism pal. Whenver a new character gets a line of dialogue, they should be given a new line. So this;

The SHIELD doctor convinced Quake to let him run some tests on the prisoner in his lab. She agreed as long as he was kept pumped full of rage suppressants or whatever the doctor used earlier.

Maximilian and the doctor went to the lab. "So Doc got a name or shall I keep calling you Doc like the cartoon squirrel?" "Terrance." He hooked a machine up to Maximilian. "That will keep you like you are, doubt we need it, you don't seem to like to transform." The doctor pulled out a laptop and gave it to Maximilian. "As we agreed you get to look up any non-classified information about our world. "Seriously you still use this? I didn't realize how backwards this universe is." The doctor look confused. "Our minds directly interacted with the computers we had no need for a keyboard. We saw through our eyes, no need for a screen. Assume you use TVs too, just turn on the news." The doctor complied. A news report about the attack from the monster who lived underground. "My goddess. You haven't eradicated them yet? What is wrong with your society? You intentionally leave invaders alive to reinvade? You seriously need new management one that has the balls to do the right thing. Get me down there and I'll elminate them for free. Won't even need to Hulk out." He popped the claws on one hand. "These are the only weapons I need on those primitives. I was on the team on my world that destroyed them." He retracted his claws. "What you say?"

Should look like this;

The SHIELD doctor convinced Quake to let him run some tests on the prisoner in his lab. She agreed as long as he was kept pumped full of rage suppressants or whatever the doctor used earlier.

Maximilian and the doctor went to the lab. "So Doc got a name or shall I keep calling you Doc like the cartoon squirrel?"

"Terrance." He hooked a machine up to Maximilian. "That will keep you like you are, doubt we need it, you don't seem to like to transform." The doctor pulled out a laptop and gave it to Maximilian. "As we agreed you get to look up any non-classified information about our world.

"Seriously you still use this? I didn't realize how backwards this universe is." The doctor look confused. "Our minds directly interacted with the computers we had no need for a keyboard. We saw through our eyes, no need for a screen. Assume you use TVs too, just turn on the news." The doctor complied. A news report about the attack from the monster who lived underground. "My goddess. You haven't eradicated them yet? What is wrong with your society? You intentionally leave invaders alive to reinvade? You seriously need new management one that has the balls to do the right thing. Get me down there and I'll elminate them for free. Won't even need to Hulk out." He popped the claws on one hand. "These are the only weapons I need on those primitives. I was on the team on my world that destroyed them." He retracted his claws. "What you say?"

There's still some other places that you could paragraph-break that second passage to make it flow better and read easier of course, but it's not as integral as giving a new para to each new speaker.

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@SgtEasy If I PM you the post I have now, could you tell me if it directly contradicts anything you guys have written already?

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@SgtEasy @Leos Klien Hows the collab coming guys?

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God Wraith, you had to throw the posting order off. Acting like you own the place.

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@SgtEasy Post looks good to me Easy, rushed or no. Looking forward to seeing more of Tariq.