Arcanaut

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I'm still here, I've just been catching up on the old thread so I have relevance for what's going on but I can go ahead and start working on a post right now.

Oakenheim (Modern Supernatural RP)

@Darcs I prefer Ms. Marvel (Kamala) to Carol Danvers. It's really sad that they have to make these new characters legacy ones, especially when it doesn't make any sense, like the female Thor for instance. There's plenty of room in Norse mythology for there to be a character, build her up as a reoccurring character in Thor's or whatever and then give her a line of her own. I mean for fucks sake she has a 'secret identity' and secret origin because they weren't trying to create a new and interesting character they were trying to get sales from a demographic that hates comics to begin with.

What was I saying? Oh yeah, these days I just read Ms. Marvel and old Blue Beetle (Jaime Reyes) comics.

Oakenheim (Modern Supernatural RP)

@RaijinslayerDon't worry, the movie rights to Fantastic 4 belong to Fox not Disney. Then again considering how the last ones were...@ConstantineStory time!

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Alternatively, did the statement mean "At other times his personal code may cause him to be needlessly reckless such as incapacitating someone in ways not involving the use of his powers, or letting someone live when there's a chance they may come back for revenge"?

By refraining from using his powers in combat he would be recklessly endangering himself, and potentially others, rather than just using his powers to end the battle quickly and decisively.

@SimplyJohn

@SimplyJohn I like the alternative phrasing, no confusion there. It should still be amended though, as that is what I believe @Arcanaut was going for.

@Aeonumbra

Me too, this is what I was trying to convey. I'll go ahead and copy and paste it as it's much clearer in what I was trying to say.

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@Shotgun BearTank Girl is my jam

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@Monochromatic RainbowYou don't understand. That IS their rocket ship.

Oakenheim (Modern Supernatural RP)

@RaijinslayerReally? I was pretty let down by it. In my opinion It was just a clusterfuck of special effects with little going on in way of plot and way too many one-liners not to mention the laughable way in which they forced Hawkeye to be relevant in some way. To me it felt like they cobbled together all the trailers and commercials together into two hours of explosions. But that's just my take on things ¯\_(ツ)_/¯

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Backstory: O4: To be fair, as I stated, in the past four days I slept a maximum of ten hours. Though it is a two way street, as you should think about the reality of what you're writing.

Armor: Armor Reference Pictures should go in the Armor area, so I don't have to scroll up to match it to the description. If it is not an armor reference picture, then put it where is should go, or leave it as is. If appearance and armor use the same reference picture, then it's not that big of a deal for it to just be in appearance. This was intended for specific references to armor, and less on the face, etc.

Abilities:
O2: If he's using brute force then, well, anybody can do that. The way that I perceived it as him being able to manipulate anything without any prior knowledge to how it works. A complicated puzzle lock for instance, you can't just break. Thus where I said it is possible, but only with prior experience of knowledge of the device to manipulate. Brute force is well, a given.

O4(?): Are you referring to the (tip) as in, hey here's a suggestion? Or the part where I asked for clarification? Both are kind of straightforward.

@Aeonumbra

Regarding the background I agree that it was a bit outlandish and have edited it accordingly to be more plausible along with many other things that were in need of clarification. As for the offense 4 regarding abilities it seems like it didn't really need to be said and came off as a bit dickish since you clearly knew it meant "he's good at hitting people." That being said I understand what it's like going through sleep deprivation (was hospitalized for it a couple of times) so no biggie. Get some sleep when you can.

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I'd say a person who has intimate knowledge of a lock or mechanical part should be able to use their telekinetic prowess to manipulate its inner workings. Of course, that requires them to have the skill necessary and the studying required for it. The same as a lock picker would, really.

@SirBeowulf

As someone who picks locks, it's not that difficult, at least the goal isn't. What you're doing is simply lifting the pins to their specific hight so that the lock can be turned. That's what the grooves on your key are there for. A universal part in a lock picking set called a rake, is pushed in and out, bouncing the pins until the torsion wrench (the s shaped thingy that turns the lock once the pins are in place) can twist it successfully to the unlock position. Of course, unless it's locked from both sides this could be sidestepped (pending Aeonnumbera's approval) simply by turning the lock from the other side.

If this is telekinesis dude, why not just accelerate a rock towards the offending lock?

Why pick locks when you can remove the door?

@Monochromatic Rainbow

Because I figure I need something else to add to my arsenal when there are people who can create knives out of nothing and turn into light.
¯\_(ツ)_/¯

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@Arcanaut

• Please add description of eyes (A static image conveys a static idea, whereas perhaps there are moving specks?) You can keep the picture.
  
• Reference pictures, while useful, are not as telling as a written description. (Appearance) You can keep the pictures, within hiders: Though do not use hiders for the written portion, please.
  
• Aligned Faction: "Considered enemy of The Forsaken as well as those against the Forsaken" is.. a tad confusing, is an enemy to all?
  
• Backstory: " It was at this point Roland's abilities revealed themselves sending him across the field ", what abilities? I don't remember reading how, or when, he joined with a spark.
  
• Backstory:I don't understand why there would be no evidence of the bodies, blood, or anything, but they leave your character their because.. why? Convenience, purely.
  
• Backstory: "by crows and burned by the endless sun that Roland met his spark" Oh, there's that spark joining. Did you bother reading the lore I wrote? Actually, there's more lore errors than just the super powers without the spark. The character can't awake without a spark, as it is a manifestation of the spark. Uriel cannot "help" him remove himself from the cross, as the phenomena is gained by the joining, meaning the Spark has no prior knowledge of it, nor can Uriel take over his mind and do it for him, as the Spark can only take over during the awakened state. I suggest you read, or reread the lore, and redraft your backstory.
  
• Backstory: I'm really glad he was found by these doctors dudes who had the equipment necessary to perform microscopic surgery on his intestines, and treat the infections ensuing from wounds like that. Also, Blood loss in this case is still going to be very severe - nearly all the abdominal organs are pretty amply supplied with arterial blood. It's a bit hard to work out precisely, but the combined cross-sectional area of the arteries supplying the liver, kidneys and intestines appears to be about equivalent to that of a femoral artery. Meaning he would bleed to death in a couple a minutes at best, not even factoring in his crucifixion wounds, probable dehydration, and it's popularized that crows would go for the softer tissues first, his open wounds, his disemboweled midsection, and his eyes and tongue. I see absolutely no possible way this character is alive-- In fact he should have died about four times now.
  
• Armor: The armor he posses is accurately portrayed in the picture ... but without telekinetic shielding he is considered without armor. What? Does he or doe he not have armor? (Telekinetic shielding is not armor.) Also, Picture referencing his armor.. should be moved to armor section.
  
• Abilities: Long name is long: "Run so fast he becomes a blur" I agreed upon improved speed, but that's a bit drastic. Tone it down to like, twice as fast of a person sprinting?
  
• Abilities: Gremlin: That is not what tuning is, it does not give him the clairvoyance to see inside the working object and manipulate it. He would have to actually know what he was doing.
  
• Abilities: Rail Gun: This is tuning.
  
• Abilities: Spy Moon Guy: Training as a spy? You mean Soulless? How exactly does one know to acquire important pieces of information... if they do not understand what they are looking at; other than common sense which really isn't a special ability now is it?
  
• Abilities: Elegant Savage: Don't use specific situations as a fact. (This is really just a tip, not really a problem). Everything has a circumstance, that metaphorical room of people he could engage, they could all be immortals, or bears in disguise.
  
• Abilities: Muh Honor: Just need clarification on the last sentence, when he does use his powers to incapacitated, or when he does not? The "not" doesn't seem like it fits.
  
• Abilities: Muh Hands (:P): I will allow him to move small objects without much weight without tuning to them, and his longinus because of the familiarity of the weapon.

@Aeonumbra

Faction:Will clean up for clarity
Backstory

• Offense 1- Misread the bit about the sparks. I thought they only talked to them when they awakened, and that awakening was different from first gaining their abilities
• Offense 2- This was because I thought you'd like them to be nice and spooky but I can easily remove this
• Offense 3- Again misread the section on the awakened part, will edit accordingly
• Offense 4- Here I'm having some confusion, as when I consulted you via PM you said this was perfectly fine. I'll clarify that he was holding his guts in with his powers but I'll change it to someone else saving him. I guess I'll remove the crow?

Armor:This is a fair assessment; the telekinesis shouldn't be considered armor. Bit confused about the need to move it, but you're the boss.

Abilities:

• Offense 1- Was using a bit of fluff to get the point across. Will edit with definitive numbers.
• Offense 2- Would he thought? It's not like he's taking apart a gun by the screws, he's just breaking it. If you believe it's going to be an issue I'll remove it though.
• Offense 3- Scout would have been a better word. I'll rework this one from scratch.
• Offense 4- I'm not sure what your problem is here. Have I offended you in some way?
• Offense 5- Perfectly fine with that.