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At a nexus point where dozens of universes converged, a space station sat amidst an asteroid field in orbit around a red sun. Hundreds of vessels were coming and going, mostly manned by Sentinels and collectively housing thousands of crypods from the various worlds where they had been tracking Traveler Scars. Empty ships were heading back out for their next run while others were depositing their pods at the station.



Any prisoners that fell outside the designated age-group were loaded into vessels bound for a place called Battleworld, while the Traveler Candidates were sorted into groups of twelve cryopods in the station’s hangar bay. Each group was moved onto smaller red spaceships, made from the metallic exterior of the dead Celestial, Arishem. These comprised the Inquisitor’s Fleet, and they soon departed the station and headed towards the Inquisitor’s Citadel in the Elsdamorae System of Universe A-109.



When the fleet passed the red planet Kabbayan, they knew it was time to start thawing out the Candidates in preparation for arrival at the Citadel. They had been sorted into groups of twelve to avoid too many of them being conscious at the same time on the same ship, just in case they might find a way to escape. However, one such ship, the Arishem-Exar, had yet to notice a cloaked vessel in hot pursuit…

“Ugh..” Teddy moaned as he placed a hand on his face. His head was killing him, and he was dizzy and disoriented. He opened and closed his eyes repeatedly, but everything was pitch black. He was laying on some kind of padded mat and he could hear faint voices, but it sounded like he was underwater. There was a chill in the air, and he felt weak and shaky. He tried to sit up and slammed his skull against a glass barrier.

“Ow! What the hell?” he started feeling around, and realized he was in some kind of pod. Then he remembered. The Sentinels!

“Hey, can you hear me?” America called out from her pod, having woken first.

“Yes! What’s going on? I can’t see anything!” he replied.

“A side effect of the cryo process!” she explained. “When you first awaken, it takes a minute for your hearing and sight to fully return. I only just regained my own senses.”

“Picked up by the Sentinels as well?” Teddy inquired.

“Yup,” she confirmed.

“Do you know why they want us?” Loki asked, now conscious as well.

“It’s my fault,” America revealed, then looked around to see everyone else waking up in their pods as well. “I’m sorry you all got caught up in this. These Sentinels are after me. They work for someone who calls himself the Beyonder, a being who was trapped in some prison realm and wanted to use me to escape. That’s because of my power - to open portals between universes. But if he was able to put all this together, I’m not sure why he even needs me at this point. All I know is that he is after me, and I allowed myself to get captured in the hopes of getting closer to him so I could send him back to his prison…”

“But none of us look like you,” Teddy pointed out. “We are all wildly different…”

“Isn’t it obvious?” Loki scoffed. “They don’t actually know what she looks like, only that she has a power the Beyonder wants. He probably at least knows that she’s a teenager, judging by the fact that we are all similar in age.”

“Bingo,” America smirked.

Suddenly, the glass lids of the twelve pods swung open upwards, and they could climb out into what appeared to be a cargo bay on the ship. They felt severely lightheaded and could barely stand on their two feet, a feeling that only strengthened if they tried to call upon their powers.

“We will be arriving at the Inquisitor’s Citadel in approximately fifteen minutes, Traveler Candidates,” came a computerized voice over the intercom. “Please use the washrooms located adjacent to your cryogenic stasis pods to clean yourselves up in preparation for your Soulgaze with the Inquisitor.”

“What the hell is a Soulgaze?” Teddy wondered out loud.

“Probably a method to deduce if one has the powers the Beyonder is seeking, I reckon,” added Loki. He then smirked as he realized Teddy was, like him, clad in only a pair of swim trunks. “They grabbed you on the beach as well, then?”

“Yeah, right in the middle of my birthday party!” he replied, chuckling.

“Don’t worry, I have some extra clothing in my Bag of Holding - you can’t see it, it’s cloaked, but it’s strapped to my waist right now.”

“How… How are you keeping it cloaked with the power dampeners?” Teddy was curious.

“The enchantment is built into the material itself, I merely triggered it with a tiny flick of Mana when they were grabbing me,” Loki explained. “Luckily I had just enough energy to pull that off before being captured.”

“Since we are not actively being attacked, we should probably use the opportunity to clean up and use the restroom, like the voice said,” America offered. “I, for one, don’t want to pass up the chance to pee. Then we can regroup and figure out a way to escape.”

“Yeah, you’re right,” Teddy agreed. As they all walked towards the washrooms, they noticed there were twelve of them lined along the wall directly across the cargo bay from where their pods were lined up.

“Oh, how nice of them to give us private facilities after kidnapping us. What lovely twats.”

Once they had a chance to clean up and take care of any needs in the washrooms, they grouped together in front of their pods to discuss methods of escape.

“Your fashion sense is… Well, it’s not really me,” Teddy said as he looked down over the extravagant shirt and pants Loki had given him. “But it beats the swim trunks, so thanks… What was your name?”

“Loki Laufeyson,” he replied. America raised her eyebrows. “What?”

“You’re the first Teen Loki I’ve encountered,” she smirked. “Most of your variants are much older and have a different face. In one universe a Loki became a film actor under the name Tom Hiddleston.”

“Wait, so by ‘portals between universes,’ you meant legitimate parallel timelines?” Teddy asked in shock.

“Yeah, does your world not know about the Multiverse yet?” America shrugged. “There are literally thousands of universes that exist at different vibrational frequencies. Some are nearly identical, while others vary drastically.”

“Wow, this is crazy…” he replied, then shook his head and looked up. “Sorry, we were giving our names, right? I’m Teddy Altman.”

“America Chavez,” she added, then looked at the others, prompting them to give their names as well.
@CaptainManbeard I don't think any of us would complain if you just posted the update and added images after the fact.


I don't actually have the entire post written yet, lol. Some parts of it I wait until I decide upon the images and then use those to help fuel my descriptions XD. Though a few parts I am going to forego images and just write them out how I see them in my head.
Gah finding the right images to embed in posts can be so time consuming, lol. I may just move forward with less images than I was originally planning. Anyway, next post should be along within the next few hours.
@Dead Cruiser

Much better! Great job!

posted for iron lad and jasper—i think that's all the characters accounted for!


Baha I snickered at Jasper XD. And yep! All 12 characters are now introduced. Assuming no one has any last minute surprise characters they want to add, I'll write the next post after work tomorrow. At the beginning of the post, the story will show a nexus point where the Sentinel ships are depositing their thousands of cryopods into a space station sorting facility. Those not marked as Traveler Candidates are loaded into vessels bound for Battleworld, while the Candidates' pods are lined up in groups of 12 and loaded into smaller ships for transport to the Inquisitor's Citadel. The Arishem-Exar is among a larger fleet of these vessels, and then the Inquisitor teleports from ship to ship to Soulgaze each group of 12. Once they are dismissed as Candidates, a group is then sent to Battleworld as well.

EDIT for clarity: Our particular group doesn't make it to the Soulgaze due to Doctor Strange rescuing them.
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Sorry about the mix up. As for the Wolverine scene, I completely wasn't remembering properly when I said the ship appeared in atmosphere. If you wish I can edit it, but that will be up to you. As for the Darkhawk scene, I did have a sentence stating that the only thing interesting that had happened on Excalibur was an unknown powered individual teleporting onto the station before teleporting away. While I didn't specifically say that this was America, that is what I intended to happen. So let me know if you want me to do any edits.


Ah, okay, since you mentioned teleporting instead of a portal, I didn't think you meant America. I just figured maybe it was Nightcrawler reference or something, lol. That makes more sense now XD. No, no edits are necessary. Great posts everyone! Although there were some aspects of a couple of the posts that I took issue with, overall, it seems we have a strong writing team! Everyone seems rather adept at creating a scene that is fun to read. Great job, everyone!
Got up a first post as both Jimmy and Peter. Hopefully they are fine.


I have two minor issues, but not enough to require an edit or anything. The first is that you had the ship enter the atmosphere in Wolverine's intro, though normally these Sentinels keep their ships in orbit and teleport down to the surface. However, I'm willing to overlook that and not require an edit since it is a small, trivial thing. My second issue is the Sentinels boarding the Excalibur, meaning a Traveler Scar is on a space station that has apparently only existed for a few months. If America had suddenly opened a star portal onto the Excalibur, chances are such an event would have triggered a massive security alert by the station's personnel and put everyone on edge. You mentioned there had been no incursions since the station was built, so it seems unlikely that any star portals opened on the facility once it was operational. However, I am willing to overlook this, and we can just assume that some part of the station was constructed using repurposed materials, perhaps a large piece of scrap metal that at one time was sitting in a junk yard somewhere and had a Traveler Scar embedded into it while America was passing through.
working on my intro post for jasper now, but before i go any further with it i just wanted to check: have we reached the cut-off point for characters yet? if not, i was considering bringing in an interpretation of iron lad as my second character.


That's fine, the cut-off will be once all the characters are thawed out and being prepared to meet the Inquisitor. Up until I write that second post moving us to that point, we're still open to new characters and new writers as well XD.
@Dead Cruiser Perhaps I should have detailed the Sentinels out more, but I assumed this line from my intro post would convey the message that these robots were extremely powerful:

“Bloody hell!” he cried out as he, same as everyone else who faced the Sentinels, got his ass thoroughly handed to him.


I had assumed that would adequately convey the message that everyone should struggle to fight off the robots, but perhaps I should have included more context. Moving forward, I will put more effort into detailing out specifics in that regard, and if you're ever unsure about anything, feel free to shoot me a DM to discuss it. XD
@Dead Cruiser Your post was awesome up until the lime-green portals, then everything kind of went to hell, lol. I'm going to have to ask you to edit it on two points: One, the Sentinels would have arrived in orbit on their ship first, and then would teleport down to the Traveler Scar. So, it would be more akin to "beaming down" from Star Trek rather than using the lime-green portals you mentioned.

And two, you need to drastically tone down Terra's power. It makes the rest of the characters essentially useless if you're just going to one-shot everything, lol. Regardless of how strong she is in the comics, in the Multiverse of this RP, there is no way she would "tear through them like paper" when fighting the Sentinels. All the other characters were clearly struggling against them, and then you have Terra come in and just wipe a bunch of them out effortlessly. If she can so easily defeat Sentinels empowered by and working for a cosmic being such as the Beyonder, then there is no sense of danger as you will likely just have her one-shot everything we go up against, lol. That takes the fun out of the RP.

Think of the power dampeners within the Sentinels as Kryptonite to powered individuals. As soon as Terra gets close to them, she should instantly feel herself start to weaken. I understand the desire to keep her comics-accurate, but the goal should be to create a good synergy between all the characters, not elevate yourself to ridiculous power levels above everyone else in the group XD.
Do I need to break the ice with Terra? lol

Since none of us will be interacting for this first post I imagine the next one will be us arriving at wherever the ships are taking us?


Yeah, once everyone has their opening post done, I will be moving the story to the Arishem-Exar in my next post. Each intro post should end with the characters placed in cryogenic stasis, and then in the subsequent posts, we are all being thawed out in preparation for the Inquisitor's arrival. So, our characters won't actually meet each other until that second post.
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