Cleopatra

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I... Dont see that.

@Vocab

Well your ability sets theme is pretty blatantly anti magical girl. It isn't the individual abilities, rather the whole theme.

Obviously she is meant to be anti magical girl, but I think there's a better way to go about that.

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Kars in magical girl getup

@The book of bad juju

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@Cleopatra How were my abilities looking?

@Vocab

Hmm I still think I have an issue with them being blatantly anti magical girl. It feels kind of weird for you to be given powers specifically meant to kill magical girls. However I would think it is possible to be given abilities that could be very anti magical girl simply by their nature, and with that you could choose to use them against other magical girls. If you want help I may have something you can use.

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The Witch sheet is up.

Also, I'm really glad that a lot of people are trying to help others when they need it regarding their sheet. Thanks, guys.

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2) This was one of my earlier suggestions, but Cleopatra has clearly stated that no body-changing magic was going to be accepted.

@Ariamis

There's a difference between making your arm stronger and turning it into a puppy. My main problem is with the later feeling real weird when compared to madoka's magical girls or madoka's themes.

4) This could work; she could use her magic to destroy anything she would hit with her hammer and rebuild to another form by also hitting it. But I'm pretty sure it's too broken of an ability to be used, similar to Homura's timestop.

@Ariamis

You're around Homura's level, so I don't mind weirder abilities. But pls no technobabble.

Barrier magic would actually be fitting in that context, and it could also be applied in a diverse manner. How would it sound if Julia used spherical barriers to both defend and to launch as magical projectiles with her hammer like a golf club, Cleopatra?

@Ariamis

Sure

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Just out of sheer curiosity, what sort of power would you give her if she was your character?

Answer in a PM if you don't want anyone else to know.

@The book of bad juju

Hmmm well, I think perhaps something to do with the idea of change rather than changing her body itself. Maybe instead of turning her body into animals, maybe creating and communicating with them. That'd be a bit more Madoka like, though it may be very close to a Witch making familiars. Could be very interesting if executed well.

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I re-did the soul binding thing, so it makes more sense. Is there anything else I should change, as in regarding her finisher?

Lemme look it over

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That's true, but one could assume that type of power wouldn't be beyond an MG's limits since she used them in her magical girl incarnation.
But oh well, if you're not gonna allow it then there's no point in me defending it. How about my other ideas? Are they also unacceptable?

@Ariamis

I don't think you understand fully. Nagisa was a witch and a magical girl at the same time. She appeared as a witch in the first place to fool the incubators. It wasn't her ability as a magical girl, but rather something she could do since she was there on behalf of magical girl jesus. Sakaya was the same, and uses her witch form like a stand.

You can go for gravity and telekinesis sure, but they don't seem to fit your character. Perhaps there's a better option for you that involves less editing.

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Nagisa uses shape-shifting magic

@Ariamis

she was a witch

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I didn't deal with despair because there was no bio at the time, I can do that now though.

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Fight fight fight

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Regarding knowledge about magical girls; at a basis, there'd be passing knowledge in the form of rumors and such. Just word getting around, but nothing detailed or specific. Anything more than that is the responsibility of you guys to come up with. However, should you make up relationships, do so in the OOC. There's no point in using private messages instead.

Is everyone almost done their edits? Anyone need help?

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Also, please explain how her paint themes don't work for a magical girl? Do they contrast with her wish or are each of them individually too varied from a core theme? Are they too destructively focused? I'm lost.

@Antarctic Termite

It contrasts her wish a lot. It seems something that has to do more with her subconscious rather than her wish necessarily, which makes it seem like something she'd have as a Witch rather than a magical girl. I can get you new stats but I don't think it's necessary.

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The second slot is still open, however.

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@A Cute Angel

Good to go

@GrafRoy Zeppeli

Ink buff seems a bit weird to me, since your characters wish is focused around creation rather than restoration. I think there's a more unique way for you to support others than just a typical "buff" ability. Ink realize feels a bit weird if it's limited to just the elements. You may want to expand on how she got to poland and why, as well.

@PlatinumSkink

Throwing knives with a cloth seems pretty weird, but you're good.

@Lolita Complex

Good to go

@Antarctic Termite

I think you should reevaluate your abilities and go with something else. The paint motifs you have throughout your ability set are more fitting for a witch than a magical girl. Theme and coherency in your abilities is critical. Also, I'd suggest revaluating the dynamic between your characters heritage and her world view/how she acts/who she is as a person.

@The book of bad juju

Reorganize her magical ability so there's more distinction between the core ability and secondaries, but it's perfectly fine otherwise. Also, move the charisma bit to her wish.

@Flamelord

Good to go

@Ariamis

Your ability set seems a bit weird for madoka. I'd suggest looking for something else, or completly redoing it in a magical girl way. Also your secondary abilities shouldn't be greater tiers of your core ability, rather, they should be new applications and uses for it.

@kusanagifire

Separate your abilities a bit more so that there's a clearer distinction between core and secondaries. A bit weird for a magical girl but it's acceptable.

@Vocab

The soul rending stuff doesn't mechanically work. There's no soul to hit when you target a magical girls body.