Meanwhile I just want to create a hybrid civilization based on the Franks, Japanese, and Polynesians.
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@13org
If what you’re asking is what can you do to make things easier to read, I suppose I can answer that— but do not take the following assessment as a harsh critique, because it isn’t one.
The biggest thing to remember about writing is to keep things concise, cohesive, and fluid. In the sense of one of the posts you gave as generic examples, I’ll reformat it so you can see what I am sort of talking about. This means be consistent in your tense and get across your idea so it is accessible to read without confusion or contradiction. Ultimately the biggest thing to keep in mind is to know when to break your paragraphs and when to not— for example, a lot of things in the following example run through motions and then the line break is only done once instead of twice which results in a condensing that isn’t necessary when both ideas are two different actions, reflections, or points.
Hope that is helpful.
If what you’re asking is what can you do to make things easier to read, I suppose I can answer that— but do not take the following assessment as a harsh critique, because it isn’t one.
The biggest thing to remember about writing is to keep things concise, cohesive, and fluid. In the sense of one of the posts you gave as generic examples, I’ll reformat it so you can see what I am sort of talking about. This means be consistent in your tense and get across your idea so it is accessible to read without confusion or contradiction. Ultimately the biggest thing to keep in mind is to know when to break your paragraphs and when to not— for example, a lot of things in the following example run through motions and then the line break is only done once instead of twice which results in a condensing that isn’t necessary when both ideas are two different actions, reflections, or points.
Hope that is helpful.
@13org
I see nothing wrong with your edits you made— so you’re fine.
I guess the only thing I can tell you right now is to calm down, I make a variety of jokes to ease things not make people have a neurotic meltdown so the best thing to keep in mind is unless I’m writing something serious and letting you know as a GM call you are fine. Still it is good to keep in mind the rules you have agreed to recognize and follow upon applying for a character, and one of those is post content.
I know several people who don’t have English as their original language and I’m fairly accommodating on those who incidently make a typo here and there or don’t format their posts like a clusterfuck. My preferences (don’t write dialogue in the middle of a paragraph, etc.) won’t really be a factor. I might make quips of “hit the enter button more” but they are nothing but quips.
Keep in mind my posts will not be the expectations everyone is beholden to— even in Avalon Academy I didn’t ask everyone to post on par with opening post. Though reading that RP's OOC is a good measure of what makes me happy in terms of content; but again, it is no means a quantifier or post requirement. Remember all I said in Section II of the Rules is this:
The posts you showed me make me want to dust my proofreading hat off (due to blobbing, pet peeves of dialogue formatting, etc) but they seem fine enough. Do not stress yourself. The key is to have fun and be proud of what stories we're telling.
I see nothing wrong with your edits you made— so you’re fine.
I guess the only thing I can tell you right now is to calm down, I make a variety of jokes to ease things not make people have a neurotic meltdown so the best thing to keep in mind is unless I’m writing something serious and letting you know as a GM call you are fine. Still it is good to keep in mind the rules you have agreed to recognize and follow upon applying for a character, and one of those is post content.
I know several people who don’t have English as their original language and I’m fairly accommodating on those who incidently make a typo here and there or don’t format their posts like a clusterfuck. My preferences (don’t write dialogue in the middle of a paragraph, etc.) won’t really be a factor. I might make quips of “hit the enter button more” but they are nothing but quips.
Keep in mind my posts will not be the expectations everyone is beholden to— even in Avalon Academy I didn’t ask everyone to post on par with opening post. Though reading that RP's OOC is a good measure of what makes me happy in terms of content; but again, it is no means a quantifier or post requirement. Remember all I said in Section II of the Rules is this:
The writing level I expect is somewhere around medium expectations (high school-level equivalent). This means comprehensive understanding of basic grammar and spelling is expected, characterization is important, narrative is important, and detail behind those are appreciated. I’d want maybe two paragraphs as a rule, though if it fits a post that there is enough to respond to and react with in one paragraph than that’s fine, but one-liner’s will definitely be off-base. Keep with the fluidity and enjoy yourself; though quality posts don’t have to be textbooks and I severely doubt I will require a “novel”-esque post.
A good guideline is this quotation that I adhere to for my own posts:
“Roleplaying should focus on developing interesting and complex characters that become part of plot-lines which catch the imagination and inspire the writer behind them to exercise creativity. It is mature, humorous, imaginative, tragic, terrifying, passionate, and rife with descriptive language and characters with real personality and relatable cares. Quality posting is far better than needless novels, yet one should never neglect detail when one feels the need. However, while word and paragraph requirements ought to be unnecessary, single paragraphs cannot contain enough detail to suffice.”
With that said, I will not be putting posts under extreme analysis nor will I be inciting a “word count”. So just use your personal judgment and we’ll be awesome.
The posts you showed me make me want to dust my proofreading hat off (due to blobbing, pet peeves of dialogue formatting, etc) but they seem fine enough. Do not stress yourself. The key is to have fun and be proud of what stories we're telling.
C H A R A C T E R C O N C E P T P R O P O S A L
“Denying the truth doesn’t deny the facts.”
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“Denying the truth doesn’t deny the facts.”
V I C T O R I A 'V I C K I' V A L E ♦ 1 0 . 3 1 . 1 9 7 7 ( 40 ) ♦ F E M A L E ♦ N E U T R A L G O O D
Ω C O N C E P T A B S T R A C T:
Originally I had planned on playing Victoria Vale in Gotham City Stories but nothing ever came of the project before the Holiday Season hit. I feel like Absolute Comics could be a good medium to approach her as a dynamic character in her own right. Truthfully, this all chalks up to me wanting to play someone more clever and without any of the gadgets or superpowers— though make no mistake my interpretation of Vicki is not a damsel or without ability to defend herself.
Victoria Vale is a resident of Gotham City who has been more gritty and ruthless with her investigative reporting— while Lois Lane is out there winning Pulitzer’s Vicki herself is in Gotham trying to make sense of everything while she juggles all forms of investigation. She wants to know the story behind the man she has coined “The Caped Crusader” after he dismantled Carmine Falcone seemingly overnight, she wants to make sure Gotham is represented by the uncorrupt, and wants to relentlessly get involved. Using her connections in the GCPD, City Council, and even the Red Hood Gang she wants to make it her life to save Gotham. In many ways she and Batman are parallels of one another, an irony that is not lost on her.
Conceptually there are variety of stories I could utilize with the red-haired reporter and given I’ve never written noir from this angle before it could be fun. I think I could have her first story be a reflection of her career— when she first encountered Batman, when she interviewed Carmine Falcone, her cooperation with the GCPD, her stance as an ally to Batman, and so forth. It’d be a detective pulp sort of retrospective.
Victoria Vale is a resident of Gotham City who has been more gritty and ruthless with her investigative reporting— while Lois Lane is out there winning Pulitzer’s Vicki herself is in Gotham trying to make sense of everything while she juggles all forms of investigation. She wants to know the story behind the man she has coined “The Caped Crusader” after he dismantled Carmine Falcone seemingly overnight, she wants to make sure Gotham is represented by the uncorrupt, and wants to relentlessly get involved. Using her connections in the GCPD, City Council, and even the Red Hood Gang she wants to make it her life to save Gotham. In many ways she and Batman are parallels of one another, an irony that is not lost on her.
Conceptually there are variety of stories I could utilize with the red-haired reporter and given I’ve never written noir from this angle before it could be fun. I think I could have her first story be a reflection of her career— when she first encountered Batman, when she interviewed Carmine Falcone, her cooperation with the GCPD, her stance as an ally to Batman, and so forth. It’d be a detective pulp sort of retrospective.
Ω N O T E S:
The prospective story incorporates mentions of Batman and actual appearances of Katherine Webb (interpreted as a GCPD detective in this universe), Carmine Falcone, Harvey Dent, and other characters.
I would also be open to writing the character in guest spots with the Batman player.
I would also be open to writing the character in guest spots with the Batman player.
C H A R A C T E R C O N C E P T P R O P O S A L
“Make the choice, Zorak. Leave Meridian. Find an uninhabited world to feed upon in peace— or suffer.”
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“Make the choice, Zorak. Leave Meridian. Find an uninhabited world to feed upon in peace— or suffer.”
T H A D D E U S B A C H ♦ 0 9 . 1 7 ( 41 ) ♦ M A L E ♦ C H A O T I C G O O D
Ω C O N C E P T A B S T R A C T:
Similar to my initial design three-to-four years ago in Singular Universe, Space Ghost follows the trend of the interpretation published recently by DC Comics where they “modernized” the noir-meets-pulp character. The man is question is Thaddeus Bach, a former member of an elite strike force and a detective from the futuristic terran utopia that is Eidolon IV.
In his origin story, Thaddeus Bach was betrayed by his comrades when he discovered that the group he had been recruited into wasn’t entirely as altruistic as they claimed and found himself left for dead on an outer rim planet with only a cryptic designation as one of the many “ghost” planets charted in the astrogation records. It is here that Bach discovers the technology that would shape and arm him to become Space Ghost. Thaddeus Bach frames himself as a “ghost” upon realizing that whatever ties to his life before have all been taken from him by his former comrades. His brand of justice twists into vengeance and ruthlessness, and after an internal struggle that results in this he leaves his homeworld and its source system to find greater meaning in the galaxy at large as a vigilante, justicar, and insurgent in his crusade to protect innocents wherever he can and by whatever means necessary. Bach swears that tragedy, suffering, and corruption will be his enemy going forward.
And thus the story begins.
Conceptually my first story with Space Ghost is to follow one of his early years dealing with politics— namely when he is hired to investigate a series of politically gray issues by the galaxy’s central political directorate, The Galactic Tribune.
In his origin story, Thaddeus Bach was betrayed by his comrades when he discovered that the group he had been recruited into wasn’t entirely as altruistic as they claimed and found himself left for dead on an outer rim planet with only a cryptic designation as one of the many “ghost” planets charted in the astrogation records. It is here that Bach discovers the technology that would shape and arm him to become Space Ghost. Thaddeus Bach frames himself as a “ghost” upon realizing that whatever ties to his life before have all been taken from him by his former comrades. His brand of justice twists into vengeance and ruthlessness, and after an internal struggle that results in this he leaves his homeworld and its source system to find greater meaning in the galaxy at large as a vigilante, justicar, and insurgent in his crusade to protect innocents wherever he can and by whatever means necessary. Bach swears that tragedy, suffering, and corruption will be his enemy going forward.
And thus the story begins.
Conceptually my first story with Space Ghost is to follow one of his early years dealing with politics— namely when he is hired to investigate a series of politically gray issues by the galaxy’s central political directorate, The Galactic Tribune.
Ω N O T E S:
The prospective story involves the Nova Corps, the Green Lanterns, the Galactic Tribune, the Tamaranean Empire, The Branx, The Gordanians, and various other marque cosmic/science fiction-related factions and races within the universe. I am open to collaborating with anyone choose they wish to.
I would likely need the go-ahead with the GM to incorporate this during Starfire’s “Year One” as well. But it should fall into the timeline without issue— it would take place in the past when Space Ghost was a little younger than his present form.
I would likely need the go-ahead with the GM to incorporate this during Starfire’s “Year One” as well. But it should fall into the timeline without issue— it would take place in the past when Space Ghost was a little younger than his present form.
So do I transfer them into the CHAR tab now, or?
Of course I'm going to play both now I have my playgrounds clear.
Of course I'm going to play both now I have my playgrounds clear.
There's nothing stopping you from playing both if you wanted to outside of potentially time restraints as dictated by the rules.
I have one question— if I am late in the cycle and there are no competing apps or urgency will I still be penalized?
@PrimalOrigins
Alright— here we go. Outside of reminding me of Seiken no Blacksmith's Luke Ainsworth there are no real initial thoughts or references I can make. Vulcan’s general information answers what I ask for and it leaves only real section to review.
Benchmarks: It seems you want help with another mental one, which will be not fairly difficult given your relatively balanced character. For a variety of recommendations you can further define him with mental benchmarks such as Blacksmithing (in general, since he would have to learn it to get to the point as a magicsmith). You could have more combat-oriented mental skills like Field Repair proficiencies, or you can even go into something like Weapon Focus: Katana.
So it’s dandy. It’s good. It’s accepted.
Just one last thing.
I am wary with katanas for a variety of reasons, but I am not denying them outright as they are sensible and I want weapons to be diverse. Plus you've come with a cool concept. So you get to have fun.
Alright— here we go. Outside of reminding me of Seiken no Blacksmith's Luke Ainsworth there are no real initial thoughts or references I can make. Vulcan’s general information answers what I ask for and it leaves only real section to review.
Benchmarks: It seems you want help with another mental one, which will be not fairly difficult given your relatively balanced character. For a variety of recommendations you can further define him with mental benchmarks such as Blacksmithing (in general, since he would have to learn it to get to the point as a magicsmith). You could have more combat-oriented mental skills like Field Repair proficiencies, or you can even go into something like Weapon Focus: Katana.
So it’s dandy. It’s good. It’s accepted.
Just one last thing.
I am wary with katanas for a variety of reasons, but I am not denying them outright as they are sensible and I want weapons to be diverse. Plus you've come with a cool concept. So you get to have fun.
Here are my two proposals, just so you can read them over. I'll let you know once I do some test posts which one I'll be picking as my first active proposal; but I'd still like you to give input (and others as well) on them.
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Stuff happened, it's dead now. Yeah.
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I'm going to make that char now.
xD
I'm still on discord if you want to turn that comment to story time eventually. I'm a sucker for idle gossip.
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