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@EchoWolff

Cool, wanted to make sure that I wasn't supposed to be progressing that out somehow.
@EchoWolff I'm with Baphomini, especially since I was referenced as one of the two being brought together by the Mask. Am I supposed to be doing something?
@Baphomini

Hit him with the "I signed that contract while dubiously conscious and under duress, therefore it is not a legally binding contract. Get fucked, good day sir."


Edited. Hopefully this is better. Let me know if it still needs work.
@Baphomini

Also everybody's different reactions to the mask is good to me. Like, we all agree that the experience sucked but the viewpoints were basically:

Chihiro: Nightmare character
Kousuke: Scam Artist
Fubuki: Devil
KJ: Horrible Villian
@Kronshi Okay, so after reading this is definitely a solid base but a few questions on this:

1 - Your sheet states that he makes friends with Fire Nation citizens easily. I wanted to touch base to make sure you understood that the Fire Nation citizenship does not like the air benders as a whole right now. Their decision not to take any action in the war has painted them in a nasty light, and the regular citizen knows this. Having individuals friends that are understanding makes sense, but overall public perception of this character as a person in the Fire Nation is very, very poor.

2 - Most of your character's details only mention him in relation to his training and his relationship with the air temple. Who is he, what does he like, what does he do in his free time, and what sort of travels has he gone on that have impacted him in his time as a messenger. The world is in the state of unrest, and has been even before the formal declaration of war, and despite his worldliness, he feels relatively 2D.

3 - Finding the Avatar is a great point in this, but what were his motivations before this? What are his plans once the he reaches his goal? As someone who chafes against the chains of tradition, why is he comfortable accepting what they say instead of changing?

Like I said, it's a solid foundation but it feels a little incomplete and not fully attached to the world. I want to learn more about him as a person, not just his attitude!


1 - I meant it more as an he gets along with them not necessarily that they get along with him. Like, he likes Fire Nation mentality and ideology so he sees them as potential allies very quickly type of thing. However, since the first actual attack was a year ago, he had time before that to befriend a few people I would think. Please correct me if that's wrong.

2 - I will definitely work on adding this, but I would suggest adding more sections for deeper character info than just Personality and Background if you wanted more than that. The CS was simple so I thought to keep things simple.

3 - Read 2.




Another restless night.

Although, that's nothing new for the man known as Hanzai Fubuki. The contents of the dream, however, were what haunted him. A contract signed, a mask, a chill, a deer, Fubuki felt as though he had just made a deal with the devil but he had no idea what he got out of the arrangement. Oh well, none of that matters now as there were more important matters to deal with then trying to parse out the meanings of a dream. Fubuki had to make it to class on time lest he find himself back on the probation he just left behind. As he got out of bed, already dressed due to lack of energy or care to undress, he grabbed his supplies and slipped on his shoes before heading out the door to catch breakfast before his first class of the day.

Fubuki's dorm was the cheapest one on campus, and he could barely afford that. The probationary period meant he wasn't getting paid for his work, and worse, that he couldn't take as many classes which slowed his progression to graduation. This should hopefully be his last year before he tries to save up to get into a real university, so it was important to him to avoid any and all distractions on his way out of the trash heap the campus labeled a living space.

Let's see... First is 3rd semester Coding, although this is technically my fifth semester, then the Python course, Information Storage, 2nd Semester Statistics, and Computer Ethics... Geeze, 5 courses in one day. Maybe I overloaded myself trying to catch up...

Fubuki reached one of the cafeterias and bought a simple toast and natto for breakfast. It was cheap and quick, the two things he needed today. After getting his food, he sat down and let himself contemplate that dream again.
@EchoWolff

Do our characters already have their afterimage form or will we unlock them as part of the story. Or really, what matters is whether it makes sense for me to reference a deer as part of Fubuki's memories of the dream.


Ryschi of The Northern Winds for your perusal.
Claiming the concept now while I work on CS. Airbender who never cared for peaceful ways and as such has not been considered a master despite his proficiency. Wanted to join the Fire Nation to help a year ago but was strong-armed by his fellow monks and only allowed to play messenger for the Water Tribes. Finally said, "Fuck That, I don't care if I get exiled and never earn my tattoos. Someone needs to find this Avatar," after the light beams.
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