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@BladeSS4

A One Piece RP that's neat. I want to be part of this, so here is my character down in the hider.



Interesting character. Though, I'm sorry to say Noodles had already reserved the sniper spot :(
@Fenfeir

I've always been poor with grammar in making cs it's really just a matter of psyche and the dangerous curious isn't a sentence it's a warning label joke


Oh. Mmm Okay. I'll give the green light for now but please make sure you up your game in the grammar department once you starting writing posts for the ic
@Noodles

@malmshodes
So, can I create a Devil Fruit user with bomu bomu no mi? A character that throws exploding javelin/spear with a few strands of hair strung along it~~


Yeah! Go for it!
Hey guys! Sorry but the first IC post is probably going to be late. There's some life stuff to deal with this morning. I'm still fairly certain i'll have it up before work tonight. Just wanted to let everyone know.
@Noodles

Is the sniper position still open? o.o ~


Yep. That's the last one we've got to reserve :)
(I think.)
@FenfeirThat's a bit better, but the main thing is still the ending punctuation. Some of the areas are hard to understand because I don't know where one sentence ends and one begins.

I'll finish this up in the morning and have the opening post up a little after that.


And a bump.
@Fenfeir
Name : Chester Caraway
Alias: The Disturbed Doctor
Age: 20
Appearance: he is tall about 6'2" and has a barrel chest and broad shoulders his physic is in prime condition at all times his diet and musculoskeletal system finely cared for. He has icy blue eyes with a ring of gray around the pupils . His hair is a light grayish brown and pulled back in a messy ponytail. He wears a lab coat and a tan dress shirt with suspenders and brown pants with dress shoes.
Personality:he has multiple personality quirks and suffers from mild schizophrenia and bipolar disorder he has a habit of making people uncomfortable with tales of past successful and unsuccessful surgical stories
Background: he came from a small island ravaged by disease war and famine his father was killed and he was taken in by a triage doctor he studied with the man for the greater part of his life before man was executed the two for a long time searched for new methods and experiments to bypass hunger and thirst or to repair the body he was treated as a dangerous entity.
Weapons: steel darts/ randomized chemical compounds
Abilities: eidetic learning from books. Razor fine eye hand control.
Position: doctor
Negatives: ADD like behavior and forgets to label things . DANGEROUSLY curious


First thing, please try to put some more effort into your punctuation, mainly the ending punctuation, please.

The personality section needs to be at least a full paragraph long. So it needs three more sentences.

The biography is a bit hard to understand because of the punctuation issues. Could you clean it up a little.

What kind fighter is he? How does he use his abilities in a fight?

What about techniques? Our characters are just starting out so they don't have a wide range of abilities under their belts but I'd at least like to see each person with a technique or two.

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For the time being, none of his other instruments are weaponized, but his combat growth will be split between refining his fighting technique and inventing/weaponizing musical instruments.


Sounds good. He's accepted. Go ahead and put him in the character section :)
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