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8 yrs ago
Current [@MangaArtist] Did you skip OOO?
8 yrs ago
Man, MGS3 Ocelot's gun-spinning noise is bizarrely pleasant. Damn near ASMR fodder.
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8 yrs ago
New Akuma actually looks kinda cool moveset-wise. Now I have to hope in my heart of hearts that Makoto or someone more interesting gets in.
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8 yrs ago
[@Shoryu] I'll concede XvSF and Marvel 1, but the 3v3 format is iconic now. That's not to say I disagree that MvC is typically a mess. Shout outs to "ZOOP ZOOP" Zero.
8 yrs ago
[@Mr Allen J] The whole situation with the different Marvel properties is a goddamn mess. New MAHVEL being 2v2's already got me worried about the roster.
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I've thought long and hard over this and I've come to the conclusion I have no idea what you want from me. You use the word "distinct". I find myself unable to make a "distinct" style because I have no reference within the Naruto universe of any bojutsu fighting other than what the Third Hokage does. And I think the Fujioji clan is already different than that because of the size, shape, and usage of the bo staff. If there's nothing to compare it to how can I make it distinct?

You also mentioned "an inkling of [what's in store]". What are you looking for? A list of unique Fujioji techniques? Are you looking for a rough outline (E.G. Fujioji's use their natural chakra type to augment their abilities. Some who use fire add fire attacks while attacking with their bo staves to add more damage.)? Because all the Fujioji clan does is use ninjutsu with their bo staves. Most probably use their bo staves over ninjutsu sometimes. So I'm not really sure what you're looking for in terms of what's to come.

FYI- Totally not upset/angry or anything. Just not getting what you want.


Maybe this is me getting hung up on the fact that Naruto is a shounen anime/manga, but I guess the easiest way to explain what I'm asking for is "Is there anything that makes Fujioji clan bojutsu different from anybody else using bojutsu?"
Now, I'm not going to press the point if there isn't anything particularly special about their particular brand of combat beyond the fact that bojutsu's underutilized among shinobi. But yes, things like potential trees within the technique incorporating nature transformations, or other potentially "anime" usages of a bo staff would apply if that were the direction you intended to go. But again, I'm not going to force it if there isn't anything there.

Hopefully I explained myself a little better. Apologies for any confusion.



  • My only real misgivings are towards the abilities section. In terms of the Fujioji clan bojutsu, it'd be nice if we could get a feel for what exactly would make it a distinct style? Nakazono may not have a grasp of it yet, but surely he has at least been drilled on the principles behind it for the day when he would supposedly begin proper training in the style? As an example, neither Mikoto or Ria have master Murakumo-ryu Ninpo or Mi-enshin Kaiho respectively, but there's an inkling there of what may come about in the future given future training. I'm kind of going to give you a break on the Focus & Skills section off the strength of the fact that he's gimmick at the moment is that he "sucks".
  • I appreciate the indepth list of basic techs, but I'm not sure it's necessary in place of jutsu. That said, I'm not gonna knock it as a shorthand for you to refer back to, since at least it's organized. And it's a basis for the actual jutsu to be based off of, being potentially more intense variations of these movements.
  • Not really a criticism, but I find it funny that Nakazono tries his best to avoid Fukushu while finding Mikoto okay. Granted, Mikki's definitely "nicer" than Fukushu, so that makes sense.





  • Definitely an improvement in making sense.
  • Kinda hard to believe Kazuma just let himself be imprisoned, especially if he didn't commit the murder and just unlocked the Mangekyou Sharingan. And, frankly, I don't think @Gowi's going to be terribly fond of Kazuma unlocking MS, understandable trigger circumstances or not. That said, it still feels pretty tacked on.
  • Not necessarily a criticism, but I'm not sure if Mirajunohana needs to be a separate style on its own. That said, if you do want to go that route, then Shinkiroka is probably a better name, heh.
  • I'll let @Gowi handle any quibbles he might have with the family relations section.





  • So far so good. Honestly, the only part I'm iffy about is the pseudo-telepathy right now. (and maybe the slight spoiler?)


  • I actually kinda like the Ryuuga's whole "Clan of Belligerents" sort of vibe.
  • I guess being sickly is one way to balance out being generally pretty good at things.
  • Another candidate for "Parent of the Year" in Papa Ryuuga, I see. I'd say that I'm kind of weary of the genin crop having shitty/dead parents, but it's not like I'm sorta guilty of it too.
  • Could use some more in the "Relations" category. Surely Tsume at least has opinions on the people she went to the Academy with, even if she might not have interacted with them. Even Fukushu's got that much, and she's got tunnel vision.
  • The whole "Berserker Rage" deal is a little iffy, at least in my opinion. Sure, there's potential drawbacks, but "doubling power" is pretty good. I suppose this is one of things where I can accept it on the basis that it's used relatively sparingly. Or at least if it's not used as the "Get out of Jail Free" card that it could end up being in the hands of someone who hates rules. So, barring any input from @Gowi or @Sloth on the matter, I'm going to trust you with this for now.
  • This new version of Tsume has been dialed back decently, but I'm also not sure if adding the sickness into the mix was necessary. Almost like it goes overboard into the "Sprinter, not a Marathoner" nature of Tsume's fighting style. Something to keep in mind, I suppose.
  • As far as jutsu goes, Tsume's a two-trick pony, but I guess there's nothing wrong with that. While the addition of a "medical jutsu" was an eyebrow raise for a moment, I'm going to give it a pass due to it just being "Please Don't Let Me Die" bootleg Hamon. Ember Clone's fine too, since it's not a full-on Fire Shadow Clone.
  • Minor thing, since it kinda bugs me, but you should probably toss your jutsu under the "Ranking" hiders as well, if only to cut down on blank space. It just looks better.


In the state she's at now, she's acceptable to me, but if anything I've said here makes you wanna shift some stuff around, I wouldn't mind giving her a look again.



  • Ugh, that quote.
  • Uchiha or not, a nickname like "The Silver Comet" is a bit lofty for a genin. Unless she's some kind of chuuni who gave herself her own nickname.
  • As expected, Ria's a weirdo. Fair enough.
  • I'm pretty cross on this whole murder mystery deal, honestly. The best thing I can say is that it would require heavy workshopping if it wasn't just nixed completely.
  • I've also got a bone to pick about the whole adoption thing. Adding a Senju to the currently established Clan tree would probably be pretty easy. But, even with that in mind, why did the Uchiha just let some dude from another clan take Ria and Kanade in? Whether she's her dads former co-worker or not, I'd imagine that the rest of the Uchiha clan can afford to keep her and her sister in their custody. That's almost entirely the purpose of having a clan in the first place. For me to allow this to fly, I'd need a really compelling reason for it to happen in the first place. Because, as it is, it just doesn't make much sense.
  • I'm gonna just come out and say that your description of Mi-enshin Kaiho is pretty confusing. I'm aware that you're trying to emulate Kagura's whole "clubbing people with a sheathed sword" thing, but I don't think notes of "directness" and "decisiveness" are going to help anybody else parse what's going on with it.
  • Honestly on the fence as to whether Engetsuga could use some tweaking (but B-Ranks might be revoked from Genin, anyway), but whatever. Though, I am gonna have to make a note that Shunshin (Body Flicker) is on the banlist now, so you're gonna have to nix it. Mirajunohana feels closer to a B-Rank, if only due to the whole "Afterimage Clone" thing, though. Maybe if it were one afterimage, but even then it feels like a pretty advanced technique.


She could use a little work to get into acceptable level. I don't hate the sheet, but I'm not exactly in love with it either.


@Sergeant I don't speak for @Gowi (though I reckon he probably is of the same mind here), but the comments on the clan size were basically just light ribbing. More or less a comment on the fact that the family tree you've outlined is bigger than most people would be bothered to put to page. That's not a bad thing by any means, though.

This was a rambly way of saying: Lighten up juuuust a smidge.


Alright, quick and dirty review time (frankly, I don't have too many non-nitpicky complaints, and the one legit grievance has already been addressed)

  • There's something hilarious about stating that the Fujioji aren't a huge clan, then having an absolutely massive family relations section.
  • Minor note about Fujioji coming of age stuff: Sure, the whole "test your skill against your parents" thing is all well and good. But, and maybe this is just me, the whole casting out bit strikes me as a bit odd. From my view, it seems as if it's supposed to be some sort of punishment, but then it seems to circle back around into being an alternate way of "advancing, if you will, in the clan. Hell, I'dd almost be inclined to think the whole pseudo Vision Quest deal would be the default rite of passage. All that being said, traditions in ninja clans are weird, so this isn't even all that bad.
  • Another genin with a family who expects way too much out of him. Nakazono's gonna fit right in with all the other balls of parental baggage.
  • Referring to Aunt Sanako in the past tense strikes me as strange, since it would imply to me that she's dead. Again, nitpicking on my part, but I figured it should be pointed out since she's, well, not dead.
  • About the only problem I have with his personal history is the idea that his affected laziness and fear of failure would prevent him from making friends. In fact, one would think that making friends within his peer group would be the best remedy to his particular situation. Aunt Sanako can't be there to offer words of encouragement all the time, right?


Other than that, it's just some grammatical stuff that it'd be nice if you kept mind of when posting IC. If @Sloth or @Gowi want to weigh in on anything extra, that'd be fine and dandy too. You've basically got a Yes from me.
@Player 2 I like her. No real complaints on my end, so you have my blessing. Though, one of the other two might have better insight than me.

@Raijinslayer Tropey backstory death aside, I'm mostly okay with her. Problem is, she's a little above curve power-wise. Maybe it's the combination of greater physical prowess, great chakra control and superlative Katon. 2/3 of those things on a character I can buy, but all three (as a genin, anyway) smacks of painfully outclassing the rest of your graduating class.
The stamina weakness is a good start, but it's also somewhat offset by her noted explosiveness.
Well, folks, I hate to say it but Years of Winter is closed for business. We've had a few players drop at what one might call a "pivotal" point in the RP, and it'll be pretty hard to write around them. Not to mention the blow to player morale that the inactivity has given.

That said, I wish you all luck in your RP endeavors, and I hope to RP with you guys again sometime, whether in another Naruto RP or otherwise.
@Indra If you are still interested, then I want to make a note that, if you're waiting for Crash then don't bother. He's outta here.
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