@Blizz-My point as to why it shouldn't be a flaw is that it's not going to be challenging him when it really matters because his mind will be off the matter.
-Please do fix the grammar
- Jack should be really important if he has such an impact on who Azurite is now and you should definitely flesh him out. Simply having him exist for tragedy is cheap and frankly lazy writing. At the very least if you're not going to detail Jack at least detail how he's impacted Azurite other than just he's sad now because of it. If Jack ultimately boils down to a reason for Azurite to be sad/gloomy/angsty/whatever then you should really think of another reason because befriending someone and losing someone is going to have a much bigger impact on a character than just that and there are many other ways for one to become sad/gloomy/angsty/whatever. Plus now that I think about it a name like Jack doesn't seem like a name someone would have 5000 years ago so maybe look up archaic names?
-By show don't tell I mean this. Compare:
[These aren't my examples by the way]
"Mr. Bobweave was a fat, ungrateful old man."
and
"Mr. Bobweave heaved himself out of the chair. As his feet spread under his apple-like frame and his arthritic knees popped and cracked in objection, he pounded the floor with his cane while cursing that dreadful girl who was late again with his coffee."
In the first example we're just told that he's a fat and ungrateful old man. In the other we're shown that he's fat amd old and ungrateful through descriptions and actions. In Azurite's writing example, you told us that he's peaceful and that he's good friends with Jack and other things but we're not actually shown this.
@ManoftheNorth What's been done so far looks good except for one thing; the fatal flaw and saving grace should be one trait each. You can keep what's written but maybe highlight the one trait that has the most influence?
@urukhai Don't worry I'll get to your CS soon.