Goat God said
Name: Insane Enasni
Gender: Male
Appearance:
Arcana: The Foolish Killer
Power: Creating illusions
Weapons: Tea Cup
Personality: TBR
Theme song: Sexy Back
...Where do I begin?
I'll start off by saying that this is probably partially my fault. I don't usually rush people for this very reason, but I had to this time because of how late you came in and the deadline I made for this.
With that said, however, Based on first impressions, I can tell you came here for to join for the Wonderland aspects of this RP. ...Unfortunately, only the environments and characters are of Wonderland. It's not the same story, and aspects in which it runs is of Persona, not Wonderland, and I can tell you're not exactly familiar with that series. That's alright as it is an underrated series, but all the same...
So you have two choices. ...You can either stay, and let me teach you the aspect of Persona. ...Or you can go. If you choose to stay, then allow me to criticize what exactly is wrong with your CS. If you choose to go, then skip everything below this.
1. The Appearance. I already told you that there's already a Mad Hatter. You can't have another like him, not even looking like him. Everyone on that list on the first page is unavailable, as they're characters use by other people. However, any wonderland characters that AREN'T of this list (Save for the King of Spades.) ARE available for use.
2. The Arcana: The Foolish Killer is not an Arcana, at all. If it is, it's of a different deck then the one we're using. Thank you, Omnial for giving him that list. And remember, Goat, The Fool, The Jester, The Hunger/Lust, and The World/Universe, are ALL forbidden and unavailable. Every other arcana feel free to use.
3. Illusions, But to what extent? How far can it go, how good is the quality, what are the drawbacks. A power like that needs to be detailed, otherwise it's a worry that it could be god-modded.
4. In Need of a Persona. You need a Persona that befits the character, it HAS to be a mythological entity that already exists, and can't be of your own creation. It does also have to fit with the Arcana you choose.
That's about all I have an actual problem with.
Wait, one more thing, There has to be some bit of effort and detail into the profile as a whole. This is the Casual Section, There has to be SOME effort put into this stuff at least. ...Not really something I have a problem with, per se, but something I feel should be addressed since, again, this is a Casual level RP.