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Tbh, I like your character, I think he's quite original. Although his history was fun to read, It simply doesn't work with the timeline of the Rp. If you're not going to change the bio to fit, than I can't accept. I'm sorry ):
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Went ahead and made a bump on the interest check.
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Well I 'fixed' my character for all that it's worth. The backstory is now pitiful and nowhere near as good as it originally was in fact I'd call it sub-par due to me not being able to reveal his backstory without flat out giving it away.
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Well I 'fixed' my character for all that it's worth. The backstory is now pitiful and nowhere near as good as it originally was in fact I'd call it sub-par due to me not being able to reveal his backstory without flat out giving it away.


I'm sorry you feel that way. Your character is accepted, and is being put in the OP.
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He's still him he's just a year younger and a bit less hateful towards everyone else.
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Save me a spot. I might not be here becasue my internet will be out but I'll definably join.
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Np, Say.
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(just thought id try)

Name: Angelo Ortega
Gender: male
birthday: January 13
Appearance: (except darker skin and no wings)
District: Karanese District
Personality: Angelo is a hard worker but he is usually a very nice person to others whenever possible. He can be sort of a clown sometimes trying make up lame jokes on the spot to try and ease peoples tension choosing to use his persuasion to get people to get along instead of fighting with others but it wouldn't be helpful because trouble would always find him and he wouldn't fight, if possible Angelo tries to stay out of conflict all together since he isn't a violent person to people and as a result goes home to his dad with more bruises and black eyes then he could count.
Bio: son a carpenter from wall maria. Angelo didn't grow up with many friends except his pet dog because he wouldt try to hurt him when he tried to help him so he followed him around mainly because Angelo always kept food out for him when he came by his house so Angelo named him shadow because the dog always seemed to sneak around easily Angelo didn't have many friends since he always worked hard with his father and he was an easy target for real bullies while Angelo wouldn't fight Angelo never really forgave them for it but he never showed it. His mother however died when she gave birth to him so because he was always busy building new houses with his father gathering wood and moving blocks of cement it made him stronger then most average people working was all Angelo was good at to be honest since he has no social skills when it comes to making friends and nobody would want to be the friend of a "giant weakling" as the bullies would call him. Angelo was told to be strong by his father so he wouldn't get picked on so much but Angelo just couldn't find the heart to find someone smaller then him he always told him as he did work while kids his age would walk by and laugh at Angelo, although Angelo was a strong person he was also shy and hated to fight simply to prove he was strong but the thing that Angelo always wanted to do was go outside the wall and help build a grand utopia for everyone, Angelo always built houses and small accessories like fountains with his father but Angelo always wanted to start something from scratch and make something amazing, something that would eco through time as his creation and his idea alone. While Angelo would go back and forth between lumber yards and quarries for the wood and stone he would need for a project he would sometimes see the garrison regiment talking about how it was easy to be them and Angelo even saw some scout regiment soldiers coming home bloody and near death from a recent mission outside the wall but Angelo couldn't help but feel they risked a lot for a little gain but Angelo respected their path since they had the courage to do what nobody else would even think of doing they seemed so strong and even respected by people and Angelo wanted to have that so he would never have to fight anyone, Angelo started to think that he should put his strength to use and prove to people he wasn't a weakling and someday make his dream a reality outside the walls and what better way then to be a scout and expand their world beyond the walls and build a place where it could be a thriving city where Angelo would be remembered as the architect for a new city more beautiful then the one they already had and be respected by all. so Angelo went into wall rose and he wanted to join them, Angelo probably guess they would call him a fighter but Angelo was simply a person that wanted respect and had a dream of a new home for everyone where everyone could be at peace.
relationships: Father that was a carpenter, and a dog that always followed Angelo around so Angelo named him shadow
proficiency: intelligent in finding ways to win the battle, can help repair 3d gear on site if necessary with his tools
inefficiencies: a pacifist and hates to fight people, 3d gear he isn't very fast on it and that makes it harder to get around titans
other: wears a gold Angel necklace that his mother had, it is very special to him and friendly or not if someone messes with his necklace he will beat them down...

I <3 3DMG
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Me, too! I'm working on my character right now, but it might take some time as I'm flying back to Canada (from China) tomorrow morning. I'll probably have her ready in 2 or 3 days...
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Alright, Diminuendo, thanks for the heads up.
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(just thought id try)Name: Angelo OrtegaGender: malebirthday: January 13Appearance: (except darker skin and no wings)District: Karanese District Personality: Angelo is a hard worker but he is usually a very nice person to others whenever possible. He can be sort of a clown sometimes trying make up lame jokes on the spot to try and ease peoples tension choosing to use his persuasion to get people to get along instead of fighting with others, if possible Angelo tries to stay out of conflict all together since he isn't a violent person to people.Bio: son a carpenter from wall maria. Angelo didn't grow up with many friends except his pet dog that followed him around mainly because he always kept food out for him and Angelo named him shadow though Angelo didn't have many friends and his mother died when she gave birth to him, because he was always busy building new houses with his father and gather wood they would need which made him stronger then most average people. Angelo was born to be strong his father always told him as he did work that kids his age wouldn't be able to do, although Angelo was a strong person he was also shy and hated to fight unless absolutely necessary but the thing that Angelo always wanted to do was go outside the wall and help build a grand utopia for everyone. Angelo always looked around seeing the garrison regiment being lazy and talking about how it was easy to be them and Angelo even saw some scout regiment soldiers coming home bloody and near death but Angelo couldn't help but feel proud of them because they had the courage to do what nobody else would even think of doing, Angelo started to think that he should put his strength to use and help people someday and what better way then to be a scout and expand their world beyond the walls and build a place where it could be a thriving city. so Angelo went into wall rose and he wanted to join them, Angelo probably guess they would call him a fighter but Angelo was simply a person with a dream of a new tomorrow. relationships: Father that was a carpenter, and a dog that always followed Angelo around so Angelo named him shadowproficiency: intelligent in finding ways to win the battle, can help repair 3d gear on site if necessary with his toolsinefficiencies: short tempered if someone hits the right button with him, 3d gear he isn't very fast on it and that makes it harder to get around titans other: wears a gold Angel necklace that his mother had, it is very special to him and friendly or not if someone messes with his necklace he will beat them down...


Sorry but your character is a bit of a Marry sue, and your bio was quite hard to understand and make anything of it.
You should probably just go through your bio again, and rewrite it so it's easier to follow and read. Also, try to make your character more unique.
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I changed him up a little but someone please tell me who im mary sue him from? cause it cant be armen or erin since they wanted to go beyond the wall for different reason to just explore while my character wants to build something great. besides my character wants to join the scouts so he can get out and make a new city and the garrison regiment aint going anywhere to begin with. wanting to go outside the wall or wondering whats beyond it cant be considered a mary sue. my character is a carpenter and prefers pacifism against people I had another character I tried but the gm said that was a mary sue to
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I changed him up a little but someone please tell me who im mary sue him from? cause it cant be armen or erin since they wanted to go beyond the wall for different reason to just explore while my character wants to build something great. besides my character wants to join the scouts so he can get out and make a new city and the garrison regiment aint going anywhere to begin with. wanting to go outside the wall or wondering whats beyond it cant be considered a mary sue. my character is a carpenter and prefers pacifism against people I had another character I tried but the gm said that was a mary sue to


I don't think a Mary Sue character is what you think it means. Mary Sure, Is a very loose term for a character that doesn't really have flaws, and just seems a little to unoriginal in that sense.

A quick summary of your characters personality: To nice to fight, Hard worker, Funny, Not Violent, Persuasive. All the things to a to-good-to-be-true character

Quick summary of his Bio: Helps his dad be a carpenter, To busy working hard to have friends, Mother died giving birth, Stronger than average cause he's a hard worker, Big dreams and ambitions, Wants to leave the walls to build a better place for everyone.
Your character doesn't really stand out. It's like someone pulled out the main character from a novel.
Your character's inefficiencies are even good: Leaning more to pacifism? How is that an inefficiency

To top it all off you didn't read the rules >:c

I don't intend to be rude or mean or anything, but maybe reading this will help you further develop your character, maybe even rework his CS and have it acceepted.
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I've been looking for an Attack on Titan roleplay that actually gets off the ground, and it sounds like this one will... I have a character I'd really like to use in an Attack on Titan roleplay, but I've barely been able to. I've used him for two different AoT roleplays so far, but none have really worked out all too well. Would you mind if I applied that character on this thread and played him here?
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I've been looking for an Attack on Titan roleplay that actually gets off the ground, and it sounds like this one will... I have a character I'd really like to use in an Attack on Titan roleplay, but I've barely been able to. I've used him for two different AoT roleplays so far, but none have really worked out all too well. Would you mind if I applied that character on this thread and played him here?


Yeah, sure.

Also, You're the second person to say that AoT Roleplays never really go anywhere...It's so encouraging. :DD
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Yeah, sure. Also, You're the second person to say that AoT Roleplays never really go anywhere...It's so encouraging. :DD


Funny thing was that Daemyn was from the AoT roleplay I was apart of. ;D
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Okay, here goes! Like I said, I did apply this character in a couple other AoT roleplays, though if this one starts up I will solely play him here.
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@Daemyn Sterk. Your character looks fine, I'm adding him to the accepted characters~
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We now have five characters ready to Rp. I'll give SayZun and Dimineundo a day or so, if they don't have a character by then I'll throw up an IC post.
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So I got my character done, although it was a little rushed. If I'm missing anything, please tell me and I will fix it as soon as possible!

Name: Alice Meyer
Gender: Female
Birthday: May 23rd

|Appearance|
Half Oriental, Alice has long black hair, which she eventually cuts. Her almond-shaped brown-black eyes are usually hooded and somewhat glazed over, making her look as if she were in a trance. Alice has a slim body, with not much muscle.

|Personality|
Alice is very quiet and rarely socializes with any other people unless on a mission. She is a strong believer of destiny and believes that everyone's destiny is already decided, and that people must accept the path that has been laid out for them. Because of this, Alice always keeps her cool, even in very dangerous situations. However, although this can be a good thing, it also leads to her not taking things seriously no matter how urgent the matter is. Although she doesn't usually dislike them, Alice never understands people with big dreams and who always expresses them vocally. She always follows orders and is loyal to all of her superiors, even when their motives are questionable.

|Biography|
Alice comes from a fairly well-off family from the Chlorba District. As a young child, she always looked up to her older brother, Juko Meyer, who had wanted to join the Scouting Legion. Her mother, Namiko Hatsuba was Oriental, and married James Meyer. The couple had wanted 3 children, but changed their decision when Juko was eaten on a mission. Alice and Juko had always had a very close bond, and the former was shocked when the news of his death was passed on to her. From this incident, she developed her belief of destiny and has not had any friends since then. Alice's only goal in life is to end up in the same place as her elder brother when she dies. However, a few days before Juko's death, Alice had already applied as a recruit and decided to go along with it.

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_Excellent use of 3DMG
_Very quick, both physically and mentally
_Keeps her cool in emergencies

|Ineffiency|
_Lacking in social skills
_Is loyal to any of her superiors
_Somewhat lazy
_Has not much physical strength
_Never takes things seriously- or rather, seriously enough
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So I got my character done, although it was a little rushed. If I'm missing anything, please tell me and I will fix it as soon as possible! Alice Meyer Female May 23rd Half Oriental, Alice has long black hair, which she eventually cuts. Her almond-shaped brown-black eyes are usually hooded and somewhat glazed over, making her look as if she were in a trance. Alice has a slim body, with not much muscle, even after going through the cadet training. Alice is very quiet and rarely socializes with any other people unless on a mission. She is a strong believer of destiny and believes that everyone's destiny is already decided, and that people must accept the path that has been laid out for them. Because of this, Alice always keeps her cool, even in very dangerous situations. However, although this can be a good thing, it also leads to her not taking things seriously no matter how urgent the matter is. Although she doesn't usually dislike them, Alice never understands people with big dreams and who always expresses them vocally. She always follows orders and is loyal to all of her superiors, even when their motives are questionable. Alice comes from a fairly well-off family from the Chlorba District. As a young child, she always looked up to her older brother, Juko Meyer, who had wanted to join the Scouting Legion. Her mother, Namiko Hatsuba was Oriental, and married James Meyer. The couple had wanted 3 children, but changed their decision when Juko was eaten on a mission. Alice and Juko had always had a very close bond, and the former was shocked when the news of his death was passed on to her. From this incident, she developed her belief of destiny and has not had any friends since then. Alice's only goal in life is to end up in the same place as her elder brother when she dies. However, a few days before Juko's death, Alice had already applied as a recruit and decided to go along with it. _Excellent use of 3DMG _Very quick, both physically and mentally _Keeps her cool in emergencies _Lacking in social skills _Is loyal to of her superiors _Somewhat lazy _Has not much physical strength _Never takes things seriously- or rather, seriously enough


I'll just need you to change the appearance part, where it says " Alice has a slim body, with not much muscle, even after going through the cadet training."
This implies that it's already happened, and it hasn't yet.
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