The Old Man's Tale (Spam-Fic)

Azarthes said
You know what elendraYou are the best readerGold staar.

fuck yeah gold staar

OOOOOOO,new chapter.
Nice job squee!

Oh man! Just as it was picking up the chapter ended! :(

So far, I really like how you write and that opening scene was genuinely touching! I think a bit more fleshing out of the world and what exactly the team is about will come, but I felt like I could have used more of an idea of what the world's like and what everyone has in common, perhaps a bit of insight about each character from the protag's POV. It also kind of felt like the chapter cut off at a really odd point, as it went from preparation to the first minutes of deployment and then ended. I think it wouldn't be as jarring if you either wrote to a bit of a cliff hanger or stopped just before they deployed. Overall, really fun so far and I am a fan of this digestable format! I really wantto see where this goes. :)

I was not feeling very well yesterday, so I cut the story off when I got to that point.

As for the rest, noted. I left it open-ended on purpose and also left out some character/world descriptions because I'm saving that stuff. There are a lot of things I want to explain later on, some of those you can probably figure out. :3

Good stuff so far. Shame about it being so short and getting cut off there, but it's bearable.

Absolutely intriguing so far. Moar plz.

Damn that slap!

Good stuff, Squee, hope you feel better so you can write more...and for your sake of course.

Haha, thank you, Idle. I'll try. xD

Awww yeah, I'm the wild-card.

Cpt Toellner said
Awww yeah, I'm the wild-card.

SQUEE NO. How could you man? HOW COULD YOU?

but other than that business (Which is not settled), It was very easy to read and imagine. The only problem that I have is that I've no idea what this story is about which will make it even more interesting to read.

Awson said

That was actually pretty legit.

Thanks.

I just wanted to narrate my own little babby voice and call him gay. It's not perfect because it had to be one giant take, but yeah it's not bad, huh? :D

Awson said
Thanks.I just wanted to narrate my own little babby voice and call him gay. It's not perfect because it had to be one giant take, but yeah it's not bad, huh? :D

'In his small, gay voice" made me LOL.

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