"- All sheets go in the character deposit."

...welp, that's my stupdity for ya. I must have missed that. Whatever revised editions I write will be posted there.

"- Admitting your character is a carbon copy from an existing work is definitely a red flag."

I see. Perhaps one that is heavily based off of the character will do?

"- Could you elaborate on his condition a bit? You say he's freakish, only live for a certain amount of time, and etc, etc, but that's it. Is he deformed, or...?"

Well, society has it's sick fellows. He's underweight, weak in strength, pale in the skin...I assumed that would be a big enough implication that he is not a very healthy man. He's just weaker than other people, and if someone else doesn't kill him, then likely some natural error will occur quickly enough. Other than that, there isn't much that ails him, other than being borderline ugly, which is really only a social issue.

"- Expand on his personality and appearance a bit more. It's rather barebones, and I personally think it's lack."

Fair enough. Any recommendations?

"- I am always iffy about emotion changing powers. Especially when they barely have limits. That said, the ability has no real weaknesses, limitations or drawbacks, and there's literally nothing stopping him from bending everyone to his will."

Then more limitations should be added, of course. Perhaps I could make him much more kind-hearted and/or apathetic, therefore giving him a personal reason not to control others. Again, any suggestions?

"Overall, I think the sheet could use some work, mostly more detail. I'm going have to say no for now."

Again, fair enough. If it's details you desire, it's details you'll get. Like I said, I'll post any revisions in the character deposit.

Capture the flag has officially started. Sorry that I dropped the conversations that were going on, but they were dull anyway. I'll throw some references to them here and there. I'm going to immediately say that you I don't want any "I walk up to flag and take it back to base" kind of posts. Whoever does it will get their sack ripped off.

Anywho, Deborah, Shannon and the Valos are plotting on team 1, while Amanda and Nikki are doing their own thing on their team.... I'll post as everyone else later, once more people post and give me stuff to reply to.

"Lorde - Teams" said Team 1

Red
Atticus
Kristen
Peter
Deborah
Jaska
Gabriela
Alex
Codi
Valjean
Shannon
Daniel
Estell
Aislin
Lynn
Karlie
Jake

Team 2

Mark
Amanda
Victoria
Salia
Poppy
Dana
Tetsuya
Asae
Paige
Chris
Henry
Sylvia
Stephen
Matt
Evan
Theresa
Nikki

Space Communist, it is 3 at night I'll get to you later.

Hello! Are you still accepting characters?

Alright, I've had a long hard think about what the hell Mark's power is going to develop into, and I've come up with flexible muscles.

Again, they will take energy to activate, but they can move as fast as he wants them to without causing damage. How fast he moves them depends on how much energy he puts into them. However, if he were to land a punch at 1000mph, his fist would turn to dust, and there is no way to counter that. However, using this energy doesn't really tire him physically, but mentally. He'll still be fit as a fiddle, but he'll still feel exhausted.

Is that better?

I've posted a character

I'm kind of glad the conversations with my characters got dropped. It's hard to write in a detailed manner when I had to consider my characters were talking to someone much younger than themselves. Unless the child is directing the conversation, I usually don't do anything that would interest them.

AeronFarron said
Hello! Are you still accepting characters?

Always open!

I'll review your character in a little bit. Thanks for telling me it's been posted!

Jazzy said
Always open!I'll review your character in a little bit. Thanks for telling me it's been posted!

Thank you! And no problem.

Space Communist said
""...welp, that's my stupdity for ya. I must have missed that. Whatever revised editions I write will be posted there.""I see. Perhaps one that is heavily based off of the character will do?""Well, society has it's sick fellows. He's underweight, weak in strength, pale in the skin...I assumed that would be a big enough implication that he is not a very healthy man. He's just weaker than other people, and if someone else doesn't kill him, then likely some natural error will occur quickly enough. Other than that, there isn't much that ails him, other than being borderline ugly, which is really only a social issue.""Fair enough. Any recommendations?""Then more limitations should be added, of course. Perhaps I could make him much more kind-hearted and/or apathetic, therefore giving him a personal reason not to control others. Again, any suggestions?""Again, fair enough. If it's details you desire, it's details you'll get. Like I said, I'll post any revisions in the character deposit.

I also want to mention acrobatics. If your character has little muscle, he'll probably find some time doing tricks in the air. It does take muscle to get yourself effectively off the ground, along with muscle flexibility and muscle control. If your character tires out like you say he does, then doing backflips is definitely going to make him feel like someone kicked his ass.

As for your power, I made an empath before. While he could not control everyone's emotions (he could influence them, though), he could feel everyone's emotions when he looked at them. However, on top of his own emotions, looking into everyone and feeling their emotions is a drastic change. And this would happen dozens upon dozens of times a day. It's relentless. So my character had some sort of instability because of that, his head and body couldn't take all these mood fluctuations so he would be prone (even when he's not looking at anybody) to random mood swings and irrational anger or depression or unreasonably joyful and euphoric. Of course, he was a nice boy and all, but he had a hard time forming relationships with people because of his mood swings and mannerisms.

Space Communist said Fair enough. Any recommendations?

That is entirely up to you my friend. I suggest you look at some of the existing sheets so that you get an idea. And I think his power should be less of downright instantly changing emotions, and more of influencing them, or reading them.

AeronFarron, I like Quinn, but I'd like a little more elaboration on her power. Like, if she absorbed energy would she take damage from it or no? I also think she should have a limit to how much energy she can store instead of herself, and bad things (For her) will happen once she goes over it.

I have added more details. I hope they are sufficient. We'll (me too) be learning about her powers as we RP I think. She doesn't really know her limits since she is too scared to look for them. After the disaster with the electromagnetic spectrum, she wants to stick to what she knows, rather than deal with that.

Alright, I'll take it that she isn't a Sebastian Shaw type. She's accepted. I think she and Theresa will get along.

Her rating is

Energy 7

There's a recap somewhere if you want it.

Is my power revision acceptable? It keeps the speed, but takes away the durability.

I still think enhanced muscle/body control would be a more sensible development. Even with that ability, you can still move pretty fast.

Mr Allen J said
Alright, I'll take it that she isn't a Sebastian Shaw type. She's accepted. I think she and Theresa will get along.Her rating is 7There's a recap somewhere if you want it.

I think they will as well. Should I just have her entering the school or already settled in?

Well, it's the day after everyone has settled in, the first day of school. Though, it's towards the end and power training with Adam has concluded, everyone is in a capture the flag kind of game. If you want, I can add her to one of the teams. Otherwise I can engineer some event elsewhere for Quinn.

What would the event be?

I don't know. It'd probably be best if you just insert her in the CTF or wait until the timeskip.

Mr Allen J said
Well, it's the day after everyone has settled in, the first day of school. Though, it's towards the end and power training with Adam has concluded, everyone is in a capture the flag kind of game. If you want, I can add her to one of the teams. Otherwise I can engineer some event elsewhere for Quinn.

And she actually kinda is a Sebastian Shaw (had to look it up), just more versatile in some ways. She can enhance her strength (not speed) with her kinetic abilities, and can absorb kinetic energy as well as other energy sources for her own use. The main difference is that she cannot directly change the energy conversion in magnitude. However much energy she absorbs is how much energy is being released via kinetic energy. She can't really enhance it unless kinetic energy is being taken in and she adds her own internally created kinetic energy.

Mr Allen J said
I don't know. It'd probably be best if you just insert her in the CTF or wait until the timeskip.

Mk. In the meantime, I'll look through her power one last time to make sure I have adequately explained it.