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Daww, okay then, well I only mentioned that his mask is sort of the male equivalent of the Vocator Leader's mask, so it'll be fine. A shame that you got rid of all of the counterparts/friends of the characters you convinced me to make xD... (Although that's only three and I've abandoned two of them as well lol.)Speaking of Shin:


None of my chars had you as a friend :P

Ivano tried to kill you, and I can't recall Tyrell meeting any of your chars.
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None of my chars had you as a friend :PIvano tried to kill you, and I can't recall Tyrell meeting any of your chars.


D': Butbutbut they had a deep connection that spanned through several previous lives! (or well... their ancestors did at least)
And hey, don't just forget about Numiel, Nuriel and the rest of the Dynasty! (although none of them were really one another's friend xD) You might've abolished it, but that's no reason to just forget about dragging me into godhood rofl :'D
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Sorry ive been rather quiet in this thread but ive been working on other things, trying to keep up with the other two GMs, etc.

As for what people have been asking, Ellri covered it all. Magic, as far as its known in this world, is chanelled through relics. Any magic done without a relic is mostly smoke and mirrors, and its doubtful that it exists at all without relics.
The CSs all look good as far as i know but thats more Ellri's specialty.
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D': Butbutbut they had a deep connection that spanned through several previous lives! (or well... their ancestors did at least) And hey, don't just forget about Numiel, Nuriel and the rest of the Dynasty! (although none of them were really one another's friend xD) You might've abolished it, but that's no reason to just forget about dragging me into godhood rofl :'D


Oh I forgot about that. Also Ellri told me he's utilizing some of it, mainly the Kheris relic I don't want you to use as my new character will have that kinda relic(Though he won't have unlocked its potential yet and whether he goes good or evil depends on his interactions)
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Well, Here is my humble submission I hope I formatted everything correctly...

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One minor mistake, McHaggis: Amaryth is the Capital of Othea, not the capital of Kalnach. Other than that it should be good. By the way, nice to see you using formatting to make it easier to find different sections. Other than that one thing, we don't see anything that needs changing therein. Once that's fixed, feel free to post it up. First of all: nice to see you including numerous flaws that make sense and limit him noticeably. The one thing we feel is missing is his connection to the established lore. If the nations don't fit, tie him to the geography. While finer details change, its not likely that any major stuff changed. Mountain ranges may have wear, tear and growth, but they do not change on the grand scale in a span of mere centuries. Fix that, and we'd think it should be fairly good to go (unless, of course, the other GMs disagree).EDIT: would you mind adding some formatting to the CS to make it easier for people to browse? (bold, underscore, italics, those sorts of things)Lore:Anyone can write such. Other than Kalesia (which is a pet project of ours) and Da-Hyun and to some degree the Dominion of Idris (which are AlidaMaria's), most nations are entirely free for people to add to. Changes to those two-three should be checked with the people claiming them. Later we imagine that other places will have similar restrictions with different people. One of the chief goals here is that no lore contradicts other lore, and that it sticks roughly to the gameplans imagined by the GM-triune. Adding cities to Othea (and potentially other nations) is something people especially do not need to ask about. There aren't cities there yet because we've not defined them, not because they don't exist.


What do you mean, tie him into things? Specifically? I'd rather not try formatting at this moment, my PC is turbo slow right now.
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Connect him to the lore, freeshooter. Right now, he doesn't really have much of any connection to the lore. As formatting is done in raw code, it shouldn't strain your computer much. Bonding section names on the cs is sufficient.

The Gray Dust: did you read the earlier answers to your questions at all? We specifically stated that all characters have to be alive and human, not artificially animated beings.
Second, the clothing on that image doesn’t make sense in the setting. Those are undergarments plus a cloak, not full clothes.
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I added a bit to bio, will reformat later.
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What do you mean by bonding section names?
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What do you mean by bonding section names?


Bolding I think is what he means. Like Name, Age, Gender, etc.
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Ellri said
did you read the earlier answers to your questions at all? We specifically stated that all characters have to be alive and human, artificially animated beings. Second, the clothing on that image doesn’t make sense in the setting. Those are undergarments plus a cloak, not full clothes.


I'd like to add that while your concept is really interesting, especially the part about Umbra (but well, I'm a sucker for lore xD), I find it a bit disturbing that it appears to me that the relic has been forged three years ago. The secret of creating relics has been lost to time, so to me it would seem better if Morgan was 1. Human and 2. Locked in Umbra for a very, very long period of time, she was granted her relic which had been lost there as well, taught the ways of assassination but not anything else and pushed out into Azukhar to make some kills.

If this is already what you meant to say, then I'm sorry for summarising her history in such a crude way. However, I really have to agree with Ellri that she will have to be human. Perhaps a human with little emotion and social experience, molded to fit the relic (much like the Vocators are), but still... Deep dowm human.
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Alright, here's my lore! If anyone hasn't posted yet. A character concept is on the way, but I found this easier to do. Always open to ideas PMed or posted in the OOC.

The Haunted Hills


The Haunted Hills is not officially recognized as a nation by the Azukharian High Council, but unofficially it is a region of tainted decay, darkness and generally hell on earth for the Azukharians as a whole. Many have journeyed into the Hills' hellish wastes, and fewer have returned to tell the tale. Usually, the experience is so traumatic that the survivors are usually in a physically and mentally unfit state to give a full recount of their misadventures. Besides its dark nature, there is no general consensus between Azukharian scholars and the Holy Order of Idris about its origins. But there have been some eyewitness accounts from lost explorers and military patrols.

"Patrolling the border of the Haunted Hills ain't a walk in the park, I tell you. The sky turns blood red once you get a week's march away from it, and it darkens into permanent night once you're within eyeshot. The border between Azukhar and this hellish land is this huge, misshapen wall of black rock with this eerie drawbridge with what were probably watchtowers flanking it. A mound of something just barely peeks out from behind the rock. Sometimes, I don't know if my imagination is playing tricks on my mind because I see these faint blue torches flickering about for a few seconds. Maybe a will o' the wisp, I don't know. Who knows in the Haunted Hills?

The wall stretches out into the murky distance until you can see no more or if you're too creeped out to let your eyes venture further. When we set camp as close as possible to where the boys felt it was safe, it wasn't. In one night there were twenty cases of food poisoning from blackened rations, and four cases of demonic possession of which three our exorcist cast out. The fourth demon made his body run into the mist. I never saw him again. And of course, nightmares affected everyone. My report to you, mister ethics man, is that the Haunted Hills is absolutely MENTALLY AND PHYSICALLY UNSAFE FOR MILITARY PATROL."

- Captain Rorrick Elborne of the 117th Cohort of the Othean Royal Army, in an oral report to a representative of the Royal Ethics Committee

The Holy Order of Idris has its own explanation for the Haunted Hills, taken from their holy book The Thousand Tomes.

"Five hundred years later, when the Great Paladin Alor Hennith hath already ascendeth to the Divine Gates, and the Great Emperor Jalen the Last was in his twenty-fourth year of reign, the vile necromancer Lord Ghoul, servant of the Unspoken One, resurrected himself from his vanquished state from his war with Alor, through his Darkest Arts in the plains of Arythya, with one fault: he hath no eye in his left socket, it was said that that eye saw the most evil in himself. Then he surveyed the land, and found it horrendously pleasing in his horrid eyes, and crafted for himself a fortress that he might stay himself from the holy judgement of Idris. The good people of Arythya perished in one dark flame, and the Old Kingdom began to decay into ruin. The people cried out for Alor Hennith, the Valiant One, to descend the Stairs of Heaven and vanquish this new threat, but alas, Alor stayed his judgement. Then, Ghoul crafted a great cauldron, more than a thousand Angels in width, and mixed all his evilness, his vileness, his madness, into that cauldron. To complete his concoction, he found his Eye, and thrust it into the cauldron. And at that very moment, Azukhar broke asunder, yielding to Ghoul's evil, and all the people perished, and the Old Kingdom was no more.

And hence, from the Cauldron's Dark Moment, from Arythrya's once flat realm burst five hills, for the five Hated Deeds that every man hath committed, and if the said man does not yield to Idris, he will fall into the Great Abyss of the Unspoken One. And hark, here are the Hills, in kind and in number:

The Hill of Want, for those that wrongfully covet gold and immorality from others curry favor not with Idris,

The Hill of Death, for those that send innocents to death do unto themselves,

The Hill of Pride, for those that hold themselves above all others are condemned to be thrown to below all others,

The Hill of Sloth, for those that do not earn their lot will toil for it in the Abyss,

The Hill of Blasphemy, for those that preacheth against Idris are the worst in His eyes."

- Tome 506: 48-76

Meanwhile, scholars and sages dismiss Lord Ghoul and the Cauldron, but they agree that what formed the Haunted Hills probably was the epicenter of the cataclysm that ended the Old Kingdom, and that there was a country called Arythya, the precise history of the Emperor's reigns, and the Five Hills are geographically correct. Some people propose that the Hills were the location of the Old Kingdom's capital. But no one has come to definite facts... yet.
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I have a few comment on that, Bing, but I really like the general idea as well as the simple fact that you came up with lore xD Would you mind it if I send you a pm with my comments? (For the sake of not spamming the OOC)
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AlidaMaria said
I'd like to add that while your concept is really interesting, especially the part about Umbra (but well, I'm a sucker for lore xD), I find it a bit disturbing that it appears to me that the relic has been forged three years ago. The secret of creating relics has been lost to time, so to me it would seem better if Morgan was 1. Human and 2. Locked in Umbra for a very, very long period of time, she was granted her relic which had been lost there as well, taught the ways of assassination but not anything else and pushed out into Azukhar to make some kills.If this is already what you meant to say, then I'm sorry for summarising her history in such a crude way. However, I really have to agree with Ellri that she will have to be human. Perhaps a human with little emotion and social experience, molded to fit the relic (much like the Vocators are), but still... Deep dowm human.


Ah very well. A few edits to be made. This was actually a character from another RP from another time. And well done on using the first gender pronouns!
In a sense, Morgan is human, or rather was however (the whole idea would be for Morgan to learn how to become a human once more, as Morgan does show emotions and an inborn fanatical attachment to a person), in as such perhaps making Morgan a more human being would be fine, although I'd have to tweak the character concept a tad. Or perhaps go with the person who did create Morgan in lieu of using Morgan. As for the cloak and garb, well Morgan was put up to be a seductive femme-fatale (of unknown gender, hence finding the right outfit is difficult) however I suppose we can go with a more darkened aspect of things, creating a costume now becomes the issue. Perhaps something more...
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Yeah I can imagine that. Great to see that you're open for suggestions :)
Speaking of which, I have a few other suggestions for you.

How about the flow of time in Umbra works differently from that in Azukhar? That way, we could say that Morgan is... Let's say 25 years old (your call of course), speaking in Umbraïn time and appearance, but dissappeared from Azkhar as a child around 250 years ago. Basically, it would mean that she hasn't aged as much as she would have on Azukhar. That way she (yep, I'm just sticking with the 'she' even though Morgan is genderless, just for the sake of being practical xD) wouldn't know a thing about what's going on in the world, have no family members or connections on Azukhar and she won't have an idea where she came from or if that place even still exists. Moreover, spending 250 years in another realm would make her completely alienated to Azukhar and would make it very likely for her to become twisted in a way that she's barely human any longer. I suppose she could have gotten stuck in Umbra due to a previous wielder of the key. Figuring out how on Azukhar that happened is up to you (if you're going with this idea lol).

Another option is that as soon as she entered Umbra for the first time, she lost her memory, or she was too young to remember anything about her time on Azukhar.

As for Morgan's clothing, I think tights and a top or simply a closed cloak will help a lot to get rid of the undergarment feeling, without having to lose much of the sex-appeal (I suppose you made the picture yourself? If not, I can totally understand that even small changes will be rather hard to do.)

All of these are suggestions, so feel free to ignore or incorporate them :)
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AlidaMaria said
I have a few comment on that, Bing, but I really like the general idea as well as the simple fact that you came up with lore xD Would you mind it if I send you a pm with my comments? (For the sake of not spamming the OOC)


Go ahead. :D This WAS my first time writing lore so bound to be corrections.

@GMs, I recommend a lore sheet skelly. Pls? Would make reading different lores easier.
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BingTheWing said
Go ahead. :D This WAS my first time writing lore so bound to be corrections.@GMs, I recommend a lore sheet skelly. Pls? Would make reading different lores easier.


Good suggestion, I'll propose a format to my fellow gms. Though lore tends to be a bit unstructured, but we'll see what's possible :3

Also, a mega pm is coming your way as we speak xD (Also, I must say that you got the tone right for lore, it really sounded like an old scroll lol)
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The thing with clothes that do not cover properly is that they will end up biting you when bad weather comes around. We don't mind clothes making characters look seductive, so long as they make sense for a medieval society. Doesn't matter if you go for dress, tunic, pants, robes, etc... That can all depend on specific culture in one nation or other. The more balanced gender-wise a society is, the more likely it is for clothes to be practical for women too.
We doubt women dress equally to men in the Dominion of Idris, for example. After all, they are hardly more than property there. If you're going for "femme fatale", we would guess a suit of say, form-fitting leather would portray the right image. It could also serve as partial armor as a bonus. (think a bit like the mord-sith from the sword of truth series)
An easily discarded, thick woolen Cloak could add necessary protection from elements to such. Woolen lining (on the leather) might also be beneficial.
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AlidaMaria said
Yeah I can imagine that. Great to see that you're open for suggestions :)Speaking of which, I have a few other suggestions for you. How about the flow of time in Umbra works differently from that in Azukhar? That way, we could say that Morgan is... Let's say 25 years old (your call of course), speaking in Umbraïn time and appearance, but dissappeared from Azkhar as a child around 250 years ago. Basically, it would mean that she hasn't aged as much as she would have on Azukhar. That way she (yep, I'm just sticking with the 'she' even though Morgan is genderless, just for the sake of being practical xD) wouldn't know a thing about what's going on in the world, have no family members or connections on Azukhar and she won't have an idea where she came from or if that place even still exists. Moreover, spending 250 years in another realm would make her completely alienated to Azukhar and would make it very likely for her to become twisted in a way that she's barely human any longer. I suppose she could have gotten stuck in Umbra due to a previous wielder of the key. Figuring out how on Azukhar that happened is up to you (if you're going with this idea lol).Another option is that as soon as she entered Umbra for the first time, she lost her memory, or she was too young to remember anything about her time on Azukhar. As for Morgan's clothing, I think tights and a top or simply a closed cloak will help a lot to get rid of the undergarment feeling, without having to lose much of the sex-appeal (I suppose you made the picture yourself? If not, I can totally understand that even small changes will be rather hard to do.)All of these are suggestions, so feel free to ignore or incorporate them :)


very good suggestions. Yes, as you mentioned there actually is an aspect of time dilation in Umbra. Although I do not believe the rate to be 10:1, albeit one does have to ask what is the concept of an hour in world of shadows? It would be a viable option to have Morgan enter in as a child and progressively age in the Umbra, although the Umbra tends to make all things which reside in it permanent. And the issue of losing the Relic to Open the Umbra in the Umbra itself is akin to having lost a pair of keys inside the car... I suppose it could work and Morgan is the child of the original user of the relic died in the Umbra to escape the infighting years ago? Which would make Morgan physically around 25-28 but have merely survival instincts and basic communication skills. Thank you greatly for the ideas.

The cloak is actually a full body which goes all the way around to remove the undergarment feel of things (although I had to leave the cloak open to allow arms and legs and other things to be demonstrated, in as such the edges of the inner cloak are actually being pulled back, while the outer cape is being flung open on the stage left side.) And as for concerns of temperature and the elements, Morgan could simply reside in the Umbra should a blizzard set in, while living in the Umbra is difficult due to the nature of the realm as it seeks to keep you (the trees for example, are sentient beings which tend to move their ancient branches to entangle you and roots to trip you before ensnaring you between their woody malice and let you become an addition to the Fey Forest) it is far more forgiving with respect to the lack of weather, Please let not the image act as so much an interpretation but rather a guideline. The Real descriptor is in the text below which does describe the corset as actually a piece of armor I believe. I'll work on fitting Morgan with a more definitive gender ambiguous regalia in a moment.

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