No problemo, glad to have been able to help! ^_^ I'd say that you can edit your cs to see if f Bark and Ellri are okay with the ideas as well :) Also, I think the new concept looks great!

So... I lost everything as my laptop decided to simultaneously combust.

Will get to work on my char again.

Also trousers shouldn't hang below your ass in my opinion :P You'll also have to play it carefully as if you get into prolonged combat you're going to have to focus on your centre to keep yourself protected.

What Sep said. Those pants hanging like that leave you terribly vulnerable in combat. There's a reason that when not going with full body armor, people have always gone for protecting the torso. There's all sorts of organs inside it you would find rather inconvenient to get damaged. Not to mention, the torso is a big target that is easy to hit, no matter what your weapon is. Its only in Hollywood movies that you don't get hit in the torso if its insufficiently protected.

If you're going with the appearance being "femme fatale", then having the appearance being androgynous is a contradiction. The character could still be androgynous beneath the clothes, but the definition of "femme fatale" is "an attractive and seductive woman, especially one who will ultimately cause distress to a man who becomes involved with her." As such, looking androgynous is a contradiction.

We have some other comments, but not posting them yet as we're gonna discuss that with you Alida/Barks in the PM convo.

Name:Malich
Age: 19
Gender: Male
Faction/Allegiance: The flow of life/Order of Shadow
Relic Description: The brooch that pins his cloak together, ornamental and engraved. He can withstand being separated it depending on the distance. For example he can sleep with the brooch sitting beside him however if it leaves a radius of ten metres he begins to deteriorate. His powers can also still be summoned when the relic is very close however the powers decrease at being five metres away and stop completely at ten metres.

The orders theory behind the relic that there is a plain of existence opposite ours known simply as the "Dark Space" however other names are known for it. This is where the Order of Shadow believes those who die return to in the circle of life, for every constant in our space/time the polar opposite exists in the dark space, shadow is light and light is shadow, death is the beginning and birth is the end. When one dies in Azukhar their energy brings a into being something in the dark space, and vice versa. However for anyone who is able to enter the "Dark Space" everything is distorted due to the contradiction of something from our space time existing there and it seems naught but a phantom world. This is where his relic draws its power from.

Shadows, being the Dark Space leaking through to our own universe can be used to draw power from the dark space, with that the shadows can grow and be altered by him. As these shadows come from the dark space they are able to take on solid mass turning into weapons and protective markers. These shadows are harder to construct than those that have no mass and are merely for illusion. It is also rumoured that those who possess the relic have the ability to enter the dark space however the toll of entering such a place is extreme and dramatic ageing can occur or one can end up getting younger. Alternatively the user can get trapped or when trying to leave end up far further than they intended to go making it a poor means of teleportation without extreme skill or luck.
Appearance:
Flaws: Relatively new at solidifying shadow.
Due to the tie to the relic he cannot alter his own personal shadow or the shadow of anything he is holding.
Is still young so inexperienced at most things in life.
Like many others of the shadow under close scrutiny from the Church of Idris.
Powers rely primarily on instinct.
Skills:
Trained since a young age in combat/historical information.
Has the backup/financial support of the 200+ members of the order.
Some creatures tightly linked to the flow of life/Dark Space can be controlled by him (Most specifically Ravens)
Biography:
Malich, recently dubbed leader within the Order of Shadows was born into the orders estate within Amaryth. A large building with an extensive underground complex with various escape routes he was born into a life of secrecy. Like many who are born into the order and do not join he did not see the outside world until his tenth birthday, until then he remained in the tunnels being taught the ways of his people and the need for secrecy that their order held so dear. After several instances where other chapters of the order in neighbouring kingdoms had been destroyed by the Order of Idris. Only the fact that the only the respective chapters leaders knew where the others resided kept the Othean chapter a secret, and it is now the only one known to be in existence after communication has long ceased with the one in Kalesia.

On his twelth year like the other twelves and those before them he was taken into a large room, the room of the head of their order. The Orders creator and each twelve was given a Cloak to wear before taking a step to a pedestal and trying a broach. The task was to find the next Harbringer, he whose task it was to remove the impure in order to continue the cycle in the hopes that the Old Kingdom would be restored once again and they could learn from those who had came before them. When he donned the broach he disappeared from the room in a flurry of shadows. What happened he still doesn't know, however it was two weeks before he returned. TO an entirely different life.

He was seen as the defacto leader of the order, and underwent special counselling all the while he underwent more training, reading from ancient scrolls in how to use his power. Always in secret however. Despite this he has been a more public figure than those few who held the title before him. Seeing it as his duty to try and bring other ones to the cause he has travelled extensively trying to restart chapters in far off places and increase their number, though due to the presence of the Order of Idris the task has not been easy or overly succesful.

Seven years since the broach chose him he has tried to adjust the order to modern times, feeling that the secrecy is what is their undoing. People unwilling to trust are often untrusted in communities and they have tried to make a positive influence in a way of showing that they are the better choice.

Personality/motivation: The continued cycle of life in the belief that the old Kingdom will rise again and cleanse the world of all that is impure and evil. More openly it is known as simply continuing the cycle of life and cleansing the world of all that is impure and evil. The old Kingdom bit they keep to themselves.
Relations: Order of Shadows
Final Point - Secrets: The Order plans to bring back the Old Kingdom by creating an influx off life force moving into the Dark Space forcing those from the Old Kingdom to reemerge, this is said to require a great deal of life force to bring them back as they once were and that is one of the reasons many chapters have been destroyed as plots have been found out and those responsible killed. The last action done by the Order was the introduction of a plague, unfortunately for the order Othea managed to close many of its borders preventing plague carriers to enter.
Theme Song: Url

I probably have some edits to make on the actual history, you know how I hate them Ellri. Though if you want I can throw up a lore sheet on both the order and Dark space if you wish.

CS sheet on the way. Might take a while.

If this RP is still open, then sign me up!

SillyGoy said
If this RP is still open, then sign me up!

Tis indeed squire.

Ellri said
What Sep said. Those pants hanging like that leave you terribly vulnerable in combat. There's a reason that when not going with full body armor, people have always gone for protecting the torso. There's all sorts of organs inside it you would find rather inconvenient to get damaged. Not to mention, the torso is a big target that is easy to hit, no matter what your weapon is. Its only in Hollywood movies that you don't get hit in the torso if its insufficiently protected.If you're going with the appearance being "femme fatale", then having the appearance being androgynous is a contradiction. The character could still be androgynous beneath the clothes, but the definition of "femme fatale" is "an attractive and seductive woman, especially one who will ultimately cause distress to a man who becomes involved with her." As such, looking androgynous is a contradiction. We have some other comments, but not posting them yet as we're gonna discuss that with you Alida/Barks in the PM convo.

its the duality of the appearance. Not quite a contradiction at all. The question is in the perception of others, rather than of its creator. My goal for the character is to be androgynous, however another character may perceive the same character as a femme fatale which is also part of the goal of the design is to make such a suggestion yet leave nothing more than it. Similarly with respect for the need for armor, I hardly doubt Morgan would be in for open combat, too many variables to contend with. Regardless I suppose we can make any altercations required, please feel free to ask away.

The Grey Dust said
its the duality of the appearance. Not quite a contradiction at all. The question is in the perception of others, rather than of its creator. My goal for the character is to be androgynous, however another character may perceive the same character as a femme fatale which is also part of the goal of the design is to make such a suggestion yet leave nothing more than it. Similarly with respect for the need for armor, I hardly doubt Morgan would be in for open combat, too many variables to contend with. Regardless I suppose we can make any altercations required, please feel free to ask away.

The problem is that if you fail at taking out your target, you're going to get caught in a fight.

Most interesting we have chosen similar elements of play. Dark Space and the Umbra, I wonder if there is a Dark Space for the Umbra, or an Umbra in the Dark Space?

Dark space might not actually exist. It's a theory.

@The Grey Dust: Me and the other gms are currently debating about your character and whether introducing the concept of Umbria is a possibility or not. We'll let you know as soon as we reach a consensus.

AlidaMaria said
@The Grey Dust: Me and the other gms are currently debating about your character and whether introducing the concept of Umbria is a possibility or not. We'll let you know as soon as we reach a consensus.

Excellent. That's fine. Working on Developing alternative Chars as well. Perhaps an islander with a penchant for puzzles.

The Grey Dust said
Excellent. That's fine. Working on Developing alternative Chars as well. Perhaps an islander with a penchant for puzzles.

It's great to hear that you're already working on an alternative! Especially since I have to say that me and my two fellow GMs have decided that Umbra shouldn't be introduced into the story (especially not at this stage), seeing how it will provide Morgan with rather OP-powers and a whole lot of extra lore (which we are trying to avoid after the first Relics ended due to too much lore).

All in all, we're basically asking you to let go of Morgan and create a new character, sorry Dust.

Not a problem.
Going through my files for something I may have already in stock if not, I should be able to create a new character in a few days time.
Although if I work fast enough, time may slow down... So perhaps to save the SPC, I should work at my leisure?

Poor Morgan, abandoned again. Oh well, and I was so looking forward to having to roleplay without use of pronouns...

Name: Kaiden Belzer

Age:

Gender: Male

Faction/Allegiance: Partially to Leviathan, mostly to himself

Relic Description: http://www.notonthehighstreet.com/system/product_images/images/001/272/515/original_bell-necklace.jpg

A slightly tarnished brass bell necklace that gives Kaiden the ability to manipulate and create soundwaves. The relic allows him, as a secondary effect, to create ultrasound waves to bolster his echolocation skills. He also noticed that he can amplify or decline the volume of sounds, but only if the sounds around him are not disruptive and non-rhythmic (such as someone suddenly screeching in the middle of a crowd), and he is not distracted while in the process; volume manipulation will need a significant amount of focus to make it work, and if he gets interrupted, he has to start all over. Its other capabilities are not known yet, as he has not been able to utilize its full potential due to his ignorance of Relics and its powers.

Appearance: (Kaiden has green eyes, will have a dark, earth colored satchel belt decorates his hips, which keep his black, leather trousers on his waist, while holding twelve of his throwing knives and two of his steel short swords. There are also leather shin guards for his legs, complete with worn and torn leather boots. He stands at around 6’0”, and has a lean, yet muscular build.)



Flaws: First of all, he is blind. He knows nothing of color, and bounty hunting, which involves constantly searching for targets and keeping their faces in mind, is not of his forte. His gray, indifferent morals can seem very disturbing to a lot of people, as he truly does not care for anyone other than those he deems close. Sexual violence is his main trigger, and whenever somebody hints or mentions it, he becomes queasy and almost physically sick to the stomach. He is physically strong, but not as tough as more melee oriented warriors, so he can take a couple of hits, but not a lot. He also tends to break a lot of women's hearts, mostly without remorse, as he pickpockets them or steals their jewelry from under their noses.

Skills: Kaiden has a rather magnetic pull on his soft words and gentle voice. He is quite the charmer, for both men and women alike, and his approachable demeanor adds to this quality. None of his previous partners, however, can rule out his skills in bed, and all of them like to recommend a more “hands-on” experience rather than just a show and tell. ;) His impeccable hearing also makes for great auditory learning and memory, so he can often recall things said to him at the snap of a finger or two. He has mastered echo location for his nearby surroundings, and oftentimes has no trouble whatsoever getting around places as long as he possesses a producer of sound, or a walking stick. Poisons aren’t his biggest forte, but he knows minor ones that, when striking an opponent, causes them to feel light-headed and become feverish after about twenty minutes if they actively do combat with him. He also has very little problems being sneaky, silent, and discreet.

Biography: Kaiden is the adopted son of a pair of humble bell makers who ran a semi-prosperous shop in the small, uncharted village of Yorstrum, near the hills of Ovesh. They found him, a young, abandoned, wrinkled mess of flesh, wrapped around a fishnet and hung loosely around the lowest branch of a tree like a sick, pathetic attempt at a joke for the bears and panthers that roamed the forests. Feeling extremely sorry for the poor infant, they took him under their care despite the fact that their taking in another member of the family would put a significant strain on their reasonably comfortable lifestyle.

The boy was born blind, unable to see the multiple shades of color within the world; his older brother, Oswald, who was five years old at the time that Kaiden was one and a half, noticed his disability when he tried to deter his attention from a the inviting face of a brick wall. Oswald tried to step in front of him and wave his hands “No”, but the lad simply bumped into him instead and fell onto his bottom. The elder shook both hands frantically for a while, from side to side and in a circle, in front of the younger, but neither his eyes nor head moved whatsoever. Oswald ran to his father to report his observations, worrying that Kaiden might’ve been hurt because of his non-responsiveness. The man went to investigate this strange behavior, and tried to get the attention of his younger son by taking a wooden spoon and waving it in front of his assumed field of vision: no attempt to grab the object, and neither did his eyes nor expression even hint that he saw them at all. However, when their father picked up a small dinner-time bell from the table and rung it softly a little ways away from his ear, the child immediately perked up and responded by hobbling in the direction of the sound. This discovery struck the father by immense surprise, and the realization that he knew nothing about how to care for a boy with a vision disability made him greatly anxious, and went to discuss the matter with his wife. They decided to put the woman’s small brass bell necklace, passed down from her father, around his neck in case he lost his way as a temporary solution to his navigation problems. That way, if he did stray too far from the guiding reach of his parents, they could easily find and lead him back to safety. Never did they realize that this small, seemingly insignificant trinket would be the key to transform him into an individual above and beyond their initial expectations.

Over the years Kaiden grew up to be a gentle and friendly young boy. His echolocations developed immensely and he was able to establish an audio map of his surroundings through the constant sound pings emitted by his loosely hanging bell necklace. In fact, he even became a big asset to his parents’ store, as his higher sensitivity to sound greatly helped the bell crafters in fine tuning their products more accurately. The couple often took caravan rides to trade with the wealthier Da-Hyuni, and because of his contributions to the growth of their success, they often took him along and left the disgruntled, highly jealous Oswald to hold the front at home. In fact, the elder brother got so envious of all the attention his younger sibling received, and demanded that he come along on the next planned trip. Ignorant of the reason for his outburst, the parents happily let him come along, and wondered why he didn’t express his desires in the first place.

When they were halfway through the Da-Hyuni port trade route, bandits ambushed and attacked their caravan. They descended from the trees, slaughtered their horses and rider, and bound and dragged the family out of the vehicle and into the middle of a small clearing. They discussed openly between themselves about how they should deal with the group; a lot of bickering issued back and forth, from hanging the group by the trees for the bears and panthers, to throwing them into a river with their limbs tied together. Suddenly, the snapping, arguing voices came to a quiet hush, as a female figure made her way to the middle of the bandit circle. Most of the men stood at least a head taller than her, but the hard, weathered edges of her face, her fierce auburn hair, and her astonishing three-lined scar that ran deep across her face melded together to display a commanding, dominating aura. With authoritative strides, she silently looked at each of the family with a judging, condescending glare. A couple moments later, she positioned herself in the middle of the group, and opened her mouth to announce a verdict. Suddenly, however, Kaiden inched himself forward on his knees as best as he could, turned to face the leader of the bandits, and courageously offered himself as a to-be-warrior on their clan. The men exploded with mocking laughter, and the woman simply shoved the boy to the side with her foot, completely unamused, and commanded her subordinates to hang them by the necks as a treat for the lions. Undeterred, the boy threw himself upon the ground between the outlaws and his family and blocked their entry. He begged and he pleaded, and told them that he would grind his bones to the ground in training just so that his family would live. He declared, word after word, his promise of unparalleled dedication to the clan’ name; the lower bandits found his persistence to be annoying, and moved to chop his puny head off, but the head brigand thought his determination and almost suicidal bravery to be an admirable and useful trait. She decided to take him up on his offer, and unbound his family to be set free. His parents and brother tried to change the conditions of the bargain, but the bandit leader threatened them with total slaughter. With much reluctance and guilt in their hearts, they left fate to decide the future of their dearest son.

Personality/motivation: Kaiden is generally a very gentle and kind man. He’s also a friendly guy who likes to get along with and get to know other people. In addition, he’s a guy who likes the feel of a touch – he might come off as “weird” to some people who are not used to his disregard for physical personal space. He tends to be very polite, rarely cussing, and tends to try and deliver his point as straight, honest and concise as possible. If he can’t find a word he’s looking for to accurately describe his words, he can get a little stuck in his word search and can blank out on occasion. Snapping his fingers together helps him think better when he’s a little lost, though.

As nice of a guy as he is, he doesn’t particularly care whole-heartedly for others that are outside his circle of friends or family. Sure, he might come off as friendly, but if something bad happens to someone who he considers a stranger or an acquaintance, he isn’t disturbed at all; anyone who is not of close, emotional distance within him, he considers disposable and unimportant. Even though he may act really friendly, he is wary of people he hasn’t met before, and will take ample steps to observe their words and meanings, and their behaviors, and use these against them in case they turn out to be enemies; he is particularly brutal to anyone who crosses his path, despite the fact that he tries to avoid conflict.

He has a soft spot for animals, but despises children; he does a very good job of hiding it, though. He thinks arrogant people are a funny thing: they are simply about to burst at the seams being full of themselves, ready to pop with a single touch of a sharp, candid tongue. He is not intimidated by them, or most anything except the few dark things that can reach the far back, shadowy crevices of his mind. On the other hand, he thinks people who belittle themselves sincerely are quite annoying, and should get a self-esteem check and develop one, or shut up.

Relations: None as of now

Final Point - Secrets: He has sexually violated someone in the past.

Theme Song: http://youtu.be/J_5OQ1NEmlk?list=PL9beQJG-aPJ25kF94h3-wIJWfywf3XrYa

Have any more room?

Yes, we still have more.

I want for my character to be a priest. What's the religion around Othea?

Edit: I will just make my own.

Closest thing s priest you could have could be from the Order of idris.