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Lalliman said
Looks like we posted at the same time. Please read the post above yours.


Ty. Ill edit immediately

Though, in reguards to his weight, he is supposed to be extremely thin, to the point where he is disgusting to look at.
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Notdeadyet,

I read your revised character and it seems like you are trying to make him a high-end power character. That's fine if that is your intent, but the entirety of your powers are not cohesive. It feels like you have taken bits and pieces to make an overpowered amalgam. Your history as written doesn't account for any of those powers, your ability to apparently summon things nor does it explain how you have a mud-based body with energy eyes.

I am 'old school' T1, and I understand powerful characters, but every character I have fought or allied with has a cohesion in their powers. You label Psi as the essence of your characters existence, in your characters world, that's fine you are in effect saying you can create and destroy things with a thought. In effect you are giving yourself a shade below god-like power. Again that';s fine for a high tier power character, But because you have a scattered approach too powers and instead of focusing on one or two aspects of your powers you can do everything and apparently exceptionally well.

While I don't find your character overly powered in terms of high tier characters he is far too much for anyone to fight because you are all over the place with your powers,. IMHO you should focus on the psi and terror arts, develop those into a structured and cohesive whole and get rid of the sue. Then your character will have a much more organic feel and be far more challenging over all.

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Skallagrim said
Notdeadyet,I read your revised character and it seems like you are trying to make him a high-end power character. That's fine if that is your intent, but the entirety of your powers are not cohesive. It feels like you have taken bits and pieces to make an overpowered amalgam. Your history as written doesn't account for any of those powers, your ability to apparently summon things nor does it explain how you have a mud-based body with energy eyes.I am 'old school' T1, and I understand powerful characters, but every character I have fought or allied with has a cohesion in their powers. You label Psi as the essence of your characters existence, in your characters world, that's fine you are in effect saying you can create and destroy things with a thought. In effect you are giving yourself a shade below god-like power. Again that';s fine for a high tier power character, But because you have a scattered approach too powers and instead of focusing on one or two aspects of your powers you can do everything and apparently exceptionally well. While I don't find your character overly powered in terms of high tier characters he is far too much for anyone to fight because you are all over the place with your powers,. IMHO you should focus on the psi and terror arts, develop those into a structured and cohesive whole and get rid of the sue. Then your character will have a much more organic feel and be far more challenging over all.Skall


Understood. This character is suppose to be extremely strong as you mentioned. Perhaps seeing the character in use will also help. The sites ive come from, nobody has complained about a distancship between Jynxs and his powers. None the less, i apreciate the criticism, and shal continue working on the character. When i get a chance, im eager to post "Kent" as well. I just want my op'd screw around character to be done well, so i have experience and examples when i make my main.

Ill add to his bio section. You gotta figure, everything in the first box was written hastedly as i tried to get him into a different rp as a teacher role. I only included info relevant to the job.
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Look at my Skallagrim character if you want to see how a high-level PC power set fits together. My Ossuary has him listed there, his powers Seidhr and Galdhr are two different powers but they are cohesive and work together very well with the concept of the character.
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LeeRoy, tell me what character you want to fight. I don't care which one you choose just tell me which one of my characters you want to tussle with so I can refresh my memory with them and review their skills and powers.
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I'd be fine with either Dou'Far Klaast or General Freedom.

I never really got to see much of Skallagrim himself, so I really have no opinion on him.

Also, Laios. I posted.
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Alright General Freedom then it is. I already have a thread up, waiting for Melon. I shall create another one for our duel.

** Edit- The Worth of a Man is our battle ground.
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No Ethel post yet? Guess I'll wait a bit.
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Yeah, just give me a bit of time. I have another post I need to make, then I'll make sure to make Ethel's post. Check for it in the Saffron plains within the next hour
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It's getting to late for me. If I post tonight I will be horrible. I'll wait for tomorrow after work. If you get it posted before I go to work tomorrow morning I'll look it over and come up with something.
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I meant to have it up earlier, but ran into some bug problems around the house. Shit was naaaaaaasteh. I hope you sleep well!
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It's a bit strange that everyone seems to have decided to congregate together into one messy big fight, something that doesn't tend to work very well I've found.

As a side note, The Weeper has been chilling in the Ash Valley for about six days now, I might have him build a house or something if he's left alone for much longer.
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Seeing as how no one can really do anything until Drall's spike wall comes down or Arty gets out of the cave, would everyone be okay with me going ahead and posting the cave-in/teleport scenario?
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No, hold on. I'm about to post. After that you can probably go.
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@Melon. Might be a little bit of a wait though, got a couple things to deal with.

And yeah, I'm also a little concerned with how that cluster's gonna work out. Anything with more than four characters tends to get really hard to coordinate, even outside of combat RPs.
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Tantalum said
About time I situated my character somewhere, now that the site's back up. Awesome that Mahz sorted that so quickly.Seems like the easiest spot to enter would be versus The Weeper (what with the main thread being stuffed right now), though that power of his makes me a little hesitant. Mikael's mood already swings by the second, and I'm unsure how clearly I would be able to exaggerate that in writing. If you're okay with that, Melon, then I'm game -- else I'll be glad to fight any other <T5 character in the Swamps.


Yeah, that's fine. The point isn't that The Weeper's power controls anyone else's emotions, it just means those emotions should have more of an effect on the actions of the character (though that will always be up to an individual, I'm never going to suggest a character should do something because of how they're feeling, this is just a chance for people to learn to allow that side of a character to impact a fight, something I see as somewhat lacking in a lot of characters, probably due to a lot of playing to win, which is fair enough, though slightly bad story telling.)
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Did we agree on the cave-in?
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Important and Drall are the only ones that haven't weighed in on it yet, but I think if they haven't by tonight I'm going to go ahead and go for it.
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Sure sure, I'll write it out, seeing how I havent posted in a bit.
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The cavein is fine
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