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Ellri said
this is the point we'd insert a whimsical grin.


Allow me:

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I prefer this, it's much more intellectual, and a better reflection of my inner self:

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I believe I will be able to post tomorrow since my exams end then.
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With Alida dropping out... We're wondering if there's anyone willing to step up a little to help advance the plot. We know Fallen's helping out, but we also know she's got enough on her GM plate...

Also, don't be afraid to discuss random stuff here. The OoC is far too quiet.
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Myth might come into town soon. Depends on if my writer's block is on or off.
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ok.

We've begun writing for a new IntCk to try to get some fresh blood in here.
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Ok, we posted up that new IntCk. You'll find it here:
http://www.roleplayerguild.com/topics/73407/posts/ooc?page=1
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I posted a character sheet on the character sheet page, but was that a mistake? either way its there for you to look at.
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It'd have been preferred if you posted it here first, but thats too late now. We'll give you a semi-quick review.

First of all, we made a mistake in the CS thread. Its been mentioned somewhere else that we don't want further characters who are not aligned with some pre-existing faction. At this point, the preferred factions for people to be aligned with would be:
The Order of Idris
The Kalesian Empire
The Kingdom of Othea

Intriguing relic design. We're rather skeptical to the idea of it granting immortality, even taking into account the fact that it doesn't mean invulnerability. Also, relics either bond with someone, or they utterly ignore them. They can't be forced into a bond. Please give him an actual age. Relics can extend lifespan, but it is always at a cost.

The abilities do feel a touch too powerful, though. Combining the fact that it prevents him from dying of age, can kill most anyone, summon powerful spirits who have powerful abilities and provide him with a powerful weapon makes it extremely powerful. It doesn't feel like it has sufficient balancers. We would recommend cutting down a bit on the boons and adding some flaws to it.

Here are some suggestions you might explore to lessen the overpowering abilities of the relic:
- Perhaps it draws on his spirit/soul, making him somewhat wraithlike (think a bit like what the Morgul knife was trying to do to Frodo in Lord of the Rings)
- perhaps instead of summoning physical beings with mighty powers, it can summon a few spirits of those it has consumed? Those spirits would probably not last long before they return "home", but could be rather ravenous and potentially very dangerous to their targets (think a bit like powerful wraith-spirits). You could perhaps think up "roles" for said spirits, roles like defend, attack, spy, etc.
- Explore concepts where it could perhaps change his personality or skills rather than grant actual powers.

The scythe in itself feels too powerful Anything with "impossible" in it calls up our skepticism.
Also, we'd very much prefer it if you made him less grim-reaper like. That entity has nothing to do with the world of Azukhar.

Appearance: Try to go with a somewhat more realistic appearance. The laws of physics and anatomy still exist here. Aside from the relics themselves, the world of Azukhar is a plain medieval society, following many of the norms, but with some nations having significant cultural deviances (gender equality, for example)

History: The people all know about relics. In Othea they've in recent years become less welcome due to the Order of Idris gaining more influence, but the people still know of them. Also, relics don't have age-restrictions (other than the obvious of not activating for infants). They can activate for essentially anyone. The older he is, the more people knew of relics. The people of Azukhar are all descendants of people who lived in the Old Kingdom.

Personality/Motivation:
This doesn't work. Refusal and inability to connect with others inevitably results in characters that are loners, that don't get involved in the rest of the plot. Give him a realistic personality, please.
Relations: See previous point.

one final note: Once bonded, it can be very dangerous to get separated from one's relic. If the distance is too great, it is lethal.
Edit: Having relations does not mean that your character has to be an outgoing fellow. Not everyone are suited for playing such. (ourselves included)
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I really enjoy this RP, you guys, but I'm going to have to drop this. There is too much going on in my life right now, so I have to lighten my RP load and I'm sorry that I had to leave this one, but this one requires the most which I can't give right now. You may use Lavica as you wish, but please retain her original personality as I worked hard on her. I hope this RP does well. (:
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That is most unfortunate to hear, Apokalipse. Should you ever get more time available, don't hesitate to return. Considering that your character right now isn't tied down to any other, we don't see any need to meddle with her.
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:| I'm waiting on her reply, lmao.
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drop by the IRC, maki. in #aftermath. the people there can help ya fix that.
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Is anyone here willing to help me get Kaiden out of flirting with air?
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Ellri said
It'd have been preferred if you posted it here first, but thats too late now. We'll give you a semi-quick review.


I was actually going to redesign my character anyways! I knew I rushed it, and I didn't like the way it turned out. I want to keep the immortality because his character design doesn't suit him without it, but I'll remove any references to Grim Reaper. Rather I'll put him as someone who's been in the shadows, helping out on quests from time to time but mainly just wandering the lands in search of information. I'll figure out a way to make the immortality plausible, but I'll probably change him from being really old to less then a century old. It'll be better if he starts young.

Thanks for the help :)
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Ohk I finished my my redesigned character, I decided to completely change him an his skills. Anyways, I'll be situated in Othea.
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Despair. We'll PM you a link to the CS review. It proved easier to review in a Google doc. We also had another relics player jump in to help.
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Soooo I'm going to ask again, does anyone want/need some interaction with their PC? Kaiden is pretty free, and he needs to get out of flirting with ghosts.
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Maki Casanova said
Soooo I'm going to ask again, does anyone want/need some interaction with their PC? Kaiden is pretty free, and he needs to get out of flirting with ghosts.


Currently Roan's collapsed, bleeding out and unable to move so if I could, I would. Though likely there was a few people as well as a dog who ran out of the alley Roan ran down, so it's not unreasonable that could create a bit of a scene you can draw on?
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